by pamela r.
Member since:
April 24, 2007

Party crasher

October 23, 2007 08:00 PM EDT
views: 50 | rating: 10/10 (15 votes) | comments: 13

Who invited this clown?

I don't recall sending an invitation

Yet here he is

Pain in the rearend

Someone escort him out

And tell him to take his vile friends with him

To include chemo, needles, pain and his close

     associate ache

I'm calling the cops, party crashers got to go.

I was just enjoying my music

thought about getting up and dancing

Not letting the party crasher spoil my party

Tell him he has to go.

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Comments: 13

Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Oct 24, 2007, 11:24am EDT
must not go without an invitation...sad...
pamela r. Jan 13, 2008, 10:00am EST
Thanks Raven--really didn't notice the beat till you mentioned it--wrote it when i was kind of upset--i write better when i'm calmed down but at the time i needed to get the feeling down on paper and realease that pent up energy. Thanks for suggestion.
Terry Collett Jan 18, 2008, 9:34am EST
Good poem.
Agree with Raven completely

many times when upset the beat comes out begging for refinement when looked at calmly at a later date
pamela r. Jan 20, 2008, 9:00am EST
Thanks Terry & Jules!
Abby N. Jan 20, 2008, 10:14pm EST
Well written.
Juan J Martinez May 15, 2008, 1:45pm EDT
Great emotion found in this write.
Beverly P. Jun 8, 2008, 10:36am EDT
great feeling in it!
Thanks for sharing!
Donna S. Jun 10, 2008, 8:37pm EDT
thanks
Sarah (I want points) Jun 12, 2008, 1:30pm EDT
Very interesting. Good job.
Bill's Spirit Jun 20, 2008, 7:50am EDT
I agree; Great Emotion.

I could really feel irritation, frustration.

Thanks for sharing this.
Shelbia C. Dec 28, 2008, 3:15am EST
Ths feels very real. Great job

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