The lives I took

Now I lay down to sleep

But, I can't...so

With me, a book I read

I try to take away the pain

to forget about you

and when you ripped my life away

I am having trouble breathing

the image of you and her

is all I'm seeing

I just read page three again

I think the fifth try

is the end

I put the book down

and call your cell

she answers

What the hell?

I decide to write, instead

scribble the words out,

from my head

Maybe I'll write a new book

of you and your new girl

and the lives I took!

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jadan x. Feb 11, 2007, 2:32am EST

I know that feeling all too well!

Try to forget about it for tonight and get some sleep.

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William M. Feb 11, 2007, 2:40am EST

There are better fish in the sea. The pain will go away with time. I hope the writing has helped.

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Shaunee C. Feb 11, 2007, 2:59am EST

sounds like me exceptI get phone calls all the time of unknown name and number I always reply with it's pretty sad when you have nothing better to do but call here to hear my voice have a nice day now.

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Dawne Joy Feb 11, 2007, 9:35am EST

lol....this poem is not about me. I am happily married.

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vijay kumar Feb 11, 2007, 9:58am EST

Powerful poem, Dawne on the misfortunes and darkness in life.

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LittleMissSunshine - Shel & Barney Rule L. Feb 11, 2007, 10:40am EST

I love the way you are learning to harness other energies into your poetry. It shows growth as a writer. It is one thing to reflect on yourself, but quite a different thing to reflect from someone else's point of view.

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Dawne Joy Feb 11, 2007, 2:38pm EST

Thanks Shelley. I am amazed that people have believed any of it. Like I wrote well enough that it could be about me. Amazing even more so, since I'm not really a writer. I just jot something down when I feel like it :-)

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