by Kushal Poddar
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January 19, 2008

Secret Seashore

January 03, 2009 09:41 PM EST (Updated: January 04, 2009 01:24 AM EST)
views: 214 | comments: 58

 

SecretSeashore


(To Julia)

Framed within the coconut leaves

the breaking waves at the gold sandbar

play with sunshine on rest.

 

Is it your own secret place

where your heart takes a tan

under a sun not touched by us?

 

She tries to measure her answer

keeps one hand under her words

as if they will fall down softly.

The fear of losing everything,

internal to her self, being.

 

I sit beside a lost body

of a cautious mind supine on sand.

The sun on the playful beach stops

to say goodbye for the water

now has the shade of melted gold.

 

The secret places speak themselves.

She won't have to find broken phrases.

© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

 

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Comments: 58

Kathryn E. Jan 3, 2009, 9:43pm EST
Featured in the Triple Name Club.
Kimberly Ripley Jan 3, 2009, 9:45pm EST
Lovely. Introspective.
Peter Joseph Swanson Jan 3, 2009, 9:54pm EST
Our hearts aways need a tan, huh ???
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 3, 2009, 9:57pm EST
Exquisite. I think we all have our own secret gardens/seashores.
Karen F. Jan 3, 2009, 9:57pm EST
Very nice reading...
Georgiana S. Jan 3, 2009, 9:58pm EST
love the secret Garden theme
Cholette W. Jan 3, 2009, 10:19pm EST
Thank you
Lin B. Jan 3, 2009, 10:26pm EST
Thank you for sharing it with us.
Sarah Honenberger Jan 3, 2009, 10:26pm EST
Poddar: Good ideas, though you've missed some commas and verb subject matches. Waves is plural, needs plural verb, 'play.' Write on, friend.
Linda T. Jan 3, 2009, 10:32pm EST
sometimes secret places and things are good for the soul
Nora Davenport Jan 3, 2009, 10:36pm EST
Beautiful poem.....really touches the soul!
Risa G. Jan 3, 2009, 10:42pm EST
What a pretty poem.
JOHN BECK Jan 3, 2009, 10:48pm EST
Beautiful depiction of a reserved, guarded, quiet individual who keeps her thoughts to herself. Also this is a lovely description of a sunset marking the time of day. Well written, Poddar.
Beth - Doing God's work Daily J. Jan 3, 2009, 10:49pm EST
Thanks for sharing on Getting to 3000 Together
Jennifer Lee Jan 3, 2009, 10:49pm EST
Wonderfully penned. I love it and you do touch my soul. Thank you.
My favorite stanzas are the first and the second ones. You are a true talent and a dear friend.
Cheers, Julia
Sheila J. Jan 3, 2009, 10:51pm EST
Your seashore imagery is very strong! Thanks for sharing.
Jennine D. Jan 3, 2009, 10:53pm EST
I think we all need a secret place to go to at times. Beautiful
F. Jeanette c. Jan 3, 2009, 11:11pm EST
Pod, you have such a unique flair for poetry.

10 4 u
Deloris Wright Jan 3, 2009, 11:16pm EST
It soumds like a special place indeed. Thank you , great poem
Robert - just a simple man - B. Jan 3, 2009, 11:23pm EST
Me thinks me know who this is wrote for.
And it's very good.
And ver deserving.
Robert - just a simple man - B. Jan 3, 2009, 11:24pm EST
Or at least the lass who inspied it.
Austin Cushing Jan 3, 2009, 11:54pm EST
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Michael Harvey Jan 4, 2009, 12:10am EST
Congrats on another great thought provoking poem.
t b. Jan 4, 2009, 12:35am EST
"She sells sea shells by the sea shore"
Elsie Duggan Jan 4, 2009, 12:52am EST
Very beautiful and gentle Poddar,
lynn a. Jan 4, 2009, 12:53am EST
This is beautiful, Kushal, and so sensitive. I think this is one of my favorites.
Sherrie H. Jan 4, 2009, 12:55am EST
Very touching.
KC Klein Jan 4, 2009, 1:17am EST
sand bar is one word: sandbar

