The pain of love gone bad---joy to tears, failed plans all in this poems of love lost. I really love the last line "Tangled kite strings" , in order for love to sour it cannot become tangled up in hurt feelings...
This isn't actually about love lost Free Spirit, but about love gained, although I realize it can be hard to tell the emotions apart sometimes. Tangled up isn't always a bad thing. The beauty of poetry is that it can be read by each individual and have a seperate meaning. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on it. I appreciate your insight.
I like the unplanned entanglement you've penned, Arduinna, and the phrase below creates a powerful, unexpected, indelible bonding between the couple while the Fortuitous glue line well supports the unexpectedness of the experience :
With that first kiss That "tore you out of the frame" Pressed its red hot brand Into my heart
Thank you Barbra. I hate to get stuck in a rut, and enjoy the challenges you bring me by introducing unfamiliar styles and taking the time to write thoughful comments.
Thanks David, I really appreciate this comment, as I recently had a constructive piece of advice that said I tended towards wordiness in some of my poetry. I am working at being more concise, but perhaps, poetry, or at least some poetry, is supposed to be wordy.
I did read it as "love gained" unexpectantly. Here you are going along with life, everything in order and out of the blue you meet someone, you connect, and your life is ever changed. I like the image of the strings on the two kites tangling.
Thank you elizabeth. I love comments that show the person has actually thought about the poem and what it is trying to convey. That is, perhaps, the highest compliment of all.
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The beauty of poetry is that it can be read by each individual and have a seperate meaning. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on it. I appreciate your insight.
With that first kiss
That "tore you out of the frame"
Pressed its red hot brand
Into my heart
Enjoyed this power-packed brevity!!!
The magic of falling in love is so much better than falling down a flight of stairs. But it can be just as thrilling!
dg, and just as painful sometimes, but you are always left with something learned, even if its just to remember to take the elevator next time!
I did read it as "love gained" unexpectantly. Here you are going along with life, everything in order and out of the blue you meet someone, you connect, and your life is ever changed. I like the image of the strings on the two kites tangling.
Thank you elizabeth. I love comments that show the person has actually thought about the poem and what it is trying to convey. That is, perhaps, the highest compliment of all.