by Kushal Poddar
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January 19, 2008

A mail from the vacation

April 04, 2009 10:43 PM EDT
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A mail from the vacation

Mom, here is sun in this country;

more than you can imagine...

more than the amount poured in

your whimsical green patch.

Is there a sweep of cloud

over your, sorry our house by this time...?

Are you angry on my saying "your whimsical green"?

Sorry for a simple slip; overwhelmed I am;

especially at this hour with pages of new vistas opening.

It must be the time just before the sunrise

at our place

and here it is day

in fact the heat is on.

Have you finished the posting?

Perhaps now you are off to work

and Pop too.

Work for pleasure and pain

like I may have to

till then....

Till then it is sun and friends

and a confused teacher in a tour

to touch history

where men have turned wrong;

where blood has dissolved into all absolving human kind.

Oh, before you ask; - the foods taste different

and the roads made of marmalade

news paper taxies...

Sorry we are on. Meet you soon

in our world where I will be just me.

=© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

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Comments: 54

Alison H. Apr 4, 2009, 10:45pm EDT
Fabulous, Kushal! ;-))
Alison H. Apr 4, 2009, 10:46pm EDT
Don't forget about the BEAUTIFUL GIRLS!
EDWINA (MISSIE) B. Apr 4, 2009, 10:48pm EDT
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Lisa Frost Apr 4, 2009, 10:48pm EDT
wonderful write!
JOHN BECK Apr 4, 2009, 10:49pm EDT
I enjoyed reading this, Kushal. I'm not sure about the marmalade metaphor--I'll have to think on that one.
Jo N. Apr 4, 2009, 10:49pm EDT
Very nice, thanks for sharing.
Nancy Biri Apr 4, 2009, 10:50pm EDT
Nice
Georgiana S. Apr 4, 2009, 10:54pm EDT
the excitement of a post card!
Bard Constantine Apr 4, 2009, 11:00pm EDT
I could see a picture reading this; busy streets, noisy rumbling, a man at a coffee shop hastily writing a postcard...
Kathryn E. Apr 4, 2009, 11:06pm EDT
I could definitely read this as mail.

A very beautiful write, kushal.

Featured in the Triple Name Club.
Nikki S. Apr 4, 2009, 11:11pm EDT
Thanks for posting. Helping you meet your gather goals.
Linda T. Apr 4, 2009, 11:28pm EDT
Nice snippet from a vacation.
Jennifer Lee Apr 4, 2009, 11:58pm EDT
I think this is my favorite of yours as of late. It is unique and wonderful. I will now feature this instead of Her Rooms. Thank you for posting to our group.
JOHN BECK Apr 4, 2009, 11:59pm EDT
Thanks, Kushal, for pointing out that marmalade refers to a Beetles song. Sorry I was so dense!
Kimberly Ripley Apr 5, 2009, 12:03am EDT
Sounds like the perfect vacation!
JoAnne D. Apr 5, 2009, 1:36am EDT
You are a sweet son, poddar.
A Parameswaran N. Apr 5, 2009, 2:45am EDT
regards to mom!
Jennifer O. Apr 5, 2009, 4:50am EDT
lovely
John Philipp Apr 5, 2009, 7:14am EDT
An excellent snippet, Poddar. Thanks,
William Dotani Apr 5, 2009, 7:47am EDT
I'm not sure of your metaphor. Your house, now our house could mean being he new generation reaching back and keeping the old music alive or it could mean you fulfilling a dream or aspiration they are now too old to do.
Newspaper taxis await on the shore, waiting to take you away.
Get in the back with your head in the clouds and your gone.
* I believe John Lennon penned these lyrics.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 5, 2009, 8:16am EDT
Hi Poddar - to me, it's a metaphor about growing up. I really liked how you spun your words on this one.
*Mel * Apr 5, 2009, 8:25am EDT
nice
Svetlana Goryacheva Apr 5, 2009, 8:42am EDT
Great work, dear Poddar... fabulous! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Buzz B. Apr 5, 2009, 8:55am EDT
Yeah I saw myself in that rat race of life ! Till I retied at 57. Now I do what I want to do.
Jennifer aka Jenn B. Apr 5, 2009, 9:16am EDT
another excellent write poddar
Chuck L. Apr 5, 2009, 10:09am EDT
Your mother would love to recieve such a letter from "The Vacation."
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Apr 5, 2009, 10:24am EDT
This is one of your more striking pieces, Kushal.

