by Kushal Poddar
Member since:
January 19, 2008

Twenty odd years

April 25, 2009 10:19 PM EDT (Updated: April 26, 2009 10:18 PM EDT)
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Twenty odd years

Small palms are puffy, pink

they clap together

as if involuntarily.

Laughter peels the hard world,

the city, the traffic…

it knows no reason

and weakens his knees.

I am bemused to see

something almost forgotten.

“May I know your name?”

He looks at me; turns to

the entrance of his home.

“Mom said I should not talk

to strangers like you.”

“I am no stranger?”

“Who are you then?”

“I was you twenty seven

years ago.”

© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar


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Comments: 41

Nancy Biri Apr 25, 2009, 10:24pm EDT
Nice
JOHN BECK Apr 25, 2009, 10:29pm EDT
You got me with that one, Kushal. What a conversation we could have with our 27 year younger selves.
Debbie W. Apr 25, 2009, 11:24pm EDT
Very nice
Cheryl W. Apr 25, 2009, 11:31pm EDT
Good one, Poddar!
mandy sedinger Apr 25, 2009, 11:46pm EDT
nice
Jo N. Apr 25, 2009, 11:51pm EDT
Very nice!
Van N. Apr 26, 2009, 12:02am EDT
Beautiful written, this work reminds me the movie "The Kid" :)
jewi lim Apr 26, 2009, 12:32am EDT
Thanks for sharing..
Elsie Duggan Apr 26, 2009, 12:43am EDT
I love this one, if only our memories could rewind like that
Jennifer Lee Apr 26, 2009, 1:16am EDT
After reading this poem, I had to go and look for your birthday as I had a feeling it was near. This time my intuition was accurate. It is not always the case. Great thought provoking piece. I like it.
Thank you for posting to our group.
Stephanie S. Apr 26, 2009, 3:09am EDT
very nice!
Shelbia C. Apr 26, 2009, 3:26am EDT
Thanks for posting to Writing Reservoir.
Sorry for the generic post, but my box is a bit overloaded so I am trying to catch up.
John Philipp Apr 26, 2009, 7:17am EDT
Lovely poem, Poddar.

You could turn it into a story or a longer poem a la The Time Traveler's Wife.
Kathryn E. Apr 26, 2009, 8:31am EDT
Aww, this pulls at my heart in the best way, Kushal.

Featured in the Triple Name Club.
Ladybounty ~. Apr 26, 2009, 9:00am EDT
This is wonderful Poddar!
Kapow! Now that is power to shift the perspective of soul~
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Apr 26, 2009, 11:06am EDT
It sounds as if you've been reading The Clown's work. He frequently speculates on meeting himself in real real life.

Thank you for posting this to The Surreal Circus.
Beth G. Apr 26, 2009, 11:10am EDT
This is great! It's funny how a person changes over time.
Sharon P. Apr 26, 2009, 11:36am EDT
Wish I could go back and tell myself happier times were coming in the future.
Joyce T. Apr 26, 2009, 12:34pm EDT
As usual, you have reached deep within the psyche of us all. Let this be a reminder to stay in touch with our "inner child." In a crazy world, we all need to step back and see things with the wonder and awe we experienced as children. Stop and check out a bug on the sidewalk, experience an earthworm at work in the garden...life is far too short. Experience and enjoy at least one moment of childlike wonder every day. Thanks for all you do!
Peter R. Apr 26, 2009, 12:49pm EDT
If only our younger self could have a chance of listening to our twenty-seven year older self.
Svetlana Goryacheva Apr 26, 2009, 1:16pm EDT
Brilliant, dear Poddar - these last two lines were "right to the point"! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Terry Collett Apr 26, 2009, 2:14pm EDT
Thought provoking poem. I have often thought of this and speaking to the younger "me" and giving advice. Not sure if you meant "your" name instead of "you"? Very good.
Marge H. Apr 26, 2009, 2:34pm EDT
Great concept. It would be fun to be able to go back as adults to speak to ourselves as children.

Wishing you an early Happy Birthday in case I'm not here or I forget. I hope your day is very special.
Chris Brockman Apr 26, 2009, 2:54pm EDT
Time travel is possible. It is a truly compelling feeling to see ourselves of long ago embodied in someone else, especially a child.
Elizabeth H. Apr 26, 2009, 3:17pm EDT
Very, very nice work.
Tara C. Apr 26, 2009, 3:34pm EDT
Great job!
blaine d. Apr 26, 2009, 7:23pm EDT
great one!
Georgiana S. Apr 26, 2009, 8:06pm EDT
It is amazing to find yourelf as you once were!
JoAnne D. Apr 26, 2009, 9:10pm EDT
A little scary but nicely written.
Angela A. Apr 26, 2009, 9:34pm EDT
I love the last line, so very cool!
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
EDWINA (MISSIE) B. Apr 27, 2009, 3:02am EDT
nice job
William Dotani Apr 27, 2009, 4:03am EDT
You make a beautiful remembrance into a reflection. This is lovely.
Sherrie H. Apr 28, 2009, 10:42am EDT
I like the twist at the end.
Missy Cline Apr 28, 2009, 3:38pm EDT
wonderful!
Sheila Deeth Apr 28, 2009, 9:27pm EDT
Oh, very neat.
Alison H. Apr 30, 2009, 3:44pm EDT
Wonderful!
Barbara B. May 2, 2009, 12:40pm EDT
Ooooh my goodness !! This really touched mine heart
Poddar Kushal !! Going back to when you were a child
was quite a special thing. I've oft times done this to !!

Hugs, Barbie
Chas Andrews May 6, 2009, 11:16am EDT
thanks!
Sophie S. May 10, 2009, 9:49pm EDT
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