Spring Song

Oh yes! This is spring!

Colors exploding

Hearts igniting

Natures passion

So exciting.

Oh yes! This is spring!

Rain is falling

Storm clouds looming

Wind is blowing

Hearts are booming.

Oh yes! This is spring!

Trees are budding

Birds are singing

Kites are flying

Bells are ringing.

Oh what joy

comes with rebirth!

Empty lives

filled with mirth;

Hope reborn

in the warmth of spring;

Hearts open;

What joy love can bring!

Comments: 20

Gorgeous Gabby, a Gather Geeky Gal, and The Giz May 2, 2007, 10:17am EDT

Light and airy, just like spring itself. I like it. Thanks.

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Mark who can't get enough sunflowers P. May 2, 2007, 10:53am EDT

Always nice to read one of your works, Cheryl.

Suggestion: the last stanza could lose a few words and bring it into the nearly the same meter as the rest without any loss of meaning. These are just my opinion so worth everything you're paying for it. Feel free to think "what is he thinking?

Line 2: delete "with"
Line 4: do we have to have "become"?
Line 5: "is" isn't really necessary

Nice piece.

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Larry H. May 2, 2007, 11:07am EDT

thanks for sharing..

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elizabeth e. May 2, 2007, 12:47pm EDT

...guess you said it all...

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Olumide Akinwumi-Oke May 2, 2007, 1:48pm EDT

Nice poem, enjoyed it immensely, speaks to me about transitions and change.

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Marsha F. May 2, 2007, 4:08pm EDT

I pictured last Sunday afternoon as I read this. Very nice.
Mark made a few suggestions; I agree that it flows better without "become" in the last part. But what do I know?? LOL It's still good!

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Cheryl W. May 2, 2007, 5:49pm EDT

Thanks, everyone!

Mark....thanks so much for the suggestions. I loved them and have revised accordingly....:)

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amanda wallin May 3, 2007, 8:48am EDT

Your poem gives new life to the morn. Excellent use of punctuation which I'm not usually a big fan of. Thanks for the uplifting poem Cheryl!

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Edward Nudelman May 3, 2007, 11:11am EDT

Methinks Cheryl is stoked about the coming of Spring! Well, I concur, and I hope we get some more jubilant poems from you as a result.

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Philip B. May 3, 2007, 12:25pm EDT

Cheryl,

Your words move as though a part of the changing day,
they bring an inner warmth to our souls,
as the sun rays fill our days
your words fill our hearts and minds.

Thanks!

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Atticus *. May 4, 2007, 4:50pm EDT

What a joyful poem cheryl! makes me want to take off down the street skipping!

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jessie voigts May 5, 2007, 11:02am EDT

beautiful, cheryl! full of hope and life. :)

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Jim Ross May 6, 2007, 2:13am EDT

Ah, the senses piqued by spring. Beautiful, Cheryl. To be looked forward to and embraced with the awakening.

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Richard Melendez May 6, 2007, 6:22am EDT

Cheryl... the enthusiasm is contagious! You have my senses jumping and my body has come to its feet and I'm ready to be carried into the spirit of your poem's declarations.

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Courtney B. May 7, 2007, 2:21am EDT

very descriptive and reminds me so much of love anew in my own relationship! I really think you need to publish a collection. Everything you write is just wonderful!!!!!!!!!

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