by F. Jeanette c.
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August 22, 2007

Anjelica

September 19, 2008 01:10 PM EDT (Updated: March 08, 2009 11:27 PM EDT)
views: 131 | rating: 10/10 (22 votes) | comments: 42

Satan grabbed her soul

She twisted and slithered

but he held her tight

Impregnating her brain

and narrowing her sight

Kissed her lips and

carressed her wings

before she took flight

Jeanette Cheezum 2008
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Comments: 42

Cara D. Sep 19, 2008, 1:18pm EDT
Very nice!
lemzo n Sep 19, 2008, 1:21pm EDT
beautiful!
J W. Sep 19, 2008, 1:26pm EDT
good poem
Anne W. Sep 19, 2008, 1:41pm EDT
Great!
Kitty S. Sep 19, 2008, 1:53pm EDT
beautiful
F. Jeanette c. Sep 19, 2008, 6:17pm EDT
Thank You, I've been dabbling with poetry, latley.
Aimee "I Love Points" K. Sep 19, 2008, 7:34pm EDT
Nice Job!
Robert M Sep 19, 2008, 11:29pm EDT
Very nice!!
Jennifer aka Jenn B. Sep 22, 2008, 11:18am EDT
hmmm,good poem but bodes of ill intentions...lol
Beverly P. Sep 23, 2008, 1:05am EDT
great job!

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Lisa Frost Sep 24, 2008, 2:50pm EDT
wonderful writing.
Curt L. Sep 25, 2008, 12:14pm EDT
Intriguing! I really like this one!
John Philipp Sep 26, 2008, 12:10am EDT
Elegant writing, Jeanette.

Thanks.
Kushal Poddar Sep 27, 2008, 12:03am EDT
impregnating her brain is a wonderful phrase.
great one.
Tina Coruth Sep 27, 2008, 2:01pm EDT
Beautifully done!
David S. Sep 28, 2008, 11:44pm EDT
Quick, urgent, and compelling!
F. Jeanette c. Sep 29, 2008, 9:40am EDT
I'd like to thank everyone, this is something I have just started in the past year. I've been so wrapped up in writing novels and Frash fiction, I didn't know I had this capability. :)
Shelbia C. Oct 3, 2008, 9:04pm EDT
This is good
Beverly P. Oct 7, 2008, 7:19pm EDT
Interesting.... is this someone commiting suicide by jumping? Is it dark or is it meant to be one of "flight" with good intentions? Just curious!
F. Jeanette c. Oct 7, 2008, 8:29pm EDT
The poem is meant for the imagination of the reader to soar.
Sheila Deeth Oct 9, 2008, 12:55am EDT
Wow. Neat.
♥~♥Czella♥~♥ K. Oct 11, 2008, 7:35pm EDT
Beautiful?
Andrea (Ms. Conservative) L. Oct 14, 2008, 9:48am EDT
Sorry for the generic comment, but I have to catch up on my emails. Giving you a 10 with my comment.
joy leftow Oct 23, 2008, 4:11pm EDT
a little scary almost like satan can overtake you...
Nyota *Star* Nov 26, 2008, 1:51pm EST
I like!

You could end it with: into the deep dark night
Beverly P. Dec 6, 2008, 3:04pm EST
A little frightening, a little sweet.. hoping the wings helped her escape his evil ways! Good job!

Just commenting you back, thanking you for a comment you made on one of my Christmas Questions, question #2! I always pay back the comments!!!!
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Janet Somewhere Up On The Mount Dec 14, 2008, 10:13am EST
Thanks for sharing.
.* Sandi * Dec 14, 2008, 5:03pm EST
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I am wishing a happy holiday on your comments
F. Jeanette c. Dec 14, 2008, 10:25pm EST
Thanks so much to all of you. I love to do poems but I have to wait until the mood strikes.
This one developed from something in the neighborhood years ago. I'm not sure what jarred my memory.
Sue T. Dec 18, 2008, 6:23pm EST
I like the imagery and the sense of urgency you have expressed here. Great work.
Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Jan 24, 2009, 8:00am EST
Good imagery in this.
Stuart the Creative Doctor G. Jan 26, 2009, 12:11am EST
Great poem.
joy leftow Jan 27, 2009, 12:40pm EST
yummy
Marsha S. Feb 18, 2009, 9:42am EST
Just letting you know your content has reached 25 comments and has therefore been removed from ~3,000 Here We Come!~
Terry M. Mar 26, 2009, 9:21pm EDT
A great poem!
Svetlana Goryacheva Apr 7, 2009, 2:04am EDT
Excellent one! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Sheila Deeth Apr 10, 2009, 2:31pm EDT
Glad you spotlighted this. Powerful poem.
Sandi S. May 25, 2009, 7:44pm EDT

WHOA!

That was twisted and amazing!

I am always takin by my sprite to a helpful place no matter how long ago wrote

a friend of my daughters on meth believed she could fly.now ahe will never walk again
F. Jeanette c. Jun 6, 2009, 3:58pm EDT

That is so sad.

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