by Kushal Poddar

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Lonely Little Demons (*SatWE)

October 31, 2009 09:36 PM EDT (Updated: October 31, 2009 10:43 PM EDT)

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Hollow wind on two frozen wings

A hollow wind and two frozen wings for a dodo.

Its over! Works are done! You scream. Vacation begins

as it has ended on the previous chance you got

midst packing and unpacking self and your little things.

Then the wrappers of the gifts move apart. You find that

mother has sent a drop of blood; admirers two wings;

a hollow wind comes out of your self addressed box. Gifts!

Loneliness is the name and style of the company

which has made those bricks. It is your house. Pet demons stroll

through the pebbled path. You sit before a vacation

like a dodo bird which knows it is its clan’s last.

Loneliness haiku

father’s radio

a single shadow quivers

on a wall

Loneliness haiku II

beeping sound

dim ward

of a hospital

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D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 9:39pm EDT

meooow...sleep well?

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 9:43pm EDT

Sound sleep. No snoring:P

D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 9:43pm EDT

=P kitty likes snoring

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 9:49pm EDT

Kitty snores too.

D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 9:51pm EDT

she does =P

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D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 9:41pm EDT

never liked the sounds of a hospital. is the shadow the father, the radio?

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 9:42pm EDT

Haiku captures a moment and describes it without adding any adjectives. Readers see the picture. Nothing beyond it matters.

D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 9:44pm EDT

you're right.

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D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 9:43pm EDT

it is its clan's last...can't say that for myself as I have a brother and he has four kids.

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 9:47pm EDT

Dodo bird's sad history was human being's undone.

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 10:20pm EDT

I know two of your brother's clan. Steve is my favorite

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D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 9:47pm EDT

don't have anymore pet demons...well, one that refuses to leave. actually, two. I keep them on a leash.

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 9:49pm EDT

Loneliness is one pet demon. Three poems explore the same. Dodo must be lonely at the point of extinction.

D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 9:51pm EDT

I agree. although, I know two monkies who are not lonely ;)

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 9:53pm EDT

No but there are thousand others who are.

D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 9:54pm EDT

yes, you're right. loneliness, a pet demon that cannot be tamed.

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Atticus *. Oct 31, 2009, 9:49pm EDT

Absolutely magnificent Ku! I like: "You find that mother has sent a drop of blood; admirers two wings; a hollow wind comes out of your self addressed box." - Great lines.

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 9:52pm EDT

Thank you atticus. I was experimenting with different images.

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sheila h. Oct 31, 2009, 10:05pm EDT

The common thread I feel running through all three : a forlorn loneliness,a let down ,a disappointment that is accepted by the subject in the first as a gift.
So vivd the pictures with your exquisite word selection and placement..

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 10:15pm EDT

Yes. It is sad but true. Thank you for the beautiful comment.

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D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 10:14pm EDT

pink sigh

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 10:18pm EDT

Delicious...strawberry icecream

D. K. Oct 31, 2009, 10:32pm EDT

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Franklin Newman Oct 31, 2009, 10:14pm EDT

The last one, alone to face himself. He realizes how lonely he is. So pervasive is it, this unhappy knowing that you are the last, that you repeat it three times in three different ways.

Fascinating.

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 10:17pm EDT

Thank you Frank.

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(Jasper,(Disciple for Christ. w. Oct 31, 2009, 10:24pm EDT

Those were all excellent writings, thanks for sharing.

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 10:32pm EDT

Thank you Jasper

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JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Oct 31, 2009, 10:38pm EDT

The first piece was very interesting, but it was your first Haiku that pulled at my heartstrings.

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 10:42pm EDT

Thank you Justme.

Pet Demons

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Elsie Duggan Oct 31, 2009, 10:52pm EDT

All three poems wonderful again, all on the same theme, how well you do them

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 10:57pm EDT

Thank you Queen of poetry.

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Chris Brockman Oct 31, 2009, 10:56pm EDT

I really like your "Loneliness hailku." It works well, especially for someone who cherishes how much radio used to mean. I would like to change one word, just for fun--"father's to "grandfather's." This works perfectly for me, but probably not for someone not as old as I. Can you see why?

