by lynn a.
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December 29, 2006

Enveloped Eternity (Poetry Please Single Word Challenge)

February 16, 2008 08:23 PM EST (Updated: February 17, 2008 01:46 PM EST)
views: 86 | rating: 10/10 (29 votes) | comments: 56

Envelop me with your arms
Warm me with your body heat
Protect me
Love me
Need me
Desire me
Lust for me
Free me
And let me go
When my day is over
And I will wait for you
Among the stars
My Soul Bright and Welcoming
To warm you with my Spirit Heat
To protect you
Love you
Need you
Desire you
Lust for you
Free you
And then the miracle becomes
Two souls in Dimmer Mode
Seeking the other
Merge, Now One
Energy combines, explodes, creates
Solidifies into Single Soul
Enveloped one into the other
For Eternity

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Comments: 56

Tiffany G. Feb 16, 2008, 8:24pm EST
I LOVE this Lynn!! Thanks for sharing! It was very sweet!
lynn a. Feb 16, 2008, 8:35pm EST
Tiffany, How quick you are. Thank you and I am so glad you like it.

Cindy T., Thank you. Yes, it is the unity that prevails here.
flit . Feb 16, 2008, 9:20pm EST
this is excellent Lynn ...great job :)
Lune Wolfsong Feb 16, 2008, 9:23pm EST
Lovely. I especially like this:" Free me
And let me go
When my day is over
And I will wait for you
Among the stars"
lynn a. Feb 16, 2008, 9:25pm EST
Thank you, Flit. I was wondering where you were.

Thank you, Lune. I'm glad you liked it.
Lynn, this wonderful poem of affirmation contains much spiritual truth. Ten stars from me ... I wish I could give you more.
Marge H. Feb 16, 2008, 9:55pm EST
So beautiful!
Barbary Chaapel Feb 16, 2008, 10:01pm EST
Whole lot of enveloping goin' on here, Lynn! :)

What a good subject and poem for that particular word.
lynn a. Feb 16, 2008, 10:08pm EST
Magi, I think Socrates spoke about souls that were split at some point before Creation and entire lives are spent on Earth searching for the other half. I forget what it is called and darnit, if I could figure it out, I would look it up. It is a beautiful story especially when the two halves meet and finally get back to the single soul. Or at least it is to me. Thank you for stopping by. Your poem about alcohol addiction zoomed through the roof for me. I have never been an alcoholic but I could well believe and imagine the torment that you made come alive. You are a true writer and poet.

Thank you, Marge.

Barbary, Yeah, that was a whole lot of envelopin' goin' on. LOL. And it felt good too. Thank you for reading this.
Sassy ... the calm and cool Cat Feb 17, 2008, 12:07am EST
Totally awesome!
Ellie !. Feb 17, 2008, 12:52am EST
good job, lynn!
lynn a. Feb 17, 2008, 12:55am EST
Thank you, Patricia S. Nice to see you again.

Thank you, Ellie M. I am glad you saw this one.
Emma L. Feb 17, 2008, 1:44am EST
Beautiful, lynn!
Wilma M. Feb 17, 2008, 3:14am EST
This is really wonderful, lynn. I like the images you painted!
lynn a. Feb 17, 2008, 4:37am EST
Wilma, You are on. Where are you? I'm coming to find you. Thanks.
William Dotani Feb 17, 2008, 6:12am EST
Wow! This is excellent. I love the style and message. It tells me of how two people share a passionate love, but yet must respect the other to have the right to their own personal space and freedom.
Wow! Very nice. Quite sensual, actually.
Deb J. Feb 17, 2008, 9:58am EST
Very nice Lynn!
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Tracey W. Feb 17, 2008, 10:52am EST
I love the shape poem lynn, very clever! I haven't read the thread yet, so forgive any repetition, but you might want to to reword the first two lines just a bit. I made the same mistake with my first attempt. I think envelop is spelled without the 'e', so something like [You]enveloped me with your arms/Warmed me with your body heat. Then any other necessary continutity changes, like "protected" for "protect" and so on and the poem is still awesome! I hope this makes sense.
Curt L. Feb 17, 2008, 11:43am EST
Truly wonderful, Lynn! Thank you!
Terry S. Feb 17, 2008, 11:55am EST
Sweetly said. I loved the flow.
Anita R. Feb 17, 2008, 1:43pm EST
Very nice Lynn, it reads beautifully.
Mariana T. Feb 17, 2008, 2:24pm EST
Oh Lynn - love the flow of this - I followed it like floating down a river in a dreamstate - perfect! Salud.
lynn a. Feb 17, 2008, 4:09pm EST
Tracey, Thank you for showing me the Envelop/Envelope/Enveloped. The second one I can't see. At the bottom? Enveloped? Enveloping? Please help. First part is supposed to be in the present -- right now. Then the plea to let me go when it is time. I'm confused.
lynn a. Feb 17, 2008, 4:22pm EST
William, I am so happy you speak kindly. Yes, the freedom and personal space means we can venture out and then come back together to morph into even greater oneness. We can't glitter and glow caged. Thank you.

