the ant

More people should be reading you.

'Nothing special but the ant.'... Loved that ending for a wonderful poem. Good work, Poddar.

polished lens sees the big in the little.
May the sun shine on you.

wonderful telling. Very visual. Great!

Another wonderful read, Poddar!

I enjoy reading you.

I hope you are as blessed as you bless others with your writings.

very nice.

I love this! Really nice writing.

Karl L has great taste! Happy to have found you. Of course I write also, tho I have been offline of late with a serious health problem. I am gaining some energy, and hope to get back to my old self. Hope we can connect. Great work! Ellen B

nice poem i liked it

great poem! thanks to Karl for sending me your way!

Beautiful language. Wonderfully understated. There seems a great sadness, but the poet will put the occasion and his observation to good use, as does the ant....

Very good

Your wisdom runs deep and emerges gentle.

great poem- as always!

Beautiful

This one escapes me a touch this day Poddar.

This part of the poetics grabs ATTENTION . . .

"The ant

An ant with its provisions,

The shade of rain on anthill.

Looking at it you have learned-

Someone's leftover can save

Lives."

And then the ending ties it all up ~

"Nothing special but the ant."


But, inbetween this . . .

"Crushed letters are getting drenched,

Free fall of rain on a path.

Nothing special on this day.

You can't quite see the next man

Desert is setting in mind."

(?) . . . Somehow the two lines:

"Crushed letters are getting drenched,"

and

"Desert is setting in mind."

throw the poetic flow off (for me)
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If it read like this . . .
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The ant

An ant with its provisions,

The shade of rain on anthill.

Looking at it you have learned-

Someone's leftover can save

Lives.

Free fall of rain on a path.

Nothing special on this day.

You can't quite see the next man

Nothing special but the ant.
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Then I'd say . . .

SUCCINCT!

Let me know what you think Poddar.

Blessings ~
Rene

nice poem...liked.