Autumn in Pensacola

Come dance with me.

Come twirl and sway.

Come dance and dance

your life away.

Release yourself

bonds once held fast.

Float down to me.

And dance your last.

The time for merriment is now.

Dance upon the chilling ground

before another turn

of sun goes round.

Come dance with me.

Come twirl and sway.

Come dance and dance,

we've just today.

©TSW 2008

Comments: 15

Tracey W. Oct 17, 2008, 5:10pm EDT

I believe I may have been influenced somewhat by Sheila Deeth's poem in the writing of this and wanted to make sure to give credit where credit was due.

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Rae M. Oct 17, 2008, 5:15pm EDT

Very lovely poem.

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Nana to Seven Cutiepies Oct 17, 2008, 5:24pm EDT

I like this happy poem Tracey.

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Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Oct 17, 2008, 5:29pm EDT

Great poem, Tracey. It definitely has the hint of warmer climates.

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Ryan M. Oct 17, 2008, 5:46pm EDT

Nice

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Sheila Deeth Oct 17, 2008, 10:05pm EDT

Thank you Tracey. It took me a moment to remember which poem. But yours is lovely, all credit to you. The leaves do dance.

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Faith H. Oct 17, 2008, 10:09pm EDT

Quite lovely, Tracey. I'm waiting for that cool autumn dance here.

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lynn a. Oct 18, 2008, 1:58am EDT

Nice, Tracey. I like it. It has a touch of pure joy to it, just in the reading of it.

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Mike Ellwood Oct 18, 2008, 5:00am EDT

Sad, desperate dance macabre. Then again, an element of pure joy, abandonment. This is excellent. Makes you think.

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Barbra L. Oct 18, 2008, 7:34pm EDT

So many emotions ran through me as I read this, Tracey. I could feel the excitement of the dance, yet the poignant, eerie truth of "we've just today."

I love the way you've incorporated the activity first, with the use of the verbs--dance, twirl, and sway, then set the tone for a more restful mode by using the verbs--release and float. The jolt from the last line though is what makes this poem spin with intensity. I loved reading it... over and over. Terrific write!!!

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Alison Pearce Oct 19, 2008, 6:25pm EDT

Very lyrical! Beautifully done!

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Shelbia C. Oct 19, 2008, 8:52pm EDT

This is a fun poem

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Sheila Deeth Oct 22, 2008, 3:03pm EDT

Came back to reread, as the leaves dance and swirl outside my window. Lovely sunny day today.

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Digital Diva S. Oct 25, 2008, 4:29pm EDT

that's lovely - Thank you for sharing your dad story with me - I’ll be glad when Gather fixes the email notifications. I wanted to thank you for your comment on the ghost story (sort of) about my Dad.

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