by Kushal Poddar

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January 19, 2008

To a new dawn

August 05, 2009 07:46 AM EDT (Updated: August 05, 2009 08:12 AM EDT)

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Haiku-33

tears in my eyes

sun floats in a sea of salt

that roars inside.

To Dawn

A garden of herbs can be your simile,

I am picking up, by my gloved hands,

your sincere aroma, your goodness.

Friend, look how much I am bemused by the beauty

of the memory of last night’s rain on you,

on your verdant leaves. I cannot become you,

capable of the photosynthesis. Still

I can take your gift of the herbal novelty

And you know Dawn the Kitty has written a poem even before I could have posted mine, to me! Her friendship can be read from here:

<a href="http://www.gather.com/viewArticle.action?articleId=281474977763451

"> Dawn’s poem to me

http://www.gather.com/viewArticle.action?articleId=281474977763451

Tags: muse, poetry, poem, kushal poddar, life, philosophy, verse, surreal

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Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 7:53am EDT

Oh, I love the haiku you put with the poem. I love it. Thank you Kushal! I'm honored to be your friend.

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Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 7:54am EDT

You have mail.

Kushal Poddar Aug 5, 2009, 7:58am EDT

You have one too.

Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 7:59am EDT

I saw it. Going to post it now. =)

Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 8:02am EDT

I posted the poem. It's not finished but I'll edit it later so that you can get the link.

Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 8:03am EDT

Thank you Poddar! I'm so excited =)

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Aug 5, 2009, 7:56am EDT

beautiful~

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Aug 5, 2009, 7:56am EDT

Thanks for posting to GG~

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JOHN BECK Aug 5, 2009, 7:59am EDT

Your tender heart is most becoming, Kushal.

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Nancy Silveria Aug 5, 2009, 8:00am EDT

Very sweet writes :)

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Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 8:13am EDT

I'm so happy right now I'm crying! =) Thank you Kushal!

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Kathryn E. Aug 5, 2009, 10:21am EDT

The haiku is remarkably effective in its brevity.......

Kushal Poddar Aug 5, 2009, 10:30am EDT

Thank you little kathy

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Kathryn E. Aug 5, 2009, 10:21am EDT

Featured in the Triple Name Club.

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Madame Butterfly ~~ mary ann d ~~ Aug 5, 2009, 10:29am EDT

Those are both beautiful writes.
The haiku is so incisive. It expresses emotion of pain that surpasses words.

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tonya brown Aug 5, 2009, 10:33am EDT

wonderful job!!!

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Marilyn is looking for whatever there is. N. Aug 5, 2009, 11:02am EDT

These are both wonderful, with so much feeling here :)

Marilyn

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David W. Aug 5, 2009, 11:33am EDT

A neat haiku and lovely dedication poem.

Poddar, I am sorry, but my computer time is limited here at my daughter's. I know my comments are inconsistent, however by the end of next week my life will return to normal.

Kushal Poddar Aug 5, 2009, 11:38am EDT

You are wonderful.

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Ann M. (Site Scryer) Aug 5, 2009, 11:40am EDT

I love the way you've made Dawn into a plant goddess. I can't help but think that your third line speaks for all men, envying the ability of women to bring forth new life.

Thanks for posting to The Surreal Circus.

Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 12:13pm EDT

I loved that too about the poem. I've never thought of myself as a plant goddess. He's got talent indeed.

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Joyce ("Site Cheshire Kitteh") L. Aug 5, 2009, 12:40pm EDT

Your heart is filled with so many wonderful things that make their way to your mind and then to your pen! These are beautiful examples! What a fine tribute to your new friendship with Kitty-kin! Your beautiful words made her cry!

Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 1:09pm EDT

kushal has been a good friend to me mama kitteh =) he made me cry...happy tears though. kushal is a good friend to kitty-kins =)

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Sharon P. Aug 5, 2009, 1:19pm EDT

Both are good, but I love number two.

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Jennifer Lee Aug 5, 2009, 1:20pm EDT

Lovely tribute. She is a sweetheart and good friend, indeed. We are blessed to have each other.

Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 1:35pm EDT

thank you jennifer =) you're a sweetheart and a good friend too **hugz**

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JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Aug 5, 2009, 1:48pm EDT

Two very different writes.........

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Vivian A. Aug 5, 2009, 1:55pm EDT

I join the chorus lauding your haiku. So much power in so few words.

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Robert - just a simple man - B. Aug 5, 2009, 2:07pm EDT

You have treated dawn exceptionally well here. She's pleased. I'm pleased. Good Job

Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 2:09pm EDT

i am pleased and honored pea 1 =)

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Jeanne O'Neill Aug 5, 2009, 5:30pm EDT

Very touching indeed!

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timi A. Aug 5, 2009, 5:40pm EDT

Beautiful

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Ruthi C. Aug 5, 2009, 6:22pm EDT

BOTH are EXCELLENT writings for Poet Dawn, Kushal!

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Marge H. Aug 5, 2009, 7:04pm EDT

How very beautiful that you have both found the gift of friendship! Your tributes to each other have lifted my spirit and touched my heart.

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Angela A. Aug 5, 2009, 7:12pm EDT

And, another dawn breaks with a captivating poem written by you!

Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting

Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 7:16pm EDT

each and every time he writes indeed =)

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Georgiana S. Aug 5, 2009, 7:54pm EDT

a happy day dawning

Dawn (a kitty-kin on the wall) Aug 5, 2009, 9:57pm EDT

indeed =)

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Beth G. Aug 5, 2009, 8:16pm EDT

These both were quite beautiful.

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blaine d. Aug 5, 2009, 9:14pm EDT

beautiful!

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anna vee Aug 5, 2009, 9:30pm EDT

Nice.

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Elizabeth H. Aug 6, 2009, 12:38pm EDT

Beautifully written. Thanks for sharing.

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Richard Lynn Livesay Aug 6, 2009, 1:28pm EDT

Browning would be envious. Such a beautiful tribute. Sent me to La La Land. Your words are amazing Kushal.

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Terry Collett Aug 6, 2009, 3:25pm EDT

Fine haiku. but the poem Dawn deserves to be rated more than the points signify. Your choice of words shows your skill. You are one of the best poets on Gather in my humble opinion and I look forward to reading your excellent poems each time.

Kushal Poddar Aug 6, 2009, 10:27pm EDT

Terry you are kind

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William Dotani Aug 6, 2009, 4:06pm EDT

Beautiful metaphor. The second is a very nice expression of feeling you share a sameness in mind.

Kushal Poddar Aug 6, 2009, 10:26pm EDT

Thank you William

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Sheila Deeth Aug 7, 2009, 12:20am EDT

They're both lovely. That first one's truly haunting.

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zale orcid Aug 7, 2009, 2:22am EDT

.sigh/

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tanya simon Aug 7, 2009, 6:37am EDT

beautiful. just beautiful.

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Lisa Frost Aug 8, 2009, 12:08pm EDT

Beautiful and graceful words for a beautiful poetess!!

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Linda T. Aug 12, 2009, 11:37pm EDT

I really like the poem for Dawn. Like a plant she soaks up the goodness others have to offer and is growing and changing for the better. Plants give back what they take and so does Dawn.

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Shelbia C. Aug 26, 2009, 8:48pm EDT

They are both beautifully done.

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Chas Andrews Sep 5, 2009, 6:01pm EDT

nice work

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René Allen Sep 26, 2009, 7:03pm EDT

Master Poet Poddar ~ Haiku-33 is a perfect "14" SEA~SALT~TEARS~Style Snippet.

Your second poetic piece is a beautiful TRIBUTE to Poet Dawn. It is however, not a Snippet by our definition of "30" words or less. You can do a Snippets Edit on it, and resubmit it separately as a Snippet if you like. If you want The Snippets Crew to help you on the Snippets Edit, let us know.

HUGS ~
Your Friend,
Rene

Snippets ~ "Where WE WRITE in "30" words or less, and delete the rest."

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