by Kim A.

Member since:
June 25, 2007

Stormy Day-Poem(all comments welcome)

July 26, 2007 05:52 PM EDT

views: 76 | rating: 10/10 (12 votes) | comments: 14

Stormy Day
Thunder,lightning,rain,
Roaring and deadly streaks

Not knowing its power or intention
Destruction it could reak.

Roaring of long and loud
crashing sounds,sounds of rain drops

Flashing in the sky so high
Throwing its fierce loud pops.

As it softly goes away.
Light shines through the clouds

The sun dries up the rain
Suddenly bringing out the crowds.

By:Kim

Tags: environment, poem, poetry, education, people, stormy day

To Groups: lean on me, POINTS MAKE PRIZES, FREE SPEECH AREA FOR EVERYONE ON GATHER, Your Group, Let it out!, Childhood Stories, Type and post What You want AND dont get Deleted!, Get Your Points, Points Maximizer, Nature and Animal Photography, Grass Roots Writing, !!! Random Posts !!!, Gather Broadcasting, The Reader's Lounge, Redneck Gals Lovin Redneck Guys, Parables and other Life Lessons, Inviting-Points, Random Musings, PostIt, Post what doesn't FIT anywhere else!, !!! Post It, We're Not Picky !!!, Fun and anything and everything, IS IT NICE TO POINT - WELL YES IT IS !!!, I want it All, I Think This Is Funny, Even If You Don't, Writers' and Readers' Cafe, Points are great, but SHOW ME THE MONEY $$$$, Southern Life, YaDaYadaYada, All Posts Welcome!!!, I write and I take pictures because it brings me pleasure

link to this page

Bookmark this post:

Comments: 14

Kim A. Jul 26, 2007, 6:44pm EDT

thanks Angela!

reply to this comment

andrew c. Jul 27, 2007, 3:05am EDT

great poem kim

reply to this comment

Diane B. Jul 27, 2007, 6:06am EDT

nice poem Kim

reply to this comment

DiAnA D. Jul 27, 2007, 6:31am EDT

Thanks! Good job!

reply to this comment

© MrBill Jul 27, 2007, 10:00am EDT

Nice Kim!

You do not seem very fond of the
thunder and lightning of a storm.

reply to this comment

Hendrik de Villiers Jul 27, 2007, 10:15am EDT

Thanks. It seems you have the tune with words - it just keep flowing, like the rain! Keep going.

reply to this comment

Randy- Being true to myself Jul 27, 2007, 10:36am EDT

Very nice Kim. I could feel the rain storm in your words.

reply to this comment

Sara :-) Jul 27, 2007, 1:02pm EDT

I really like it. Please post it to the Storm Clouds group.

reply to this comment

Roberta A. Jul 27, 2007, 3:01pm EDT

Very nice.

reply to this comment

James B. Aug 12, 2007, 1:27pm EDT

I like this one.

reply to this comment

William Dotani Aug 12, 2007, 6:00pm EDT

I like the rhyme flow. You should check the word reak. Sorry, but I'm going to give a bit of a critique. This poem is top heavy with good, but too much emphasis put on the storm's description. A poem needs balance when shifting or transitioning the scene. I think this poem is much too short and could use a lot more detail to give a richer view of the events. I suggest you edit it and repost it.

reply to this comment

wiaka's just ... curious Aug 22, 2007, 4:58pm EDT

I like the storm description as it brought memories of storms I have experienced. Iwould have liked to see a smoother flow towards the end, something on the what it felt like after a storm .. the smells, the environmet things like that.

Blessings

reply to this comment

Karolyn Q. Aug 28, 2007, 12:40pm EDT

It was nice.

The HOTTEST ORIGINAL graphics on the NET at Sparkletags.Com

The HOTTEST ORIGINAL graphics on the NET at Sparkletags.Com

WwW.SparkleTags.Com

reply to this comment


Join the Conversation	You are following this conversation \| stop following follow this conversation by email

Chime in! Become a Gather member to comment.

Already a member? Sign in

Report this as potentially inappropriate

You might also like

Stormy by Shelbia C.
Stormy by Kat Ballew
How Peace And Harmony Start At Home by tom c.

view more posts

More by Kim A.

view all posts by Kim A.

Gather | Friends | Groups | Share

About Gather | Engagement Marketing | Make New Friends | Gather Points | Advertise on Gather | Gather Press | Privacy | Terms of Service | Community Guidelines
Books | Celebs | Entertainment | Family | Food | Health | Moms | Money | News | Politics | Spirituality | Sports | Travel | Writing

Version 16865, "Oz"; Copyright © 2009 Gather Inc. All rights reserved.