Thanks, Ina, and yes, it did take on a sensual life of its own. Writing something can really surprise me sometimes. Thank you for stopping by.

Hi, Deb J., It is so nice to see you. But then, it always is.

Thank you, Curt L.

Ah, Terry, the Master of love poems, thank you for reading mine. I appreciate it.

Anita, thank you for commenting. I am grateful.

Mariana, Yes, it was supposed to be like that, through time, through death and through Spirit life that waits to be joined and exploded into new joined life again. I appreciate you coming by to read this.
Alison Pearce Feb 17, 2008, 4:27pm EST
Beautiful Lynn!
Tracey W. Feb 17, 2008, 4:35pm EST
Forget what I said. Just change the spelling of envelope to envelop and leave the rest of the poem the way it is. It is too lovely to alter just because of my prompt.
lynn a. Feb 17, 2008, 5:13pm EST
Tracey, Thank you for your input. I really mean that. Lovely and correct is a Beautiful thing, and to do both would be my goal, so input to me is nice, and I'm thinking the challenges are in part to help us write better and hone our skills. So I am all for input.

Thank you, Alison. Hey, I think congratulations are in order for you.
Lynn, thank you very much for the lovely compliment.
Marie J. R. Feb 17, 2008, 7:49pm EST
Love it Lynn,,, so warm and telling,,, Bless you,,,
Neal Wass Feb 17, 2008, 9:17pm EST
Very passionate.
Kathy W. Feb 17, 2008, 9:21pm EST
I absolutely love this! The word choices create images, and it was the
who believed that souls were split, and needed to find their other halves to continue to fly. Plato wrote about this in Symposium, but it was Zeus that did the original split.

The best part, for me is the pacing of this piece. When I read it aloud, it is like a perfect replica of (a-hemmmm) togetherness! Specifically these lines: (my faves)
"Seeking the other / Merge, Now One / Energy combines, explodes, creates / Solidifies into Single Soul / Enveloped one into the other"
The pace picks up with each word until right at the end, when it softens and smooths out. Ah! Lovely.
Wilka
lynn a. Feb 17, 2008, 10:06pm EST
Wilka, I hope you come back. You wrote, "The word choices create images, and it was the who believed that souls were split.........." ! There's a word missing, lol. The Who ? You know! Well, now I have something to go on. I can probably find it through Zeus. Thanks. And thank you very much for such wonderful compliments.
Elsie Duggan Feb 17, 2008, 10:51pm EST
This is a lovely poem Lynn, and of course a love poem is all I live for, my theme in life, and this one is great, Envelop me, wonderful, for eternity, even better, looking forward to that myself someday, know it will happen.
lynn a. Feb 18, 2008, 1:46am EST
Thanks, Elsie. I am very happy to have written a love poem that you would like. That is a biggie and an honor. After all, you are the Queen of Love.
William Dotani Feb 18, 2008, 2:33am EST
Thank you for you compliment, but I think only Sheila needs to be caged.
lynn a. Feb 18, 2008, 4:32am EST
Ha ! I can't wait til Sheila sees your comment even if I have to tell her to look for it. Too funny.
elizabeth e. Feb 18, 2008, 10:37am EST
What a gem to find this morning...it bathed over me like a river...flowing gently, then rapidly as it made it's way over the waterfall and then the calm pool below the second waterfall. I loved the lines:

"And I will wait for you
Among the stars
My Soul Bright and Welcoming
To warm you with my Spirit Heat."
lynn a. Feb 18, 2008, 4:44pm EST
Thank you, elizabeth e, that means a lot to me. Yeah, I'm sort of partial to that Spirit Heat. Wouldn't it be great to be able to see our Spirit heat or all the energy that the Soul has. I wonder would it help us change our lives and be better people. Thank you for your sweet comments. I really do appreciate them.
sheila h. Feb 18, 2008, 4:51pm EST
so like a prayer..so like a treatise of love ..the circle of love~ experience it and it is always yours..it survives..it transforms...it IS..
and you are G-G-Grrreat!like the tiger says!:)
i know someone who you could share this with...
sheila h. Feb 18, 2008, 4:52pm EST
oh..BTW..i'm up..had to find you again and read this..againLOL..wonderful
OK.now i'm gone!
see ya tomorrow!
lynn a. Feb 18, 2008, 10:36pm EST
Sheila, Thank you for stopping by. I know you need your sleep. Looking forward to seeing you tomorrow.

