by William Dotani
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October 27, 2006

Fixing A few Holes

July 27, 2009 04:51 PM EDT
views: 108 | comments: 62

Where are we between us in lanes and avenues
Past the fashions of an era still beckoning
Sans youth, wonderful colors staining elixir
Of innocent heart and soul still churning, burning
Climbing the ladder and looking into today's
Bell bottomed memories, watching the stars swaying

Where are we between pages and paragraphed dreams
 Inside recipe's savor, blending into one
Sky, one moon and flowers blooming, passion faces
Petals of the hustle and bustle, bottled rhymes
Drifting contentment, fondness winks at clouds floating
In the quilt we're stitching of moments, hopes and dreams

Where are the habits once rehearsed with whispering
Sweat filled promises, where the pillow sang sweetly
Before photographs graced the mantle and four walls
Time role played  tailor, depth and breadth, measured recall

Where are rules and regulations once on paper
Words of mattered meaning, mixing tough love with care
Finding parameters of boundaries applied
Such dust left to the howling winds of yesterday
Soaring into the sky, with waxed wings, we still try
We're still fixing a few holes in our soft blue sky

 

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Comments: 62

Dr. Ashok Saxena Jul 27, 2009, 4:58pm EDT
Quest for a whole makes man try fixing a few holes.Nice presentation
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:21pm EDT
Yes, it does. Thank you.
Tanya P. Jul 27, 2009, 4:59pm EDT
You call up a lot of memories for me in this one. The hardest, and harshest, was "mixing tough love with care". But there are many soft and marvelous memories in the mix.
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:22pm EDT
Yes, there is a mix of emotions in life. Thank you.
Cheryl W. Jul 27, 2009, 5:04pm EDT
A wonderful poem, William....one that I will revisit.
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:22pm EDT
Thank you.
Eucliffe L. Jul 27, 2009, 5:15pm EDT
I lost you in dispatches now I know you have been fixing patches, using clouds . in the presence of capricious winds....I shall revisit to recover my compass !!!
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:23pm EDT
All directions have someting to offer. Thank you.
Dawn (a poet on the wall) Jul 27, 2009, 5:34pm EDT
a quest that's certainly needed. well done. i loved this william
Dawn (a poet on the wall) Jul 27, 2009, 5:34pm EDT
tough love with care is the hardest thing to do
William Dotani Aug 3, 2009, 2:58pm EDT
Yes, it is. Thank you for your comments.
Marie J. R. Jul 27, 2009, 5:52pm EDT
Time does heal,,, if one lets go!!! this is a cool write dear William,,, Bless you,,,
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William Dotani Aug 3, 2009, 2:59pm EDT
Yes it does if we are patient. hank you for your comment.
William Dotani Jul 27, 2009, 5:54pm EDT
Thank you all for your comments. I very much appreciate this.
Marge H. Jul 27, 2009, 6:07pm EDT
The last stanza reminds me of the tale of Icarus and Daedalus.
sheila h. Jul 27, 2009, 7:20pm EDT
This is you at your very best and inspiring,William.
Every man's collection of beauty and sorrow,struggle and joy..
There is a peaceful cadence to your stanzas..a sound ,a feeling in the words in this reader's mind of waters lapping the side of the pier ;watching the sun descend with acceptance,a fulfilled calm.
I'll accept a few holes in the tapestry of life ,the blue neon of my sky , knowing they are not from faulty construction but rather from a well worn ,well lived life..
Thank you for this wonderfully expressive and reflective piece.
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:06pm EDT
That a very nice comment. I appreciate this.
JOHN BECK Jul 27, 2009, 7:59pm EDT
We do enter different generations if we live long enough. And the relationships between generations change. It makes looking back most interesting. And closeness with our loved ones grows but changes. Well written as always, Bill.
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:07pm EDT
Your comment accurately reflects the framework I am trying to establish. Thank you.
So many questions, so many memories, so many .... all can wait because We're still fixing a few holes in our soft blue sky. Indeed, we are, my friend!
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:08pm EDT
There's just too much to do at the moment to waste time thinking about past ashes. I appreciate your point.
Angela A. Jul 28, 2009, 1:13am EDT
I love that fondness can wink.
I just hope that it doesn't wink at the wrong cloud.
They can get quite jealous you know?
How you think we got thunder and lightening?
Te he!
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:09pm EDT
Jealousy is man's downfall. Thanks.
Elsie Duggan Jul 28, 2009, 2:10am EDT
This is very lovely William, every line means something special in our past and looks forward to a future. Your heart must be very full these days, and it is leaking out through your pen. goodnight William, I love you.
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:11pm EDT
I am overwhelmed these days with things to do and my injured left arm isn't helping. However, such madness is often fertile ground for creative thought. Thank you.
Marianne M. Jul 28, 2009, 7:50am EDT
"fixing a few holes in our soft blue sky," - wonderful! This poem is you at your best. Loved it, Bill!
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:12pm EDT
Thank you. I'm not being pompous when saying you have given a reason I enjoy my verse. Thank you.
Kushal Poddar Jul 28, 2009, 7:51am EDT
Pages and paragraphed dreams is an amazing image.

