by Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W.

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September 6, 2006

You, On the Other Side (of the Monitor)

June 19, 2007 01:50 PM EDT (Updated: June 19, 2007 01:52 PM EDT)

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I pour my heart out,

Like water from a spout,

And you, on the other side,

Say nothing.

There's really nothing I want you to be,

I just asked that you acknowledge me.

And you, on the other side,

Said nothing.

Was it too hard to share?

Was it too much a dare?

Did you find it too painful to see?

If I begged you to speak,

Willed your words, kind, I seek,

Would you, still, on the other side,

Say nothing?

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Comments: 44

Janet Somewhere Up On The Mount Jun 19, 2007, 1:52pm EDT

Ron I liked this a lot. Good job.

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Sarah (can't believe the year's over) G. Jun 19, 2007, 1:55pm EDT

Great!

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 19, 2007, 1:56pm EDT

This poem is dedicated to all the writers on gather that can't get a break, get rated, get some recognition. It's a long road, one I've gotten a little further along, but there was a time, and still is, for many of us, where our best work just gets buried without a comment being made. Silence is the worst critic.

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Sue * Jun 19, 2007, 1:57pm EDT

This should be a writing day for you...you have found the "muse" they speak of and it is working for you. I think you touch here on something I felt when I wrote about intuition..."you offer the branch and it is broken." As you said, we never really know about the person on the other side of the monitor...I hope if this a real experience that the quiet doesn't last long.

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Sue * Jun 19, 2007, 1:59pm EDT

Ah, you answered the question. It does take time, and for some of us...we may never reach the level of being read by hundreds. It has taken months for me to get to where I am now...and, I remember what it was like when no one read anything I wrote. I think around here, you get what you give.

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Alisa Kerwood Jun 19, 2007, 2:01pm EDT

I've had moments like that great job

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 19, 2007, 2:02pm EDT

Sue, your first interpretation made just as much sense, I think, though that kind of surprised me.

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 19, 2007, 2:13pm EDT

Thanks Audrey,
You have always been one that didn't have a problem speaking on the other side of the monitor. I love that about you, even when you rag on me. Feel the love.

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Joan D. Jun 19, 2007, 2:22pm EDT

You know that "Thumper Theory"? The "If you can't say something nice, don't say nuthin'' at all"?

Sometimes that's the better part of valor - especially since I've gotten my share of F***Y** gather e-mails from folks who disagreed with me.

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arlene (no shame in my game) w. Jun 19, 2007, 2:35pm EDT

I like it! Very creative.

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Doc, in the middle, holding on... Curmudgeon esq. Jun 19, 2007, 2:43pm EDT

amen brother.... amen!

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Olga M. Jun 19, 2007, 2:56pm EDT

There there now, see? We're all here. Good poem.

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 19, 2007, 3:08pm EDT

Joan,
I think you may be referring to political articles, and I am talking about creative writing, poetry, etc. I'm right there with you on politics, but I have a hard time not commenting anyway, on those, usually with the same effect you cite, or db1's

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Crystal R. Jun 19, 2007, 3:29pm EDT

It is the worst and best kind of vulnerability, isn't it? It isn't like ordinary thoughts spread out for others to regard or disregard, but it is a piece of ourselves that we are placing in our hand and quietly offering. That is what makes the silence so painful, I think, because we don't know if the lack of response is rejection or oversight. I loved this..it really made me think. Thank you.

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Joan D. Jun 19, 2007, 3:36pm EDT

Well, yeah, but .. you see, Ron...
Other than in certain very SPECIFIC instances, I really don't do Poetry.
And a lot of the poetry I read here is... for lack of a better term... crap.
Forced Iambic Pentameter without any substance (The only person I've ever known of who could effectively use I.P. was Shakespere - and there are NO Shakesperes on Gather), prose with creative punctuation and no substance, (I really don't appreciate poetry, to be honest)
Rather than hurt the feelings of the poets I really cringe when reading (and you are NOT one of them) - it's better for me to just cruise to the next article and "say nothing".

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David P. Jun 19, 2007, 3:44pm EDT

You cannot make me say anything. But you just did make me want to say...good work.

