by Kushal Poddar

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January 19, 2008

White Blank you were _(prompt)

October 15, 2008 10:38 AM EDT

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White blank you were

The white paper keeps a steady stare

at me. It's fair void is rousing something

within. "What are you looking at? Do not!"

still, it's forlorn eyes remains unblinking,

drains my little cells, soaks itself by blood,

pain and desultory wetness of dreams.

When the spontaneous cries from me die

I can see the ashen portrait of some

poetry is taking shape, still tentative,

on the body of whiteness, white no more.

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Kathryn E. Oct 15, 2008, 10:40am EDT

Featured in the Triple Name Club.

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Lisa Frost Oct 15, 2008, 10:44am EDT

THis is awesome, and fits the writers fate everytime they see a blank sheet of paper.

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Mooch -. Oct 15, 2008, 10:48am EDT

very nice AND probably something a lot of suffer whether blank paper or a blank computer screen

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Angela A. Oct 15, 2008, 10:49am EDT

Oooh, filling up pages of paper, and not seeing blankness anymore is always appealing to me!

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Diana Raabe Oct 15, 2008, 10:53am EDT

I can just imagine you sitting in front of the blank paper - and then coming up with this and more. Nice work - you've broken your writer's block!

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William Dotani Oct 15, 2008, 10:55am EDT

Fine metaphors to describe writer's block.

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John S. (arizona) Oct 15, 2008, 11:01am EDT

My paper usually just stays blank... LOL. Thanks, good one.

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Marilyn is looking for whatever there is. N. Oct 15, 2008, 11:03am EDT

Excellent. Mine, unfortunately, is still blank.

Marilyn

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Pam S. Oct 15, 2008, 11:19am EDT

Excellent!

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Sherrie H. Oct 15, 2008, 11:22am EDT

Cool. Is this for Zoomit?

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Carol P. Oct 15, 2008, 11:32am EDT

I like this one, it's different, and we can all relate.

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Lori S. Oct 15, 2008, 11:34am EDT

Haven't we all been there? I had that feeling in school too many times!

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David W. Oct 15, 2008, 12:23pm EDT

Ah yes, do I know that feeling., fresh white paper and my words failing me.

Excellent.

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Marilyn M. Oct 15, 2008, 12:28pm EDT

Great job, poddar kushal.

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Karen E. Oct 15, 2008, 12:48pm EDT

How exceptional and so telling of our process. I love this very much.

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Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Oct 15, 2008, 1:04pm EDT

The staring of the blank page.... I have encountered that stare.

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Steph-in-NE ..... Oct 15, 2008, 1:09pm EDT

good one there thanks for sharing

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Ginny A. Oct 15, 2008, 1:42pm EDT

Will send this on to my son to read, he is also a writer and will identify with it. Good job.

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Elsie Duggan Oct 15, 2008, 1:59pm EDT

Wonderful Poddar, I believe this is what the prompt is all about, excellent.

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Oct 15, 2008, 2:14pm EDT

some where it's the fate of that paper too,
What a joy to read your poem,always.A wondrous display of feelings.
Well done.

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Oct 15, 2008, 2:14pm EDT

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Sharon B. Oct 15, 2008, 2:18pm EDT

Excellent

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Shelbia C. Oct 15, 2008, 2:20pm EDT

Very fitting. I like it.

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Cass .. Oct 15, 2008, 2:27pm EDT

Great job.

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Cheryl W. Oct 15, 2008, 2:34pm EDT

A wonderful poem, Poddar...and one to which I can relate.

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Bethany C. Oct 15, 2008, 2:46pm EDT

I loved, loved LOVED this! (And have so been there!)

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Cassi J. Oct 15, 2008, 3:25pm EDT

I was just staring at my blank white screen, I can so identify :) Very well expressed and evocative.

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(Jasper,(Disciple for Christ. w. Oct 15, 2008, 4:27pm EDT

good poem.

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Sue T. Oct 15, 2008, 5:22pm EDT

We can all relate to this, Poddar. Beautifully crafted! Thank you.

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Olive Rossi Oct 15, 2008, 5:29pm EDT

Cool! I have to ponder on the meaning of this poem, but it is truly wonderful!

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Jennifer aka Jenn B. Oct 15, 2008, 5:49pm EDT

you are so wonderfully sensitive...

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John Philipp Oct 15, 2008, 6:22pm EDT

A delightful one, Poddar. Thanks.

And very timely.

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Sharon P. Oct 15, 2008, 6:27pm EDT

So very very true.

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Alison Pearce Oct 15, 2008, 7:11pm EDT

Beautiful work!

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Georgiana S. Oct 15, 2008, 8:04pm EDT

invisable ink?

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Loretta A Oct 15, 2008, 9:09pm EDT

nice poetry for writers and others. I like it and hope to read more of your work.

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Andrea (Ms. Conservative) L. Oct 15, 2008, 9:39pm EDT

very nice

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Marge H. Oct 15, 2008, 10:12pm EDT

Wonderful writing. We've all been there.

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Charlie B. Oct 15, 2008, 10:46pm EDT

Great poem

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René Allen Oct 15, 2008, 11:37pm EDT

Hi Poddar!

I'm doing a Snippets Edit on this one, and turning it into THREE (3) distinct Snippets . . .

White blank you were
PART ONE ~ a perfect "23" WHITE PAPER~Style Snippet

The white paper keeps a steady stare

at me. It's fair void is rousing something

within. "What are you looking at? Do not!"

White blank you were
PART TWO ~ a perfect "20" WHITE PAPER~Style Snippet with EYES

still, it's forlorn eyes remains unblinking,

drains my little cells, soaks itself by blood,

pain and desultory wetness of dreams.

White blank you were
PART THREE ~ a perfect "29" WHITE PAPER~Style Snippet with spontaneous cries

When the spontaneous cries from me die

I can see the ashen portrait of some

poetry is taking shape, still tentative,

on the body of whiteness, white no more.

© 2008 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

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blaine d. Oct 16, 2008, 5:28pm EDT

great one!

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Sandi S. Oct 16, 2008, 6:00pm EDT

Good poem!

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Sujata (funnily 'Suji' ) S. Oct 17, 2008, 10:05am EDT

Oh what a dilemma Poddar ! Am speechless to express Words !!

Oh enough already but yet soaked and what Rene loves to

highlight the brilliant creation on white that prompted

you point blank to be read well !!!

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lynn a. Oct 17, 2008, 4:30pm EDT

Good poem, Kushal. Enjoyable to read.

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Sheila Deeth Oct 17, 2008, 9:58pm EDT

Beautifully described.

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Netty B. Oct 17, 2008, 10:24pm EDT

I love this! Really speaks to me...thanks for sharing!

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Haim Kadman Oct 18, 2008, 3:48pm EDT

Lovely and it's good it isn't just white anymore.

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Renda B~surviving the storm by dancing in the rain. Oct 19, 2008, 10:47am EDT

I like this one, Poddar.

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Ladybounty ~. Oct 19, 2008, 10:46pm EDT

Well done Poddar!

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Tina Coruth Oct 26, 2008, 5:07pm EDT

Well done!

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