Yawning (haiku)

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 5:15pm EST

Now your voice is starting to resemble your icon!

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Nov 30, 2007, 5:17pm EST

a warm Haiku...:)

Today it's raining in LA...and are we really in the same area..?

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 5:27pm EST

Yes. We both live on the edge of the world: Los Angeles. Of course, you've been to the top of the world (Himalayas) too. I guess it is a regional conceit to call this place the edge of the world. It should be phrased an edge of the world since, as we know, our world has many edges although it is round!

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Angela B (There IS a light at the end of the tunnel) Nov 30, 2007, 5:32pm EST

Lovely haiku, Umar!

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Gorgeous Gabby, a Gather Geeky Gal, and The Giz Nov 30, 2007, 5:33pm EST

BEEEEEEUTIMUS!

The rain has made it up here to the So. Nevada area, too. It's so cold it feels like it's gonna snow!

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Raymond Mardo Nov 30, 2007, 5:34pm EST

mock rainbows
That's worth the price of admission alone
A 10 from me
Help me get a publishing deal with a 10 rating and comment. I comment back.

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Lisa E. Nov 30, 2007, 5:34pm EST

Wonderful haiku!

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Rima S. Nov 30, 2007, 5:37pm EST

gosh...who wants to sleep...lol
yawning trees in winter..I doubt that..:)

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 5:42pm EST

Thanks Angela!

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 5:43pm EST

Hey Gorgeous! I lived in Las Vegas for a couple of years... Long enough to see snow on the ground. Stay warm!

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 5:45pm EST

Thanks Raymond. Your comment is very kind and I appreciate it much.

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 5:45pm EST

Thanks Lisa!

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 5:46pm EST

Marhabtain Rima: Of course they yawn and sleep. That's why they get undressed in the first place: time for a little nap!

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Rima S. Nov 30, 2007, 5:49pm EST

oh..you made me laugh ..you just reminded me in lebanon wheb we say..marhaba..and we reply..marhabtain..or bonjour...we would say bonjourian..we double them..

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 5:51pm EST

Thanks Judi. Have you ever gotten stuck in a form? Its challenging and I can't find my way out of it yet.

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 5:52pm EST

I didn't know about the bonjourain. That's funny. I love the inventiveness that comes when cultures cross and mix.

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Rima S. Nov 30, 2007, 5:56pm EST

oh yeah..there are more inventory words like
to decorate it ..we would say dawkerha
to finish it .. fannashtah..
someone is depressed ..would say..ana mmdapress

indeed it is funny..

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Nov 30, 2007, 6:05pm EST

Wah!!! you have all the answers...that was another fantastic response..

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 6:24pm EST

Sometimes you spark my creativity Bhawana. I also wonder: is she really that sweet? And you always prove that you are. I'd like for you to post more articles on your homeland. I've learned alot from you!

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 6:25pm EST

Thanks Amy! As always, your comment is so encouraging.

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 9:57pm EST

Liz! my heart quickens!

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 10:00pm EST

Me too! I've had a chance to do it now it palm tree land. On my way to work, I've been granted access to leafy walks. It takes me back to being a kid in Michigan.

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Umar, Abu Nurain Nov 30, 2007, 10:17pm EST

Oh yes! That made the raking into piles meaningful! Even dad had to laugh and not remonstrate against our sweat-earned glee.

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Patrick H. Dec 1, 2007, 6:56am EST

phoenetic assonance/quality to this piece.

it is... literally, visceral.

Umar when you get the opportunity I took an initial intuitive jab at your form- please supply honest rating and comment, if need be.

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Minakshi w. Dec 1, 2007, 9:35am EST

I don't think I have read as beautiful a Haiku as this in a long long time here at Gather.
I generally do not read many but this one walked straight into the snowed roads of my childhood memories. Beautifu, Umar.

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Umar, Abu Nurain Dec 1, 2007, 11:02am EST

Hello Patrick: I'll give it a go this morning. And I'll always be honest with you. Keep at it man. Writing is hard work. But the muscle (brain) is trainable!

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Umar, Abu Nurain Dec 1, 2007, 11:04am EST

Minnie: You've completed my dream. This is the highest praise anyone could have offered. I thank you and I am pleased that I took you somewhere so pleasant. We're connected!

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