by William Dotani
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October 27, 2006

You And I

April 23, 2009 02:39 PM EDT (Updated: April 23, 2009 03:16 PM EDT)
views: 130 | comments: 41

There seems to be a hurry, then some rest
Divided sided moments, here I guess
Sprinkle magic dust, on clouds hanging low
Look beyond the pale, sunshine filling soul
Report every smile, deny not laughter
Meld held culture, past and hereafter

Space race of low orbit, then look upstairs
Collected inspected, ordinary wear
Making up stories, words become true friends
Libraries of experience, come 'round again
And it's coming around the mountain

Bred with plain honesty, patterns to unfold
Booking looking juke, imprint touches soul
Signals, mix in fine rhyme, sharing simple grows
Gifts so tameless, warmth inside brightness glows

That four lane highway, now a country road
Sights, lights, scenic electric youth has sewn
Dustbins capture experience, weeds have grown

Clock hand, more deft and swifter, come what may
Chimes, vines, rhymes, oh my, bye bye another day

Relevance, sunset met, horizon deep hues, you and I yes

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Comments: 41

Kathryn E. Apr 23, 2009, 2:44pm EDT
Sprinkle magic dust and the world seems perfect, love the words, horizon deep hues. A perfect story about love. ah. sigh.
sleek little niblet =) I do like the intricate swirls of verbal cream through the depths of your poetic brews =)
Peter Joseph Swanson Apr 23, 2009, 3:23pm EDT
Yeah, 4 lane highways are small, nowadays. Where I grew up there were still gravel roads.
Trish A. Apr 23, 2009, 3:32pm EDT
William, I celebrate when I see that you've posted a new poem. You paint lyrical pictures.
William Dotani Apr 23, 2009, 3:50pm EDT
Trish, I like Norman Rockwell and Peter just close your eyes and listen to James Taylor's 'Country Road.'
William Dotani Apr 23, 2009, 3:52pm EDT
Thanks Katherine and Purr. I'm going to have to write about some of the Gather names in a positive way. Where's my Bing Crosby?
Chris Brockman Apr 23, 2009, 4:13pm EDT
This reminds me of that picture of the woman (?) looking in the mirror, looking at herself looking in the mirror... Marvelous, lively (as in full of life) words. "There seems to be a hurry, then some rest"--Man, it's your heartbeat.
Svetlana Goryacheva Apr 23, 2009, 4:20pm EDT
Brilliant, dear Bill! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
JOHN BECK Apr 23, 2009, 4:33pm EDT
Another day, and what does the next bring? Mixed blessings I suppose. There's always Never Never Land.
Marge H. Apr 23, 2009, 5:06pm EDT
Traces of the past?
Elsie Duggan Apr 23, 2009, 6:03pm EDT
lovely William, I love it when your very sensitive side shows, and it is all over this poem, your wife and children are very fortunate people,
sandesh b. Apr 23, 2009, 6:13pm EDT
perfect poem
J W. Apr 23, 2009, 6:22pm EDT
good poem
Wilhelmine Estabrook Apr 23, 2009, 6:44pm EDT
Fascinating.
Deloris Wright Apr 23, 2009, 6:57pm EDT
Great poem William. a small look at the past. It is hard to remember thoes country dirt roads.
John F Walter Apr 23, 2009, 8:46pm EDT
Your effortless couplets limn a graceful portrait of an enduring marriage of souls that has conquered time and found both fast and slow tempos to move from one century, one life, to the next.
Lisa Frost Apr 23, 2009, 9:17pm EDT
wonderful roads you find to travel my friend!
Marianne M. Apr 23, 2009, 9:40pm EDT
Full of hope and promise ... beautiful, Bill!
Angela A. Apr 23, 2009, 10:44pm EDT
I wonder what weeds are you referring to?
You have some magic garden I'm unaware of?
That's how you get inspired eh?
Te he!
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Barbara B. Apr 23, 2009, 11:21pm EDT
William you certainly do have a marvlous way with words !!
I really loved this whimsical poetry my dear friend. *smiles*

Hugs, Barbie
Lawrence U. Apr 24, 2009, 5:42am EDT
Well done, William! You capture the moment with vivid imagery - a wonderful reflection on the simple pleasures of the soul.
TINA s. Apr 24, 2009, 1:29pm EDT
nice poem
Rose H. Apr 24, 2009, 5:11pm EDT
OK I admit, I had to read this one twice - it speaks to the heart. Beautiful, William.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Apr 24, 2009, 10:37pm EDT
imprint touches soul...Beautiful prints.
Tracy Fabre Apr 25, 2009, 12:29am EDT
... you and I yes...

That was a "ooooh!" ending.
Toni V. Apr 25, 2009, 1:43pm EDT
I agree with Tracy, a "ooooh!" ending. Nice job.
Curt L. Apr 25, 2009, 1:49pm EDT
Marvelous poetry, William!
(I was reminded of that painting too, Chris Brockman!)
Jennifer Lee Apr 25, 2009, 5:12pm EDT
I particularly enjoyed the first and last stanzas or lines. Your writing has a tremendous lyrical quality that I doubt I will ever master. I do wish we lived closer so that you could teach me. Thank you for sharing in our group.
t b. Apr 25, 2009, 5:23pm EDT
I really like this one William.
And I love James Taylor's Country Road.
Elsie Duggan Apr 27, 2009, 2:19am EDT
I am so stuck Billy put linux on my computer and I can't find anything, or go anywhere, somehow your names popped up in an email, so thought I would tell someone my woes, and believe it or not, he is sleeping at night, I will probably tell him off but good in the morning, I am supposed to be able to use Windows as welll, but can't get it to boot, oh well, goodnight William, love y ou.
Marinela Kotsina Apr 27, 2009, 3:40am EDT
Many moments when we look back in time and here you are with a warm sensitivity all over your words and feelings.
Lovely you!
William Dotani Apr 27, 2009, 3:53am EDT
Thank you.
Ankica S. Apr 27, 2009, 5:50am EDT
this poem reminded me on good old days when I was child spending whole day on my bike on a gravel road.
Sheila Deeth Apr 28, 2009, 9:42pm EDT
Pure magic dust, eyes closed by the freeway and a country road appears.
Holly K. Apr 29, 2009, 6:10pm EDT
This was beautiful! I loved it.
Kelly M. May 2, 2009, 9:38am EDT
I always read your articles to enjoy William!


Thanks for stopping by to comment on one of my articles or pics! I am returning the favor by “hanging ten” and dropping by 10 of your posts today!
Barbary Chaapel May 2, 2009, 10:17am EDT
I like when poems deny hurry and become everyday life and at the end of the day, every-day relationships are what counts.

Kudos, William.
necee t. May 2, 2009, 7:56pm EDT
very awesome sweet William... i enjoyed this... thank you... Blessings always...
Wilma M. May 6, 2009, 6:08pm EDT
We still have dirt roads around here.

This reminds me of simpler times and simpler pleasures.

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