#2 captures perfectly the isolation of the hospital from the "other world." I won't say "real," because in the hospital, the beeps become a separate reality. Nothing is lonelier than those beeps in the night, when even the nurse with a shot is a welcome sign of life.

Kushal Poddar Oct 31, 2009, 10:59pm EDT

I perfectly understand Chris. Thank you for commenting.

Chris Brockman Oct 31, 2009, 11:31pm EDT

Oh heck, Kushal, I was hoping you'd ask me to explain. I guess I'll have to volunteer. When I was little, we'd visit my grandparents, who lived in a different state, and really in a different time warp. My grandfather had a console radio that he had had forever. It was about four feet high and three feet wide in a wood cabinet. The radio was the center of family entertainment in the 20's, 30's, and 40's. One of the most popular shows was "The Shadow," and it was one of my father's favorites when he was young. My grandfather is long dead, and my 86 year-old father is in a nursing home. But the Shadow quivers on on the wall of my imagination, but not nearly as distintinctly as he once did in the imaginations of millions of radio listeners.

Bard Constantine Oct 31, 2009, 11:59pm EDT

I listened to the Shadow radio program before. The radio programs of yesterday were like being read to -the mind created the images, as opposed to television, which requires less imagination to comprehend.

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 5:51am EST

Radio holds a special memory for me too. Sunday noon used to mean musical Band Box. AOnly way i could listen to Western Music. Sundays used to be silent with most of the neighbors sleeping or reading the heavy Sunday edition Newspaper. Only Cliff Richard and a ten years or tewelve years old who till then did not know meanings of every English words he was listening...

Chris Brockman Nov 1, 2009, 11:10am EST

And of course, Bard, books are even better. Then there is imaginative play, something that is being obviated for many kids by t.v. and video games that show kids exactly what to imagine (yes, I know that's a contradiction).

Chris Brockman Nov 1, 2009, 11:13am EST

Kushal, there's a site on the Intrenet (look under old-time radio) that sells cd's of humdreds of old radio programs. I bought my dad several, including one with scores of Shadow episodes.

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Georgiana S. Oct 31, 2009, 11:03pm EDT

I can usually see what your day and impressions of it have been like by your nightly words!

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 5:52am EST

Thank you Georgianna.

Pet Demons

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Richard Lynn Livesay Oct 31, 2009, 11:35pm EDT

into this world we appear
we ourselves live life
we exit like the dodo

loneliness creeps in only if we don't love ourselves
If we can first learn to love ourselves
Then we can share love's understanding

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 5:52am EST

Wonderful Papa

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Bard Constantine Nov 1, 2009, 12:00am EDT

This trio of resonating poetry I can relate to well. Outstanding job, Kushal...

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 5:53am EST

Thank you Bard. It means a lot.

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William Dotani Nov 1, 2009, 12:38am EDT

Snapshots of experiences of life's ups and downs with pieces eroding and fading as time throws us into a surreal stew of remembrance.

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Robert - just a simple man - B. Nov 1, 2009, 1:13am EST

Super Ku. Are you daydreaming at work, sitting and looking out the window. (Ironically I'm dreaming OF work).

Good job Bro, loved the DODO.

loving our pets

:+)

Robert - just a simple man - B. Nov 1, 2009, 2:00am EST

:+)

PLOP !
:+)

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 5:53am EST

That is me indeed! That is you but not for long.

Robert - just a simple man - B. Nov 1, 2009, 8:18am EST

Wish I had your confidence.............. Much longer and I might actually think myself a bum.

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 10:11am EST

I am in a way bum too. Many says so.

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Alison H. Nov 1, 2009, 1:47am EST

Masterful poetry and haiku. Loneliness echoes.

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 5:54am EST

Thank you ALison.

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Kathryn E. Nov 1, 2009, 2:25am EST

The loneliness haikus are strikingly sad.

Featured in the Triple Name Club.

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Elizabeth R. Nov 1, 2009, 3:30am EST

These are definitely lonely and the last one got me. Thank you, Kushal.