Being on vacation has its surreal aspects for me as well-- sometimes I feel as if I am visiting another planet. Your dive into the atmosphere and history of your vacation spot (the last nine lines) is what "makes" this poem for me.

Thank you for posting this to The Surreal Circus.
Christine P. Apr 5, 2009, 11:43am EDT
nice
Nathan Schauer Apr 5, 2009, 11:54am EDT
Its a wonderful deconstruction of memory, relationships, and nostalgia. The fragmentation fits the wandering of the mind from past/present/future. Its also a very original approach to writing about otherwise sentimental issues. This is a very well thought out, well crafted and it certainly achieves a great deal with its message and form.
lena k. Apr 5, 2009, 12:12pm EDT
nice
Sharon P. Apr 5, 2009, 1:19pm EDT
Good expression of youth and travel.
Curt L. Apr 5, 2009, 1:44pm EDT
Well done, Poddar! A great read!
Howard b. Apr 5, 2009, 2:59pm EDT
letters home to Mom and Dad. It's always good to hear from home. Being out of their house you seem not to feel it still part of you too. But it always will be. Thanks for sharing.
Marge H. Apr 5, 2009, 6:02pm EDT
Excellent writing.

Wish I was there! :)
Ladybounty ~. Apr 5, 2009, 6:07pm EDT
Such a wonderful letter to your mom, Poddar. You are quite the traveler!
Shelbia C. Apr 5, 2009, 10:58pm EDT
Thanks for posting to Writing Reservoir
roger s. Apr 5, 2009, 11:19pm EDT
very nice
Beaulah M. Apr 5, 2009, 11:22pm EDT
if we all could write that way ...instead of forgetting...lovely write
Stephanie S. Apr 6, 2009, 1:28am EDT
very nice
Jyoti M. Apr 6, 2009, 2:08am EDT
hey u really write well...
Sharon C. Apr 6, 2009, 10:57am EDT
Beautiful poem. Well written.
Chas Andrews Apr 6, 2009, 11:47am EDT
thanks!
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Apr 6, 2009, 1:38pm EDT
Great team of words,Beautiful!
Beth - Doing God's work Daily J. Apr 6, 2009, 3:43pm EDT
beautiful poem.
blaine d. Apr 6, 2009, 5:53pm EDT
very nicely done!
Austin Cushing Apr 8, 2009, 10:21pm EDT
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Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 9, 2009, 9:12am EDT
WOW Poddar, I cannot believe that you used Newspaper Taxi and I used Newspaper Taxi - totally ignorant of each other. But you have so aptly described our little western kingdom over here. Outstanding imagery. I loved it.

I Drive a Newspaper Taxi
Beth - Doing God's work Daily J. Apr 11, 2009, 7:23am EDT
Thanks for sharing on Getting to 3000 Together
Jodi G. Apr 11, 2009, 10:46am EDT
that was Great! thanks for sharing it
Michelle W. Apr 19, 2009, 10:25pm EDT
I like this alot, Poddar. To me, it reads like the obligatory letter home, that one really does not want to write, but knows is expected. The your/our speaks of individualizing, and knowing the pain that that can cause. ... Well done!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !
Dawn (a poet on the wall) Jul 22, 2009, 12:52am EDT
a fantastic read!
Dawn (a poet on the wall) Jul 22, 2009, 12:53am EDT
well done my friend

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