by Beverly P.
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April 26, 2007

As Time Flies

September 17, 2008 12:23 AM EDT
views: 110 | rating: 9.7/10 (31 votes) | comments: 49

As Time Flies

She sits at the window

   waiting for time to stop

but it never does



She simply carries on

  and on an on




She has outlived all those

  she loved

and time no longer heals



Her life has all but gone

   it's gone, all gone




She glances at the clock

   as it ticks upon the wall

counting off the seconds of her life



She wants to lift the window

 and jump, just jump




Her muscles ache

  as she pushes up

the panes causing pain of their own




She falls unto the ground,

  a lump, a lump, a lump 
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Comments: 49

*LORA* M. Sep 17, 2008, 12:24am EDT
very nice
*LORA* M. Sep 17, 2008, 12:24am EDT
sad too
F. Jeanette c. Sep 17, 2008, 1:11am EDT
Soooooooooo sad. I wanted a little more. But well done!

10 4 u
Kimber F. Sep 17, 2008, 1:24am EDT
Wow, you captured a bit of what it must be like to be around so long that everyone is gone before you. Thanks for sharing this and peace.
Bob C. Sep 17, 2008, 1:48am EDT
Well written Beverly about what is more than likely true feelings of many older people.Very sad!
Beverly P. Sep 17, 2008, 1:55am EDT
Thanks. I recall man older people commenting that they have outlived everyone. I just felt how destitute and lost they must feel.
Shelbia C. Sep 17, 2008, 2:06am EDT
This is really good. Fits the picture perfectly
Linda T. Sep 17, 2008, 3:24am EDT
sad wanting to escape pain she only gains more
Lawrence U. Sep 17, 2008, 3:27am EDT
Lovely poem, Beverly! The first stanza sets the scene very nicely, indeed. I like it.
Nicole P. Sep 17, 2008, 3:31am EDT
I like the first stanza too, but the third seems to get the heart!
Fran S. Sep 17, 2008, 5:55am EDT
very sad, and most sad of all is how I can identify with "she"
Kushal Poddar Sep 17, 2008, 7:49am EDT
The last two paras are outstanding.
a pot of coffee…:
.* Sandi * Sep 17, 2008, 9:02am EDT
She has outlived all those

she loved

and time no longer heals
how true
A. F. Stewart Sep 17, 2008, 9:25am EDT
I thought it was well done, very evocative.
Curt L. Sep 17, 2008, 11:02am EDT
Beverly, what a wonderful job!
Sharon B. Sep 17, 2008, 11:24am EDT
beautiful
Patricia M. Sep 17, 2008, 11:38am EDT
What emotion!
William Dotani Sep 17, 2008, 1:06pm EDT
Very sad. The imagery is superb in both scene and feeling. The photographs are a very nice touch.
Angela A. Sep 17, 2008, 2:05pm EDT
That's pretty sad. I'm just feeling her pain, just by reading this.
Wonderful prose!
Katherine M. Sep 17, 2008, 2:15pm EDT
Beverly I believe you capture the feelings of many shut-in older people. So tragic and ending to this poem. Makes me wonder how many do....
Sheila Deeth Sep 17, 2008, 2:35pm EDT
Wow. So powerful. So sad.
Sharon P. Sep 17, 2008, 5:52pm EDT
Strong stuff Beverly, really good.
Buzz B. Sep 17, 2008, 7:16pm EDT
I like it to a point but the end !
Andrea (Ms. Conservative) L. Sep 17, 2008, 7:38pm EDT
very sad, great poem
Laurie B. Sep 17, 2008, 10:13pm EDT
Well written. Very powerful.
Carl "Prime Time" Lee Sep 17, 2008, 11:03pm EDT
Thank you for using Gather Broadcast, where there is an open line of communication for all and you’re more than a connection.

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Clifford H Colpitts Jr Sep 18, 2008, 7:53pm EDT
Very sad and beautiful. Thanks.
Depressing, but beautifully crafted poem, Beverly.
Sandi S. Sep 19, 2008, 9:26am EDT
Whoa...unexpected ending.

A good write...excellent.
Heather Schultz Sep 20, 2008, 12:21am EDT
its a sad one, but I like it
William Dotani Sep 20, 2008, 12:52am EDT
The elderly often are very lonely. I used to go see my 92 year old neighbor frequently, but since my stroke I haven't seen her. I need to find a way to say hello again.
Robert M Sep 20, 2008, 12:20pm EDT
Very sad, and unfortunately a reality for many. Well done!
Christopher C. Sep 21, 2008, 3:13pm EDT
Our seniors are a wealth of knowledge and information. This poem is good storytelling of a passing, a poignant passing. This Photo embraces the crossroads of many paths well traveled by this individual, a societal hug to all of us. Thanks for sharing.
Jai S. Sep 21, 2008, 3:19pm EDT
You captured what my grand mother felt - before she left this world at 95 (no one really knows her age). Towards the end it almost looked like swhe would stare into eternity.
Lewis (taking over Gather) K. Sep 23, 2008, 8:27pm EDT
Well written, with a shocking end. Good job.
Julie S. Sep 24, 2008, 5:36pm EDT
Very nice. Well written. Touching
Tracey W. Sep 26, 2008, 8:16pm EDT
Well done. Very visceral. The repetitions really increase the level of emotion this piece.
Stephannie H. Sep 29, 2008, 5:21pm EDT
very nice.. thanks for sharing with us
Cheryl B. Oct 4, 2008, 1:47pm EDT
How sad and unfortunate for people like her... Great poem Bev!
Susan B. Oct 6, 2008, 3:10pm EDT
Terrific! Thank you for posting your poem in Poetry Please
Quinn (aka Entwife) Blackburn Oct 7, 2008, 4:31pm EDT
Our Elders are not given the love and devoted care that they so richly deserve. When people at work complain about the "mean old people"... I tell them that they have earned the right to be as mean and b&*chy as they want. It may not make their behavior right, but they have probably outlived most of the friends and much of their family. They probably live every day with pain. And for every "mean" elder I meet, there are three more with a ready smile and a willingness to help others.
Quinn (aka Entwife) Blackburn Oct 7, 2008, 4:33pm EDT
AS for our Zak... I know that nothing happens without a reason, nor are we able to see the whys and wherefores in most cases. Listening to the stories strangers shared about their interactions with Zak showed me in no uncertain terms that this small child had touched a great many lives, and I am sure that whatever he was here to achieve in that life... he did. I know that he went willingly into the arms of his Creator... and while it brings me no comfort, I can accept that.

wishing you laughter
Andrea (Ms. Conservative) L. Oct 14, 2008, 6:36am EDT
Sorry for the generic comment, but I have to catch up on my emails. Giving you a 10 with my comment.
Sujata (funnily 'Suji' ) S. Oct 15, 2008, 12:26pm EDT
Oh love it all so true versed as always Beverly !!!
Janie E. Nov 13, 2008, 12:38am EST
Very sad!!!
Lisa C. Nov 13, 2008, 8:04pm EST
Very sad but very good!
~~Paying it Forward!~~
Felicia R. Nov 16, 2008, 4:22pm EST
Hello Beverly P.,

I just wanted to say I am finally going through what is now under 6,400 pieces of gather new mail that is in my inbox on here. So with that in mind I have finally come to a piece of mail that was addressed to me in regards this article submission you have created to share with the gather community. Thank you for taking the time and sharing your piece with us here at gather. :o)

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