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Marilyn is looking for whatever there is. N. Nov 1, 2009, 5:53am EST

I see and feel loneliness prevail in all three, though in slightly different ways. Maybe we're all on the verge of extinction, in one way or another.
I cannot compare these to any TV show, as I don't watch it. I also really have almost no clan left, making this very understandable.
Your hospital reminds me of the Intensive Care Unit, where the only sounds are the lonely beeps, making you aware that, in spite of it all, you might be still alive - but for how long?

Marilyn

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 5:54am EST

I can feel you in those words. Thank you Marilyn.

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Cheryl W. Nov 1, 2009, 7:02am EST

Wonderful trio, Kushal. Wonderful imagery!

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 10:03am EST

Thank you Cheryl.

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Katharyne T. Nov 1, 2009, 7:11am EST

there all great.. hope you had a great time

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 10:02am EST

Thank you Katharyn

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Peter Joseph Swanson Nov 1, 2009, 8:53am EST

shivers

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 10:02am EST

Thank you for having a shiver Peter

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JOHN BECK Nov 1, 2009, 8:55am EST

A friend just lost her mother. Though she was in her 90's and had everything wrong with her, it was a rude birthday present. The extinction of her clan, having lost s lovely college-age daughter to auto accident, a stillbirth, and a son. Extinction on a small scale to be sure, but extinction nonetheless. She's the last dodo bird.

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 10:01am EST

I am sorry my dear friend. I can feel her moments...

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Nov 1, 2009, 8:58am EST

intricate little pieces~

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 10:00am EST

Thank you Purrr

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Nov 1, 2009, 8:58am EST

Thanks for posting to GutterGirls~

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Jennifer Lee Nov 1, 2009, 12:02pm EST

The last Haiku got under my skin because of my dad. I'm an only child, so am likely to be the last dodo bird. I'm not looking forward to that time. Melancholy, poignant poetry, Ku.

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 8:43pm EST

I am sorry Jenni.

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Sharon P. Nov 1, 2009, 1:26pm EST

Someone still does not feel very well.

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 8:44pm EST

Right

Sharon P. Nov 2, 2009, 4:34pm EST

Get better quickly, my friend.

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Adrian Eve Revenaugh Nov 1, 2009, 4:09pm EST

Your lovely reflections are also apt responses to the prompt Ku.
Those internal demons are ever so pesty but generally they offer the grist.

The Surreal Circus

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 8:44pm EST

Thank you Ade.

a perfect host

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David W. Nov 1, 2009, 4:47pm EST

Your haikus are geting better with each post. You mange to say so much in so few words.

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 8:47pm EST

thank you david.

a perfect host

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Annmarie B. Nov 1, 2009, 5:29pm EST

The third, DEAD?????

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 8:42pm EST

May not be

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(Jasper,(Disciple for Christ. w. Nov 1, 2009, 5:31pm EST

All are great writings.

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 8:40pm EST

Thank you Jasper.

a perfect host

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Richard B. Nov 1, 2009, 5:49pm EST

I have a troll to protect me.

But then I'm like a hermit as in reality I don't need anyone, except I need company and someone always around.

Sometimes I say thanks for the words and at times I say thanks for the memories, but usually not

But those are good words, and thanks for them.

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 8:39pm EST

Thank you Richard.

a perfect host

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Angela A. Nov 1, 2009, 6:49pm EST

If we're not careful, our demons will swallow us whole.
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting

Kushal Poddar Nov 1, 2009, 8:41pm EST

You are right.

a perfect host

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blaine d. Nov 1, 2009, 9:03pm EST

great one's!

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Vinod Sailes Nov 2, 2009, 12:41am EST

Kushal - Intricacy of intelligence is the best attribute especially with such mind-boggling lines like "Loneliness is the name and style of the company which has made those bricks". I must say it is brilliance of creative imagination that could make me jealous. Anyway thanks for three of them which are equally superb.

Kushal Poddar Nov 2, 2009, 6:14am EST

I am honored Vinod vhai.

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Chas Andrews Nov 4, 2009, 11:54am EST

thanks for sharing

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Sandre M. Nov 5, 2009, 12:09pm EST

They are all three so perfectly bleak, though I don't mean that in any disparaging way. You have captured the emotional content of loneliness and bleakness so well.

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