by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

Siphoned Signature

February 26, 2009 06:18 PM EST (Updated: February 27, 2009 03:26 PM EST)
views: 138 | comments: 37

And our talk of hope quite pleasantly:
Parts of innocence blending, window fog
Things up or down with no criteria
Awareness adds a heavy weight with crown
Enter the threshold, decisions direct
Avenues of signals, running around

Roads fraught, siphoned detail and mystery
Diagrams, charades, send endless clutter
Paths filled with thick as a brick advice
Lists of do and don't matter are changeling
Struggles live in delightful happiness
It's the caring and sharing hope will sing

There's a rope ladder for climbing mountains
Warm winds are blowing, each rung says success
If eternal smiling faces start to breed
Here, there and everywhere, may sun's lips kiss
Beautiful glaze on clay, hope being testament
Signature from dawning, siphoned again

 

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Comments: 37

Peter Joseph Swanson Feb 26, 2009, 6:21pm EST
mmmmm - mountains with warm winds !!!
Arian L. Feb 26, 2009, 6:52pm EST
thanks for sharing
Becky L. Feb 26, 2009, 8:18pm EST
In first becoming 'aware' we encounter, we notice, of all those obstacles, intrusive thoughts, details of daily life, much stuff we notice... Then, we find that the caring and sharing is what brings happiness and from there - its straight up the mountain we go - sure of the end product... This is so deep - I had to read it several times - I don't know if my interpretation is what you had intended - but it's what I 'got'. VERY, VERY GOOD WRITE!! I enjoyed it immensely!
JOHN BECK Feb 26, 2009, 8:31pm EST
It needs to be fired before it's glazed. Caring, sharing, hope--not a bad idea, Bill.
elizabeth e. Feb 26, 2009, 9:00pm EST
Not a bad idea, at all.
Deloris Wright Feb 26, 2009, 10:17pm EST
This one is very deep William.But has a lot of meaning. We are all trying to climb that rope ladder.And I agree with John Beck. " IT has to be fired, before it's glazed"
Ellie !. Feb 26, 2009, 11:35pm EST
You do these things so well. I run and hide from them. Maybe because they expose so much. But that's why yours are so good. Nice one.
Jennifer Lee Feb 26, 2009, 11:51pm EST
Very profound Bill, loved the imagery too. Thank you for sharing in our group.
lynn a. Feb 27, 2009, 12:06am EST
I like the imagery too, and the hope that it could happen. It could. Maybe.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 27, 2009, 1:37am EST
Inspiring words,William. I like 3 rd line of the second stanza...
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 27, 2009, 1:38am EST
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Svetlana Goryacheva Feb 27, 2009, 8:59am EST
Loved the imagery, dear William! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Michelle W. Feb 27, 2009, 9:43am EST
I am enjoying warm winds now!
Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !

Peace!
Marge H. Feb 27, 2009, 12:36pm EST
Beautiful imagery.
Marge H. Feb 27, 2009, 12:37pm EST
Love the comments too.
Donald M. Feb 27, 2009, 2:48pm EST
It sounds as though you are feeling better. Better to be able to climb the rope than get out of the way of the whip when it is snapped .
William Dotani Feb 27, 2009, 3:28pm EST
Astute point John and Deloris. A careless mistake on my part and it's been edited. Sincerely, Thank you.
William Dotani Feb 27, 2009, 3:29pm EST
Norma & Donald, I have to be listening to DEVO to get images of whips.
Mariana T. Feb 27, 2009, 4:31pm EST
Awareness adds a heavy weight with crown
This line grabs me!!!

I won't mention why and I don't drink Crown either - just grabs me! SAlud
Cristina S. Feb 27, 2009, 5:31pm EST
Climbing mountains with rope ladders -
and living with the delightful happiness of struggles
- presumeably successful struggles? -
sounds to me like you are making physical progress Bill!
What a great way to express it!
Anna D. Feb 27, 2009, 7:51pm EST
That is a great piece of work William. Thanks for your visit to my post. That is a lot of flowers.
Anna del C.
Author of "The Silent Warrior Trilogy"
http://www.annadelc.com
Sheila Deeth Feb 27, 2009, 8:37pm EST
Reaching for the rope.
Shelbia C. Feb 27, 2009, 9:14pm EST
I think your creativity as well as your talent is amazing.
Thanks for posting to Writing Reservoir.
Angela A. Feb 27, 2009, 10:09pm EST
Thanks for posting to Anythingwriting
William Dotani Feb 28, 2009, 1:17am EST
Cristina sees the background quite perfectly. TY.
Debra H. Feb 28, 2009, 4:16am EST
Great visuals, thought provoking.
Laura M. Feb 28, 2009, 11:25am EST
This poem surges its spiritual call to hope
with a delicious dance through obstructive
and deferred and metaphorical
encroachments with great success....it is all in your perception,
and that is a view that we must own and realign to build
this new future that cries out so for love to nourish its
fragile first steps forward. Wonderful poem, William!
"everywhere, may sun's lips kiss
Beautiful glaze on clay, hope being testament
Signature from dawning, siphoned again"
This quote is a vibrant prayer in itself.
Curt L. Feb 28, 2009, 12:36pm EST
"Struggles live in delightful happiness
It's the caring and sharing hope will sing..."
Just wonderful!
Mariana T. Feb 28, 2009, 4:28pm EST
Struggles live in delightful happiness
It's the caring and sharing hope will sing
love this - oh oh - same as Curt L. thanks William - your work always inspires me. Salud
debra g. Feb 28, 2009, 9:24pm EST
William,you out did yourself on this one.As always your work is wonderful.
Elsie Duggan Mar 1, 2009, 4:01am EST
Wonderful poem, of your climbing back to health William , may God be with you all the way, your wonderful mind is astounding in telling your tale, goodnight William
Lisa Frost Mar 2, 2009, 8:26pm EST
wonderful writing!
Sujata (funnily 'Suji' ) S. Mar 4, 2009, 11:52am EST
Beauty of thought that is Willi !!!
Crystal Scordias Mar 9, 2009, 11:11am EDT
You know... I'm not going to say I understand this poem. I will keep reading it to try to understand, but (and I love this) the way you write is mystifying.

RE: I wholeheartedly agree with you; sexuality should not be an important factor to platonic friendships. It should only matter in romantic endeavors. It sounds to me that your friend has gone off to be one of those bad apples.
Wilma M. May 9, 2009, 12:49am EDT
Could I have a more solid ladder? I'm not sure how well I can climb the mountain on a rope one. Unless this is the Amazing Race and I will get a million dollars for doing it.

Lovely positive images.

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