Poetry Please Single Word Promt Surreal

It seems just out of reach

Something I'm trying to feel

But it belongs to another world

One of us is not real.

I try detached observance

As if I didn't care

But I can't convince myself

To remain unaware.

The mystery lingers like a fog

Out of sync and strange

Unassimulated moments

That cannot be arranged.

Comments: 12

Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Jan 24, 2008, 6:50am EST

I loved your apt descriptions and feelings.

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Alison H. Jan 24, 2008, 5:49pm EST

Sounds kind of like a past life memory coming back to haunt you....nice poem!

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Anita R. Jan 24, 2008, 5:54pm EST

Thank you Bhawana and Alison. This was an interesting challenge, and I was glad that Poetry Please offered the surreal prompt.

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Gigi K. Jan 24, 2008, 11:30pm EST

I thought you did a wonderful job of writing to the prompt! Excellent imagery - loved your mystery lingers like a fog!

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Anita R. Jan 25, 2008, 6:57pm EST

Thank you Gigi and Rose - I am looking forward to participating again in the single word prompts at the Poetry Please group page.
What I really enjoy about these contests is how hearing the prompt word triggers something and sets off a train of thought as you write begin writing about it - then afterward, it is thrilling to see the interpretation of the other participants.

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Tracey W. Jan 27, 2008, 9:12am EST

I love this Anita, but I can't help feeling that you have more to say. Maybe I just want to know what's out there. :-)

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Mary Z. Jan 27, 2008, 1:54pm EST

Anita, this is a fantastic peice. I liked the just out of reach part and not knowing what is really real!
Well done!

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Sheila Deeth Jan 27, 2008, 6:30pm EST

Wow! Loved this Anita. "One of us is not real." Neat line. Liked the feeling of grasping for the unreachable.

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sheila h. Jan 27, 2008, 6:38pm EST

i like it! that strange feeling...deja vu? perhaps..nice rhyme..and what is the style,Anita?
thank you!

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Kathy W. Jan 27, 2008, 11:59pm EST

Anita...I really liked the "trying to connect" feeling of this piece. Just out of the line of sight--can't quite latch on to it feeling. (I get this more and more often, as I age--LOL!)
Could just be an angel sitting on your shoulder? That's my story, and I'm sticking with it...multiple personality disorder! Puh-leeze!
Thank you for sharing, I enjoyed this.
Wilka

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Sue D. Jan 28, 2008, 12:02am EST

I liked the feeling of this one. Very nice.

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Poetry Please Single Word Promt Surreal

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