A blank Call sometimes

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I'll have to stop back.

I don't get this one. I'll be back

kinda neat this one--i like it.

I like the mind → colour image

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Poddar, my take on this. The many roads we travel and changing hues we see on our travels while in love, the weather can be calm or harsh, it is all part of love. Thank you for sharing this @ Post Art - Any Medium!

Maybe meaning she is lost , still loves him but don't know what today will bring?

Love and loss are always closely related.

Either just dialing the numbers is enough, or not making a decision at that moment is okay.

OK, let's have a look:

This road ends in another and she knows
that will somehow amalgamate into
the one now he lives.

I'm stuck right in the beginning.

"The road ends in another and she knows"

OK, opening sentence seems OK. One roads come upon another, and ends. She knows. This works for me.

"that will somehow amalgamate into"

OK, to me, this seems truncated from the first sentence. I look, and ponder: Oh, why did he hit the return button after knows?

Matter of fact, this entire sentence seems to be floating in a universe of its own.

Third line:
"the one now he lives."

OK, I see. It's one sentence placed on three lines for some reason that escapes me.

"This road ends in another and she knows that will somehow amalgamate into the one now he lives."

Even reading it as one sentence makes my eyes bleed.

This road ends in another;
Birthed anew, she knows.
Into the road he lives.

We writers, Poddar, often stack what we wish to say. We lay a mess of pipe, end to end and forget maybe we need to go back and sharpen it up, taking out the extra words. We can get away with this easier in fiction than in poetry. When I write poetry, I have a good reason for every word I lay down. Every word.

re: amalgamate -- Be the master of your thesaurus, not its slave.

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I liked it Poddar. I think it has a bitter sweet feel to it.

"Hate is what she feels at times. Then again
her mind changes colors one more, now and then.
What is its tint now? Orange or deep blue?" --

I love these lines. That seems to be how love works sometimes. You're fickle about it; one minute you love the next you don't and the other person is left unbalanced. Wondering.

"You know, sometimes a blank call is enough." --
That is exactly it, sometimes just knowing they're there is enough.

Beautiful Poddar. I also happen to think your line breaks are just fine. We write what we feel and the line breaks express that just as well as the actually lines of the poem. Poetry is also different for different people. I don't think there is anything wrong with the way you've laid your "pipes".

I liked the poem. It resonates.

Thank you for sharing.

Thank you Poddar. This one is a little hard to understand But I enjoyed it.

Thanks Poddar, we all get to our destination in the end. I think thats what you mean.

Just a suggestion....

her mind changes color one more, now and then.
her mind changes color once more, now and then.

I think hes lamenting over a leg humper.
A famous one in fact.....

You do have a way with words, Poddar.

It amazes me how well you do considering that English must be a second language. Take advantage of your mentors, my dear poet.

Very powerful thoughts are visualized in this piece ! Thank you Poddar . . .

((( Yes...sometimes a blank call is'enough'. very well put. )))

This one has great potential, but needs some work to make it easier to grasp.

Poddar I thought this was such a great piece of poetry
and thank you for sharing this. *smiles*

i will help to her to find her way home no matter what! great one

That is very good. Thank you for sharing.

love it

I really enjoy poetry when my mind and heart flows with the words ... I wish I had a better command of vocabulary so I would not have to stop the flow to come to understand what is being expressed ... thank you, for sharing with us!

AS ALWAYS

MyHotComments Great job! Thanks for sharing!

Poddar, I think its very interesting that several people commented about your choice of words. I have known college graduates who have a terrible command of the english language. I have also known people who barely graduated high school who have a great command of the english language. Personally, I have a bad memory and can't spell, so when I am not sure if I am spelling a word right or of the meaning of a word I look it up. My suggestion? Try http://www.bartelby.com/ it has just about anything you might need to help you with words, quotes etc. Don't be embarrassed when you don't know what a word means, enrich yourself instead (not directed toward anyone in particular, just my thoughts). Thank you for sharing this with the Gather Non-Deleters Group! (Oh another good site to help you out is http://suggest.aspell.net/ )

Great and thought provoking though a blank call is usually a call in the desert, and when it's answered it's almost a miracle - but it's a great poem that urges to believe and reach one's goals.

I like the idea of the mind changing colors. Good job.

Hints at a conflicted situation that other poems might reveal. Her changing emotions are reflected through the weather and landscape. What are his? He knows she cares, but does he?

"Amalgamate" works. A road itself is an amalgam of different substances.

Very beautiful shades of colors you have here. To adapt is the most easiest thing to do, that is if you're willing.
Very lovely!

I think you've done a good job of capturing the sentiments, Poddar. Thanks for sharing it.

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great poem