by Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom'
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April 25, 2007

Hold On...Its Cupid's Call (Poetry Please/Myth)

February 09, 2008 11:55 PM EST (Updated: February 10, 2008 12:03 AM EST)
views: 103 | comments: 32
 

Cupid armed with bow and arrows

Smiles impishly in February sessions

Pierces hearts for tomorrows

He aims desires and obsessions

 

Smiles impishly in February sessions

Celebrates this cosmic myth

He aims desires and obsessions

Along with psyche's innermost depth

 

Celebrates this cosmic myth

Releases metaphysical dimensions

Along with psyche's innermost depth

He drops untamed nuptial affections

 

Releases metaphysical dimensions

Pierces hearts for tomorrows

He drops untamed nuptial affections

Cupid armed with bow and arrows

 

 

I have tried Pantoum Poetry Style.The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain, each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA. the ending stanza then repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.
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Comments: 32

Larry H. Feb 10, 2008, 12:00am EST
Nice poem thanks for sharing..
TK Rosevear Feb 10, 2008, 12:33am EST
You are such a romantic ;)
lynn a. Feb 10, 2008, 12:34am EST
Cool, Buzzy. Especially with the description of the style. I'm going to copy this so I can see your poem and how it works. I like the ideas too. Boy doesn't love get you going and motivated. Nice, Buzzy.
Ellie !. Feb 10, 2008, 12:38am EST
nice job...have a great Valentine's Celebration!
Sandra (secretary of Lalaland) C. Feb 10, 2008, 12:48am EST
great article.
Kathy W. Feb 10, 2008, 2:44am EST
Wow! Bw...this is like the perfect vehicle for the Val day era...
It's like listing to a set of lovers' conversation...like, working together, at cross purposes, and trying to say the same thing repeatedly to be heard. I love it.
The repeating, also adds real impact to the message. and the meanings we assign to the phrases change, based on where they're placed in relation to the other lines.
Way Cool!
Wilka
Sheila Deeth Feb 10, 2008, 3:43am EST
Very nice Bhawana. Lovely poem. And thank you for the explanation of the form.
Emma L. Feb 10, 2008, 5:04am EST
Lovely poem!
himanshu verma Feb 10, 2008, 5:05am EST
I wish cupid sing tthis poem of urs while aiming...
Hahaha...
good poem...
Lawrence U. Feb 10, 2008, 5:14am EST
Wonderful poem, Bhawana! Thank you for sharing.
Tracey W. Feb 10, 2008, 10:58am EST
Bhawana, you did a wonderful job with this very difficult form! And, you created a lovely poem as well.
Mariana T. Feb 10, 2008, 1:33pm EST
Releases metaphysical dimensions

Pierces hearts for tomorrows

He drops untamed nuptial affections

Cupid armed with bow and arrows


Oh you poets amaze me with your talent - this was fabulous and love the little picture too and by the way...Oh let me make this another comment. Salud.
Mariana T. Feb 10, 2008, 1:34pm EST
By the way, Bhawana - I love your new Icon and that gorgeous and very colorful shot of you and your handsome husband!! Salud.
flit . Feb 10, 2008, 1:37pm EST
great job ... now I shall have to go play with pantoums
necee t. Feb 10, 2008, 2:02pm EST
hello my sweet Bhawana... what a beautiful piece of poetry... wonderful...
looks like Cupid got you and your hubby.... hehe...
wonderful icon.... Blessings always...

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sheila h. Feb 10, 2008, 3:06pm EST
I applaud your courage and the wonderful results with this style of poetry..you are one SMART COOKIE! .
I very much appreciate you teaching me a new style..Thank you! it is wonderful..
William Dotani Feb 10, 2008, 4:18pm EST
Very romantic. This poem has a nice rhyme scheme. I'm glad you put an explanation of this type of poem at the end, so I could learn something new and appreciate your effort.
Alison Pearce Feb 10, 2008, 6:11pm EST
Wonderful Bhawana!
Ruthe M. Feb 10, 2008, 8:41pm EST
Phenomenal Bhawana!
Marie J. R. Feb 10, 2008, 10:02pm EST
whoa!!! very in depth,,,beautiful,,, I am so happy I was born in this wonderful month,,, cupid is such a slippery fellow,,, Love the best part of Valentine,,, Bless you my dear,,,
Phyllis R. Feb 10, 2008, 10:04pm EST
WOW, a beautiful poem, you are so talented! BTW, I love your icon too.....very nice looking couple!
Wilma M. Feb 10, 2008, 10:45pm EST
I had never heard of this form of poetry. Thanks for the explanation. You are a very talented lady!
Dr. Ashok Saxena Feb 11, 2008, 4:16am EST
learning to write in a new form is agreat achievement it is difficult but you made it beautiful today 11 is basant panchmi day to celebrate spring and worship
goddess Saraswati
donna h. Feb 11, 2008, 8:15am EST
very nice Bhawana
Anita R. Feb 11, 2008, 12:02pm EST
Very sweet Bhawana - and I loved this poetry style, you have done a wonderful job with this!
William M. Feb 11, 2008, 1:55pm EST
Very good, Bhawana.
Marge H. Feb 11, 2008, 2:19pm EST
Great job of writing a beautiful poem while employing a very challenging style! I applaud your willingness to give it a try.
Deb J. Feb 11, 2008, 6:41pm EST
Very good dear Bhawana! You do wonderful poetry no matter what form you are using!! Nice job once again!!
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Fred Hose Feb 12, 2008, 2:36pm EST
Hi Bhawana
First of all I love that icon of you with your handsome husband. You both look so happy that you light up the room.

You made a brilliant success of that very difficult poetic form. Well done and I love your February message. The month of love.
Patti M. Apr 25, 2008, 4:33pm EDT
Lovely poem Buzzy. I can see Cupid in action.

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