by Ashley P.
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May 14, 2008

Shards of Hope Lying on the Ground

June 26, 2008 06:00 PM EDT (Updated: July 20, 2008 06:20 PM EDT)
views: 88 | comments: 33

Do not be disturbed by the crimson flow around her feet

It is not as bad as you might think

 

Walking on eggshells

tip toeing on broken glass

 

Both of these shall lead to hell

the kind of place where no one belongs

and yet she found herself lost

 

Struggling to break free from the known

bursting into the realm of her own

 

Lost identities all around

floating aimlessly through this place

 

Shattered souls and fragments of people

abound and enshroud us

 

Will there ever be a path to light?

Who deciphers wrong from right?

 

Further on in the distance

one can see the glimmer of hope

 

The girl drifts into an endless dream

she feels calm - finally serene

 

Notice those shards of hope lying on the ground

the proof that pain no longer runs through her corpse

 

Sometimes it is better to watch it end than

to see someone walking in the darkness

 

Never searching for light

Not to be found

* This was a sad piece about a friend years ago- I am not advocating suicide only tried to deal with that pain of losing a friend. (Written in 2004.) No one could help her- but herself. I did hope that she would come through it- couldn't help her live. Peace to all. 

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Comments: 33

Amanda C. Jun 26, 2008, 6:05pm EDT
Very touching, Ashley. Suicide is a very devastating matter for all it touches, and everyone involved, but I think you made the sadness into a beautiful tribute within this piece. Thank you so much for sharing, even though it was probably hard for you.
Peter Joseph Swanson Jun 26, 2008, 6:34pm EDT
very very VERY well done
Dan H. Jun 26, 2008, 6:35pm EDT
Quite a sad piece!
Lune Wolfsong Jun 27, 2008, 2:57am EDT
Very well done, Ashley.

And well said, Judi.
Sandre M. Jun 27, 2008, 12:15pm EDT
It's such a strong sentiment and there is always a feeling of helplessness and despair when a friend or loved one decides to be self destructive. Thanks for sharing something so personal.
Kushal Poddar Jun 29, 2008, 4:15am EDT
it is strong. nice and very poetic
Sassy Cat Jun 29, 2008, 3:07pm EDT
Excellent!
Elaine B. Jul 5, 2008, 7:10pm EDT
Very sad but nicely written poetry!
Ann Weaver Hart Jul 8, 2008, 12:21pm EDT
Thanks for sharing.
Mary Ann S. Jul 19, 2008, 10:55am EDT
Another great poem.
Mary Ann S. Jul 19, 2008, 10:55am EDT
Sending you a ten.
Mary Ann S. Jul 19, 2008, 10:55am EDT
Remember that you get points for commenting onb my articles too.
Katie H. Jul 19, 2008, 11:17am EDT
i really like it
Laura C. Jul 19, 2008, 12:20pm EDT
this was sad...i've lost a couple of people the same way.
Ladybounty ~. Jul 19, 2008, 1:51pm EDT
a rollercoaster of despair and sadness you somehow managed to put into words....wow
Ann M. Jul 19, 2008, 3:26pm EDT
This was something very deep and very serious. Thanks for the post. Do you write these yourself? Very intense.
Patricia J. Jul 19, 2008, 3:36pm EDT
A wonderfully sad poem. You say it very eloquently.
Jessica P. Jul 19, 2008, 4:03pm EDT
awww - this is truly a painful subject, especially for anyone who's actually struggled with suicidal tendencies in the past - knowing that pain and confusion and....just wondering if anyone sees or cares - it's very difficult to get the help you need, if you are in denial.....it's very difficult to see the truth, if you are blinded to it.... I'm sorry to hear she ended up being so deceived, unto death.

People don't realize how important the WORDS we speak into other's lives are... how powerful PRAYER is, and interceding on behalf of others...
dee b. Jul 19, 2008, 5:23pm EDT
It's amazing what can be done with words. You have transcribed, what you have in your heart, with words, and have done beautifully.
Jennifer G. Jul 19, 2008, 6:44pm EDT
Very graphically beautiful, very well written...
You have a way with words.

I'm sorry for the loss of your friend. It's hard to lose a friend like that. :(
Beth G. Jul 19, 2008, 10:59pm EDT
Wow, I am so sorry for your loss of your friend. This poem was powerful and I can see why by your notation at the end of thsi.
Angela A. Jul 20, 2008, 12:12am EDT
Wonderfully touching poem. You can see the pain and grief here.
Losing someone makes you empty. You have to fill up that hole somehow.
Beautiful!
Michelle S. Jul 20, 2008, 8:34am EDT
Thank you for sharing!
Dan H. Jul 20, 2008, 12:29pm EDT
Well done Ashley!
necee t. Jul 20, 2008, 8:41pm EDT
oh yes, tis sad... and too true for too many... well done...
Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Jul 21, 2008, 2:37am EDT
Great poem.
Lewis (keeping those fires burning) K. Aug 2, 2008, 9:16pm EDT
This is a deep piece. Situations like this cannot be judged by those who were not there, and not even by those who were. All of us have hidden secrets and shames, but not all can cope with their inner demons. All we can do is try to be there for those we care about the best we can, for not all things are able to be understood.
Jerri H. Aug 25, 2008, 1:05am EDT
Wow...VERY good Ashley!
Rachel D. Sep 7, 2008, 5:31pm EDT
Very nice. Thanks for sharing.

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