Nicely drawn
vijay kumar Jan 4, 2009, 1:22am EST
'The secret places speak themselves'...
Skilfully crafted and beautiful. Love the images, Poddar.
regina k. Jan 4, 2009, 2:37am EST
so lovely
Sue T. Jan 4, 2009, 2:50am EST
Beautifully crafted ~ there is nothing more special than spending time in your own secret place.
Svetlana Goryacheva Jan 4, 2009, 3:58am EST
Excellent, dear Poddar! ;-) I think every one should have a "secret place" like that to withdraw... inside, if not outside.

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Lisa Frost Jan 4, 2009, 5:06am EST
beautiful images and well woven!
Pam S. Jan 4, 2009, 8:43am EST
Wonderful!
James Stemmle Jan 4, 2009, 9:36am EST
Poddar:

I love the stanza which has the girl keeping her hand under her words so they don't fall.

cheers

Jim
Rachel W. Jan 4, 2009, 11:06am EST
Very nice
Jennifer Lee Jan 4, 2009, 11:17am EST

Girly Comments & Graphics

AGAIN!
I had to come back and read it once more. It is ever so lovely, you are simply too kind! Cheers and love, Julia
Nancy Biri Jan 4, 2009, 11:20am EST
nice poem
Teresa A. Jan 4, 2009, 1:15pm EST
Very interesting. Thanks
Haim Kadman Jan 4, 2009, 2:11pm EST
A lovely poem Poddar, now that you've told us her secret we'll crowd her lonely shore...
Elizabeth H. Jan 4, 2009, 3:16pm EST
Beautiful images. Thanks.
Cheryl W. Jan 4, 2009, 3:40pm EST
Beautiful poem, my friend..
Vivian A. Jan 4, 2009, 8:10pm EST
Wonderful contemplation.
Angela A. Jan 4, 2009, 8:49pm EST
Absolutely beautiful, dear friend.
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Dorothy H. Jan 4, 2009, 9:03pm EST
Very nice! Thanks! 10!
Rony J. Jan 4, 2009, 9:03pm EST
Your unique style commands full attention, my friend keep coming with great poems
thank you
Blessings
Janell R. Jan 4, 2009, 9:18pm EST
This is just beautiful, Poddar.
Sandi S. Jan 4, 2009, 11:11pm EST
"The secret places speak themselves.

She won't have to find broken phrases."



What a great line! There is so much to say, but it will be said without a word.
Nettie R. Jan 5, 2009, 12:22am EST
secret places in the sun....makes me feel warm, cozy & safe! Thanks for posting.
blaine d. Jan 5, 2009, 6:20pm EST
captiva island, sandabel ,clearwater florida, all i live by, beautiful!
Alison H. Jan 5, 2009, 11:01pm EST
Very nice. You can see into our hearts, Kushal. I wish to be on a beach like that where it's warm and the wind isn't blowing.....
Shelbia C. Jan 7, 2009, 12:01am EST
wonderful writing
Sheila Deeth Jan 7, 2009, 1:36am EST
Lovely!
Austin Cushing Jan 8, 2009, 10:16pm EST
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Val G. Jan 9, 2009, 1:29am EST
Very nice....
Michelle W. Jan 9, 2009, 11:27am EST
Heart takes a tan ... oh my great image!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !
Sharon B. Jan 13, 2009, 3:33pm EST
sorry for the generic comment... trying to catch up with almost 1000 e-mails in here
Felicia R. Jan 14, 2009, 1:44pm EST
Hello :o),

I just wanted to stop by since I am finally going through what is now listed as under 4,000 pieces of gather new mail that is sitting in my inbox on here.

With that mentioned I just came across either a mailing from you yourself, or someone else brought this piece to my attention. You or they felt that your creation should be shared with the gather community, which I am very glad that it was passed on to me to view. So I wanted to say Thank you for taking the time out of your busy day to publish it here on gather for us to all view. :o)

As well before I leave you I wanted to wish you a Happy New Year... in 2009 :o)

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