Thank you, Kathleen, yes, I like that Spirit Heat too. I think Spirit Heat feels better than Body Heat. What do you think?And thank you for stopping by.
Sheila Deeth Feb 19, 2008, 2:07am EST
This is lovely Lynn. Great job.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 19, 2008, 3:55pm EST
You posted this on 16th and I missed it...flawless and inspiring...Eternity and envelope...you hit the right cord ...

and I have read your comments about that Valentine's image and also about your daughter's painting of that..How sweet of her...Is she still paints...and hanks Lynn for stongly liking the Namaste tradition ..
Namaste and love you

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Wilma M. Feb 19, 2008, 4:19pm EST
Came back by to enjoy the comments.
lynn a. Feb 19, 2008, 6:45pm EST
Buzzy, THank you. And yes, my daughter still paints. She learned a lot about Hinduism and Buddhism while we lived in Hawaii also. We took her to the shrines and the temples. She was fascinated with the nuns cutting off the tips of their fingers. And of course, burning the money really caught her attention and she wanted to do that. We drug her through every museum and event we could find. She and my husband went on a class outing with me. Believe it or not, it was required. They had no choice according to our professor and go they did. It was a very long day but it was fantastic. We ended by having dinner together at a Chinese restaurant my teacher liked. Jennifer never developed a taste for Oriental food. So she ate the plain white rice and fruits. My daughter has since then given me three Budhas. I have them in a etegere with my treasured items. Ha ! I have a box in there too that a cricket chirps when the top is opened. She found that and we love it.

I'm glad you liked my poem. I do too. My husband was rather stunned. So was my daughter.

Wilma, I'm back now, at least until supper. I'm cooking tonight. That means I'm warming up a pot of spaghetti. Hard work, huh.
Sheila Deeth Feb 19, 2008, 9:18pm EST
Came back to read my way through the comments. I love the way we can learn from each other on gather.
lynn a. Feb 20, 2008, 12:42am EST
Sheila, I love it too, I'd never heard of some styles of poetry like the rictameter before. I've learned a lot just in the last two weeks. And sometimes the articles tell me things I didn't know. And the words ! There's always new words to find out about. It's been a good experience.
William Dotani Feb 20, 2008, 8:13am EST
I reread this and two lines gave me that a ha feeling of yes that's how things are and I guess should be.

'Two souls in Dimmer Mode
Seeking the other'
Donald M. Feb 20, 2008, 1:14pm EST
Lynn, as always a good job. Not being a writer or poet, I have no word of wisdom to offer. Just keep writing the quality material you have been.
lynn a. Feb 20, 2008, 2:42pm EST
Thank you, William. Yes, it has that aha effect for me also. But the one that got me the most was, To warm you with my Spirit Heat".

Thank You, Norma. I value you opinion very much and am always willing to listen to whatever you have to say. Tonight I think it is going to be geography. There's a geography book upstairs. How about that?
Curt L. Feb 23, 2008, 2:58pm EST
Love this one! Had to come back and savour it again!
Donald M. Feb 27, 2008, 6:13pm EST
Lynn I am resting good most nights so you dont have to read to me anymore. I am going to start reading to you instead. Unless you want to post a chat and let all of us come talk to you. Mind you I am not like Elsie and William, I actually go to bed and sleep, do not walk the halls of gather at night. There is no sleep in the daytime for me. None at all.
Donald M. Feb 27, 2008, 6:18pm EST
I can rememeber back in 85 and 86 when i actually laid down and took a nap now and then. The phone didnt ring off the wall. When it rang it was important, not just an aggrivating call. People had things to do back then. Didnt spend their every waking hour on the telephone. There was one doctors office I went to that a client sit and talked to someone on her phone loudly, tending to business the entire time she was there. I finally ask on of the ladies in the office if they could just put her in a room in the back somewhere, just to let the others of us in the lobby have a few moments of peace and quiet.
lynn a. Feb 27, 2008, 7:47pm EST
Thank you, Curt. I'm glad you like it.

Norma, What would I do if I didn't come reading to you? I've gotten used to it now. When I wake up at these ridiculous hours all I can think is how fun it will be to go wake you up. LOL. Sometimes my friend, Kate, and I would talk on the phone at 4:30 in the morning. Then we'd go back to sleep. I miss her.
Donald M. Mar 3, 2008, 7:04pm EST
I am so sorry Lynn, I didnt mean to discourage you. Go ahead and wake me up. I really need to post some new pictures. But so do you. We are certainly on different time slots. Please tell me what times you work and what time you are home. If it has to be in a private email. You can read to me anytime you want to. I just need some more pictures and articlews to talk to you on too my friend.

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