by sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j.
Member since:
August 4, 2006

Evolve

February 08, 2008 08:15 PM EST
views: 35 | rating: 10/10 (16 votes) | comments: 19

(I'm republishing some of my old poems) 

 

I float, weightless

  bouyant

carried inward

  on saline waves.

Peacefully my subconcious

  observes every muscle

    miles of nerves

tissue and bone.

Oceans of blood to be

  cleansed and renewed,

my cells replaced.

The surf washes over

  my rejuvenated body

and pushes ashore

  my ancient mind.

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Comments: 19

Jan S. Feb 8, 2008, 8:29pm EST
Very well written. This reads almost musically. The music of the human body?
Sandra (secretary of Lalaland) C. Feb 8, 2008, 8:30pm EST
Nice poem.
Barb (Gather Site Ferret) Carlson Feb 8, 2008, 9:20pm EST
That's really neat. It reminds me of deep meditation.
Erica M. Feb 8, 2008, 9:37pm EST
Very nicely written.
Emma L. Feb 9, 2008, 5:31am EST
Great poem :)
sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j. Feb 9, 2008, 8:38am EST
I'm glad y'all like it!
William M. Feb 9, 2008, 11:12am EST
Very good, Sheila.
sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j. Feb 9, 2008, 1:28pm EST
Thank y'all!
Audrey F. Feb 9, 2008, 7:05pm EST
I feel rejuvenated just reading and imagining what is happening in your poem.
sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j. Feb 9, 2008, 7:27pm EST
Good! I was going for a sense of peacefulness in it.
Abby N. Feb 10, 2008, 8:13am EST
Well written! Thanks for sharing!
Danielle P. Feb 10, 2008, 8:26am EST
Very nice, I like it.
I love how this was written. Great job.
t b. Feb 11, 2008, 2:23am EST
Sheila, these re-posted poems are wonderful!
Thank you for sharing them with us.
sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j. Feb 11, 2008, 6:36am EST
Thank y'all for reading and commenting! Y'all make my day :)
Chelsea R. Apr 9, 2008, 1:50pm EDT
great poem!
Rebecca C. Apr 17, 2008, 6:53pm EDT
Awesome job! Love it!

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