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penni d. Jul 28, 2009, 9:01am EDT
holes in the road
holes in the sky
holes in the heart
oh,me, oh my
Fix the road
fix the sky
fix the heart
and do not die
oh me, oh my
Curt L. Jul 28, 2009, 11:59am EDT
Very nice, Penni!
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:14pm EDT
Penni, I just love you riffing with words. This is a very nice companion compliment. Thank you.
penni d. Jul 28, 2009, 2:30pm EDT
I got a Lot more out of your poem, as usual, William, but given the frigile heath issues of late, my mind went this-a-way.
penni d. Jul 28, 2009, 2:31pm EDT
fragile, I meant...but perhaps friggin' fragile? :)
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:33pm EDT
I sincerely hope you get better and soon.

I just dragged the large rug in our living room outdoors. I'm suppose to clean it.
penni d. Jul 28, 2009, 3:50pm EDT
that is NOT a Rug, William!!! 'Tis ME, Visiting!!!! AIEEEEEEEEEEEEE
penni d. Jul 28, 2009, 3:51pm EDT
and, ha, wasn't talking about my health so much as many of our gather friends. mine is just new meds for thyroid and all is well....:)
William Dotani Jul 30, 2009, 1:22am EDT
A lot of us are sick. I just suffer from dandelion paranoia, which is quite common I've heard.
Curt L. Jul 28, 2009, 12:00pm EDT
Another great one, William!
Thank you!
William Dotani Jul 28, 2009, 2:20pm EDT
Thank you.
Pamela O. Jul 28, 2009, 2:33pm EDT
That was lovely. Very nicely done William!
William Dotani Aug 9, 2009, 12:52am EDT
Thank you.
Lisa Frost Jul 28, 2009, 4:36pm EDT
a wonderful write
Lee P. Jul 28, 2009, 4:53pm EDT
Yesterday created another memory but all my holes are patched up. Sometimes you just gotta get out the duct-tape. Your duct-tape is pretty colored alphabet words and as I said before you can paint quite a picture with your alphabet duct-tape. You almost lost me on this one, but I think I found my way by the time I got to the end. Your words are so pretty, mine are so Texan.
William Dotani Jul 30, 2009, 2:54am EDT
I rather like the Texan dialect. I sometimes watch Austin City Limits. Duct tape is a must have staple.
t b. Jul 28, 2009, 8:52pm EDT
This is lovely William.
I still wear bell bottoms.
And when I hear Eric Clapton singing that line:"Bell bottom blues, you made me cry." My mind reaches back to when I first heard it. I see myself then and now and can hardly believe how much time has passed. I still love that song!
William Dotani Jul 30, 2009, 2:57am EDT
Thank you. I have been telling people that I want people to go beyond simply understanding my verse. You have just given a very clear example of what I mean. Thank you.
Sheila Deeth Jul 28, 2009, 11:53pm EDT
Always fixing holes, and if we fixed them all we'd be too near the sun, so content to stay fixing, accepting... I like this poem.
William Dotani Jul 30, 2009, 3:07am EDT
Yes, accepting is a sense of peace. Thank you.
May there always be time for memories..., for knowing that things have changed, relationships, how we interact and how we view, but that it's all right because, at each stage in our lives, things are supposed to keep changing and will. Excellent and so very, very true. One of the best I've read (so far, have to keep inserting that one), Bill.
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Marilyn
William Dotani Jul 30, 2009, 1:23am EDT
Thank you Marilyn. That's sweet.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Jul 29, 2009, 3:40am EDT
waxed wings are restricted going towards sun otherwise they will melt soon.Fixing holes~never read before.Your poem gives a soft touch with an everlasting impression.
William Dotani Jul 30, 2009, 1:27am EDT
I'm always thinking, 'Can those who read my lines feel beyond the word images?' Just as a song needs a good backbeat, a poem needs doors opened by words that create a vista. In other words, I try.
Ed Da Head Toker Jul 29, 2009, 9:22am EDT
nice read
Marge H. Jul 30, 2009, 7:34pm EDT
Came back to enjoy this again. The comments are lovely too.
Debra H. Jul 31, 2009, 8:05am EDT
If I could give you a standing Ovation I would, all I can say is thank you William
William Dotani Aug 3, 2009, 5:07pm EDT
Thank you. That's sweet.

I do own two Ovation guitars.
Connie L. Aug 4, 2009, 2:59am EDT
this is a very lovely poem, thank you for sharing it
William Dotani Aug 9, 2009, 12:42am EDT
Your welcome.
Wilma M. Oct 12, 2009, 2:39pm EDT
"In the quilt we're stitching of moments, hopes and dreams"

I can really see myself doing this day to day. I think I'm better able now to reflect on the overall picture than I was a few years ago. I hope that doesn't mean that I'm getting old.
William Dotani Oct 14, 2009, 12:27am EDT
Change often brings us a new focus to see that not realized before.
lynn a. Oct 14, 2009, 12:39am EDT
Followed Wilma's comment over here. This could be a book with all the thoughts in it and the hopes and dreams it causes. Plus, when I read it, I felt desire and compulsion to do and sort through and work out and keep going and make things better, to recognize and to appreciate. Now I'm all worn out.
William Dotani Oct 18, 2009, 2:08pm EDT
A lot of thoughts flow into at times and these thoughts influence my writing. In reading your comment, I thought about Kahil Gibran's book The Prophet and Emerson's essay on beauty. I think appreciation is vital for a good life as is constant feelings of thankfulness to God. I very much thank you for letting my verse touch you in a positive manner.

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