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Marge H. Jun 19, 2007, 4:00pm EDT

I often feel like I have nothing worthwhile to add to what has already been said. Sometimes I try to comment in spite of that, so if my comments are inane that's just me trying to let you know that I do care about what you have to say. (Unless it's political; I don't do political)

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Pat M. Jun 19, 2007, 4:31pm EDT

"Silence is the worst critic."
Never a truer word was said, Ron. It is part of the dues of writing for others, and it can be disheartening. For what it's worth, consider yourself acknowledged from the other side of the world. I look forward to your sagas every day.
No pressure...

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Don(time to open them FEMA camps) S. Jun 19, 2007, 4:46pm EDT

Ten and I don't even like poetry.

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Ina ♥ Tagline Free Since September '09 ♥ Jun 19, 2007, 4:49pm EDT

I'm slowly learning an appreciation for poetry the longer I play at this site.

I actually enjoyed this.

Drat!

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Tanya P. Jun 19, 2007, 5:25pm EDT

Well written, and nice dedication to the Gather writers. --- Tuck it back in, dear. Your heart is showing.

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Siouxy Article Writer Jun 19, 2007, 6:37pm EDT

This is what I say. You and your Buddy are very cute.

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Tab B. Jun 19, 2007, 7:45pm EDT

10 here, Ron! And I won't say anything.... just type. =)

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 19, 2007, 8:04pm EDT

Joan, you have a point. Everyone, thank you for all your kind words. Siouxy, having seen your photo, so are you. lol

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Dawn M Jun 19, 2007, 10:46pm EDT

Love your poem Ron, and it's nice to see someone who understands how it feels to feel that no one is even reading what they write.

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Michele (Misha) B. Jun 19, 2007, 10:52pm EDT

:) - This is why I try to comment as much as possible for what I read or for the photographs I look at. Everyone needs input, to know someone has seen their work.

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 19, 2007, 11:34pm EDT

Dawn,
I went a long time with no, or one or two comments on everything I wrote. It was discouraging, to say the least. I occasionally come across others here with more talent that are being ignored, and all I can say is keep writing, connect, and comment. Those things are the three that get you going.

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Kathleen ♥ L. Jun 20, 2007, 12:14am EDT

I publish very little, I have more to say in response to what others publish, having said that there are only a select few who's poems garner any attention from me... Poetry is not my passion although measured doses are good for my spirit... Your's I always find time for... even if I don't comment.

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 20, 2007, 12:16am EDT

Amelie,
Thanks, a coop? Vas ist coop? By the way, I answered your comment on the B file.

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 20, 2007, 12:18am EDT

Kathleen,
Thanks, I feel honored. Spirits need fed sometimes, I know. You feed mine all the time.

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 20, 2007, 1:36am EDT

I know that, but in relation to writing, how would that work?

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Michele (Misha) B. Jun 20, 2007, 1:39am EDT

What are you still doing up? No one sleeps around here. lol.

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 20, 2007, 1:48am EDT

I sleep very little, myself. I'm about ready to try, though.

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 20, 2007, 1:51am EDT

Good night, gather!

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Mary (diet dr pepper junkie) T. Jun 20, 2007, 8:20am EDT

If you begged me to speak
I wouldn't be meek
Here on my side
I'd say something!

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 20, 2007, 6:38pm EDT

Thanks Mary,
I already knew that from experience with you, though. I appreciate the feedback you guys always take the time to give me. It's like you guys write me an article every day, that I write you one. Reciprocity, it's an excellent concept. lol

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maria (lurking in the shadows of the night) B. Jun 20, 2007, 8:14pm EDT

Well written Ron.

Yeah I know what you mean! i have only just reached my first 1000 points and I have been here for quite a few months.

I have to tell myself that my writing isn't that bad, it just gets lost

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Ron (in complete sheeple overload) W. Jun 20, 2007, 11:43pm EDT

Your writing is good, maria, I just read some, and left you a comment. I noticed one thing, but overall, you can write very well. It just takes time and connections and commenting a lot.

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