Currents - Poetry Please Prompt (Wind)

Beautiful! The line about the "Glance of sunshine" captures the moment very well. indeed. Thank you for sharing.

Thank you! So continues my attempt at mastering more than free verse. One of the sources I read said that cinquain was designed to be one of the easier forms to write, so I tried to pay extra attention to the metaphor.

I'm especially fond of "Glance of sunshine", myself. Thank you, Lawrence, for your comment and the connection. I can't believe I've missed your poetry before this.

Corinna, I was unaware of this style. Thanks for leading me to the Sol Magazine site. I'll be looking at their info this week for sure.

This cinq-cinquain doesn't seem that easy to me. To combine the prose with the strict meter is a challenge. But, as you've already said, you paid close attention to the metaphor, with good results. Yes, the Glance of sunshine is a great image. I also liked

These sirens' rocky thrones,
Sending our compasses astray,

This is life in a nutshell, is it not?

I think this form is a good match for the spontaneity of your life story here; the turn on a dime feeling.

Beautifully written, and adventurous in form.

Interesting.

Hi, thank you so much for adding the explanation at the bottom for those of us who know little about poetry as a style...I always find your words speak to me, however, and, after all, that is why we write, isn't it?

love, Z'

Tom, thank you so much. When I came across the form, having the challenge in mind, I thought it would make a good fit and I'm glad it has.

Thank you, Angela. :)

You're welcome, Zara'. It's actually a requirement of the challenge to include the explanation, but as I continue to experiment with formal verse, I think I'll make a habit of it. I also don't know as much as I'd like but the learning and the playing with words is the best part. And yes... if my words speak to you, then I am a very happy lady.

Really good and beautifully written

Thank you, Yvonne, I appreciate that.

This is delightful, as I've told you elsewhere. I agree with Tom that this doesn't strike me as an 'easy' form; I'd be hard-put to make it flow as you have, especially in the first and last stanzas. I'm especially tickled by the way you've maintained and balanced the woodland and ocean metaphors in every stanza, from "stormy seas and leaf-dance," to "path and safe harbor," to "witches' woods and sirens' rocky thrones." Nicely done!

This was lovely. Thanks for explaining the form. It seemed to fit beautifully - both free and constrained, like the winds on life. And it flowed so smoothly.

I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for posting to our new group. Welcome!
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I love the imagery of your first stanza, especially the words leaf-dance. This tightly woven poem flows effortlessly with the output of your feelings and has a strand of a timeline that connects the dots extremely well.

James - That was probably the most difficult part for me, and I almost slipped, in the stanza describing the sunshine and the calm. Thank you. :)

Sheila - Thank you so much. It's encouraging to know I succeeded. I don't always even when I set out with a vision in mind.

Tracey - Thank -you- for making this group available! I hope to be around for many more prompts, it's a terrific idea.

William - This is going to sound silly but I've always aimed for "tightly woven" and never felt, until this one, that I succeeded. I appreciate your comment very much.

I loved your imagination mixed with powerful sentiments.Your words are as true as you seems to be a true person in reality...
very impressive .

Lovely!

Wow! This is beautiful and your self challenge was successful.

reread...and I must say this is beautiful...

Your comment to my comment brings up a point I think few who write poems really consider. A good poem like any good piece of literature has a consistency in patterns. There are many such patterns such plot, theme, rhetoric, timeline, paragraph equivalence, conciseness, transitional elements, etc. To write in a tightly woven pattern is difficult, since the English language prosody has limitations in poetry. (I am not talking about free verse). I am certainly no expert on this matter. However, I've often seen poems that have a mix of tightly woven stanza with stanza that simply are not tightly woven. Sometimes such contrasts are seen within a four line stanza. The problem is that an uneven pattern affects the flow. In my opinion, the single most important factor outside of theme in a poem is its flow. Some may disagree with me, but I know what I like and my studies on learning how to write a poem seem to suggest such aspects are necessary. My comment on your poem reflects my opinion using such criteria.

Oh gosh, I'm so far behind on my comments! Sorry everyone, and thank you for your kind words!

I happen to agree with you about flow, William. The poems I like the most are those that I can follow without stumbling.

This style of poetry takes us better along with you on this tempestuous journey...going against the current and still moving upward! Hurrah!

Corinna, the metaphor was stunning and it was felt throughout.
Great job!
Your first foray has been a success.

Hey! Congratulations, Corinna, on winning the Poetry Please Challenge! Perhaps now you'll believe me when I tell you how talented you are. ;)

Oh wow! :o Thank you so much!

Excellent!! It's a beautiful form and your words truly exemplify wind. Congrats!

Congratulations Corinna! A well deserved win!

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Congratulations, Corrina!!! I am very excited for you! I agree with Susan about "your words exemplifying wind"! Well-done!!!!

Congratulations! Well deserved win.

Thank you all! I think you could have knocked me over with a feather when I found out that 'Currents' was chosen for first, I'd fallen in love with so many of the other submissions. I can't wait to see what everyone comes up with for "envy"!

Congratulations this was da delightful read

congratulations on getting first place.

Fluid dance
To windy flute
Eddies in the current
Chart the life of Corinna Parr
Poet

Oh, Jan, that was delightful! Thank you for the smile!

the form is good