life is a muse

Comments: 35

Svetlana Goryacheva Aug 22, 2007, 10:57am EDT

Admirable! ;-)

Blessings and good luck - S.

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Bijou *~MotherGrizzly~* M. Aug 22, 2007, 11:24am EDT

I like how life and writing come together in this fine poem

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Samantha H. Aug 22, 2007, 11:43am EDT

i love this, and I like how you write. I think you should join some poetry groups and post to them. There are a lot of people who would love your work, too, and would have a much easier time finding it if you posted to groups. Way to go! Keep writing, because you have talent.

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Fred Hose Aug 22, 2007, 11:53am EDT

Oh Amar this is so true and so beautiful.
I seemed to feel your emotions as you travelled along. Keep observing. Keep feeling. Never lose those qualities. Then you'll never be poor.

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Richard Melendez Aug 22, 2007, 1:13pm EDT

Amarpreet... what a lovely song of life. These sentiments are rich in their life affirming fervor. You are far ahead in life with these insightful thoughts.

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Richard Melendez Aug 22, 2007, 1:16pm EDT

By the way... I love the soft reflective mood of your new icon and that smile is charming.

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Vinay Benjamin Aug 22, 2007, 3:53pm EDT

Preeti - your closing lines left me stupified -

"Mystified by life

You discover self

You live to learn

And learn to live"

Well written, lady. And I agree with Richard, your new icon is stunning.

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Sheila Deeth Aug 22, 2007, 4:38pm EDT

"Live to learn and learn to live." Great line. And I love the idea of life being the muse.

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Elsie Duggan Aug 23, 2007, 1:17am EDT

This is a wonderful poem Amarpreet, great lines in it, all comments above well deserved.

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DARCEY D. Aug 23, 2007, 4:12am EDT

Wonderful imagery in this beautiful poem Amarpreet,
Sun brightens your thoughts
''Mud metamorphose to curvaceous pots.''
Great lines , and the last few lines pack so much wisdom into so few words,
excellent.
Darcey D.

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andrew c. Aug 23, 2007, 4:40am EDT

excellent poem

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amarpreet k. Aug 23, 2007, 7:12am EDT

thanks all for your wonderful comments

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Monika V. Aug 23, 2007, 11:22am EDT

So beautiful poem!!! Amarpreet
great write

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Parul S. Aug 23, 2007, 1:29pm EDT

Amarpreet, that is beautiful. Specially the lines - You learn to live and live to learn

That is so true. well done. Cant wait to see more from you.

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Aug 24, 2007, 1:01am EDT

I missed this...very bad for me....

This is really an innocent poem Amarpreet and I feel that you are a genuinely good person.yes..very true we learn from our nature and we get inspired by each and every small or big objects...and I can see the free expressions from your heart which is so lovely...I am very bad in Poem and I find this poem too cute ..10/10 for you...

you are real good in expressing shades of life....and you give each shade a chance in your article..

Love you...BTW .....you are so pretty that I wish to see you soon...whenever I will go to India ,I will meet you and then we will talk a lot about life...

hugs

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Aug 24, 2007, 12:36pm EDT

HEY..thanks for your lovely and brillaint comments on my article

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Aug 24, 2007, 12:48pm EDT

Sure I will check the link...

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Sammie B. Aug 24, 2007, 6:23pm EDT

I like the message, but there are a few things I think I'll point out.

Every day rhymed with every day sort of detracts from the rhyme scheme...makes it a little awkward.

Also, your rhyming scheme seems to be all over the place. I'm not sure if you intended to rhyme or not. However, I would suggest choosing one or the other (or a pattern of the two like writers such as Dickenson), otherwise it just doesn't flow right.

"Mud metamorphose to curvaceous pots" - I absolutely /adore/ this line. I love the imagery you portray here.

It's a very heart-felt and emotion-filled poem. Good job!

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Charity M. Aug 24, 2007, 8:11pm EDT

((( SO much beauty in a poet's heart)))

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Payam Sudhakaran Aug 25, 2007, 10:11am EDT

Dear amar, I was away in Kerala and couldn't visit gather... I'm sorry I'm late to see your beautiful poem... You are very right. Life is an eternal teacher!!!

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Edward Nudelman Aug 26, 2007, 7:41am EDT

Yes, you caught it perfectly, Amapreet. A beautiful generalization of a very specific point, and if life be not the driver, we are most certainly adrift and aimless. A wonderful and positive affirmation for writing. Well done indeed.

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Carol Cassell Aug 26, 2007, 8:15am EDT

Great imagery and words of wisdom. "Life is an eternal teacher", how very true.

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Bonnie L. Aug 27, 2007, 12:58am EDT

I think you are wise far beyond your years. You are blessed with a gift, you do realize that, don't you?

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Narasimha Rao Jakkamsetty Aug 27, 2007, 3:35am EDT

Wonderful, just wonderful. Your last stanza is even more impressive and the last two lines "Live to learn and Learn to live" perfectly right. Sometimes I feel life is too short to learn everything through your own experience; so learn throuh others' experience as well in books, I tell myself. I wish I too could write poetry! But too old to learn now. I was visiting Nudleman's site and discovered you by accident? All my best wishes to you. I am sure you will make a name for yourself one day.

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guy arneson Aug 27, 2007, 7:10am EDT

I like that!

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John F Walter Aug 28, 2007, 10:48pm EDT

An enthusiastic lyric ode to experience, emphasizing the many permutations we go through to be taught by life. Putting my two favorite lines together--¨When life is your muse¨, ¨you discover self¨--I think sums up succinctly this generous poem of metamorphosing from within. Thank you so much, amarpreet.

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