Noises -- Rictameter

I have seen so many of these floating around on Gather lately, I just had to give it a try. I hope I did it right. Let me know if I didn't.

Noises

Noises
Traffic and horns
Radio and TV
Muzak and voice mail assault me
Making me dizzy, driving me crazy
Until I hide like a recluse
Close my doors, pushing out
Sounds that are not
Noises

January 2008 — dianne johns

Comments: 11

Susan Roberts Jan 19, 2008, 5:56pm EST

very GOOD!

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flit . Jan 19, 2008, 6:30pm EST

I love it...and I can SO relate.... think you need one more syllable in the 3rd line though

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dianne j. Jan 19, 2008, 6:57pm EST

flit -- isn't radio 3 syllables?

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Jared G. Jan 19, 2008, 9:01pm EST

Seems good to me!

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Jo C. Jan 20, 2008, 8:44pm EST

Oh, do I relate! As I've gotten older, my ability to handle noise goes down. I can take only so much per day, week, month, lol!

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Duckie 1 Jan 22, 2008, 8:00pm EST

Great rictameter!

I have not tried this poetic form. I guess I don't have the talent or the discipline to count syllables!

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Human, Katherine, seeker of intergalactic life, inhabitant of Earth Jan 26, 2008, 1:07am EST

Great fun to read, and I am so there with you.
Yes it is a very good rictameter. These are so much fun aren't they?

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William Dotani Feb 4, 2008, 5:15pm EST

Wow! That is about as perfect of mixing descriptive scenes and sounds with personal feelings as you can get.

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John Harris Beck Mar 14, 2008, 11:36pm EDT

Nice one of these thingies! And I share the sentiments.

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