by Kushal Poddar
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January 19, 2008

On Evening

December 25, 2008 06:18 AM EST
views: 174 | comments: 40

 

On Evening

The sun has been trying to move

the loose boughs falling over its face,

in vain.

Out of its front door a road goes

to meet the impatient lady

waiting at the other bend.

Here truths simply interchange.

The myths remain no more myth,

their blending into realities

becomes golden with the sun.

Slowly sun pours itself a stiff liquid...

© 2008 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

 

Merry Christmas my friends!

 

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Comments: 40

Svetlana Goryacheva Dec 25, 2008, 6:23am EST
Merry Christmas to you, dear Poddar, and thank you so very much for the excellent poem! ;-)

Blessings and best wishes in a plenty - S.
Karen F. Dec 25, 2008, 6:44am EST
Wonderful...Merry Christmas Poddar
KC Klein Dec 25, 2008, 6:50am EST
You might want to watch you pronouns, particularly how you repeat its here. I'm having a pronoun rage lately.

Other than that, nicely done.

Merry Christmas to you, too.
Kathryn E. Dec 25, 2008, 7:23am EST
Lovely..................

Featured in the Triple Name Club.
Gretchen Lee Bourquin Dec 25, 2008, 7:53am EST
Beautiful imagery here Poddar. Nice work
William Dotani Dec 25, 2008, 8:08am EST
I'm glad Karl said what I want to say.

You are rather prolific which is good. I know the feeling because I love to write. If I could say one thing to you it would be, don't let youth be a transgression on your pen.
Merry Christmas or Happy Holidays as you await January 14.
Christine K. Dec 25, 2008, 9:20am EST
Merry Christmas to you Poddar!
Beth - Doing God's work Daily J. Dec 25, 2008, 9:37am EST
Thanks for posting on Getting to 3000 Together
Beth G. Dec 25, 2008, 9:55am EST
This was very beautiful Poddar, well done!
Lisa Frost Dec 25, 2008, 10:11am EST
wonderful!

Merry Christmas!
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Dec 25, 2008, 10:21am EST
Beautiful, Poddar.

Merry Christmas!
Chana M. Dec 25, 2008, 11:06am EST
Sorry for the generic comment. Thank you for sharing this @ Art - Any Medium!
c.l.m. 180˚ Dec 25, 2008, 11:10am EST
Thank you!

Peace on Earth & Goodwill to All Mankind!
rainne chandler Dec 25, 2008, 11:39am EST
very nice
Deloris Wright Dec 25, 2008, 12:21pm EST
Thank you the poem is great. Merry Christmas Poddar
Beth - Doing God's work Daily J. Dec 25, 2008, 12:56pm EST
That is beautiful.
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Sherrie H. Dec 25, 2008, 1:13pm EST
Beautiful images. Merry Christmas!
Sharon P. Dec 25, 2008, 1:53pm EST
Beautiful. Merry Christmas Poddar.
regina k. Dec 25, 2008, 1:59pm EST
wonderful just wonderful
Leland Jamieson Dec 25, 2008, 5:10pm EST
Hi, Poddar ---

I particularly liked your opening 3 lines:

The sun has been trying to move
the loose boughs falling over its face,
in vain.

I would have loved to see you develop this metaphor as opposed to mixing it up with other equally undeveloped images and metaphors, which did not work as successfully for me.

Just one person's reaction.

Best wishes to you for a warm, cozy Winter Solstice, and A Superfine 2009!
Georgiana S. Dec 25, 2008, 7:56pm EST
merry christmas my friend!
*LORA* M. Dec 25, 2008, 9:11pm EST

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Kimberly Ripley Dec 25, 2008, 9:50pm EST
Very nicely written!
David W. Dec 25, 2008, 10:34pm EST
Another excellent word-painting my friend. I wish I could see the world thorugh your eyes for just a bit.
Kimber F. Dec 26, 2008, 1:48am EST
excellent writing. Merry Christmas.
Shelbia C. Dec 26, 2008, 1:50am EST
wonderful
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Andrea C. Dec 26, 2008, 7:00pm EST
I'm with Leland, I loved the first three lines. I'm a Haiku nut so less is always more with me. Your talent is shining.
Angela A. Dec 26, 2008, 8:24pm EST
How lovely is the sun that shines brightly for everyone? It's shines most for you, because of your wondrous poem.
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Teresa A. Dec 27, 2008, 2:58am EST
Merry Christmas
Teresa A. Dec 27, 2008, 2:59am EST
Merry Christmas
blaine d. Dec 28, 2008, 11:01pm EST
MERRY CHRISTMAS A HAPPY NEW YEAR!
zale orcid Dec 31, 2008, 1:21am EST
.amazing.
Michelle W. Jan 7, 2009, 3:54pm EST
Oh, this is breathtaking!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !
Felicia R. Jan 14, 2009, 1:53pm EST
Hello :o),

I just wanted to stop by since I am finally going through what is now listed as under 4,000 pieces of gather new mail that is sitting in my inbox on here.

With that mentioned I just came across either a mailing from you yourself, or someone else brought this piece to my attention. You or they felt that your creation should be shared with the gather community, which I am very glad that it was passed on to me to view. So I wanted to say Thank you for taking the time out of your busy day to publish it here on gather for us to all view. :o)

As well before I leave you I wanted to wish you a Happy New Year... in 2009 :o)
Terry Collett Jan 26, 2009, 2:44am EST
You never seem to write a dud poem; all the your work has that real touch of a fine poet.

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