by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

Petals

November 17, 2008 04:10 AM EST (Updated: November 17, 2008 04:14 AM EST)
views: 107 | comments: 30

Petals fall from the original
Dependable crux of faith
A jingle jangle morning
Experience lends spatial display
Unique beautiful patchwork
Every path has solitaire
Were, here with hopes forever
Winds circulate loving care

Beauty feed us warming rays of sun
Seconds, minutes, hours, days
Writing facts down in a log
Cold drink from the refrigerator
Small moments, a sprig of thyme
Off to the actuary

Autumn and broken expectations
Gardens magical incantations
Grayish wisps smoke, burning leaf
Blue sky of hope, fulfill me

Patterns echo from each rug
Old or novice reflect different tugs

Petals fall from gentle rains next Spring


 

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Comments: 30

Svetlana Goryacheva Nov 17, 2008, 4:13am EST
Oh-h-h, what a beauty!!! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Kushal Poddar Nov 17, 2008, 7:18am EST
The sound of your words are exceptional and so is your treatment.

Moon for a girl*
ELLEN B. Nov 17, 2008, 7:34am EST
This provides "hopeful longing" in my soul William. Beautiful phrases. Ellen B
lynn a. Nov 17, 2008, 8:43am EST
Seems this gives the beauty of life while acknowledging there are some gray skies. I like that. Serious enough that it requires a second cup of coffee and a clearer head.
Tracey W. Nov 17, 2008, 8:59am EST
Lovely William! I love this line, Patterns echo from each rug. It just speaks volumes.
Lisa J Nov 17, 2008, 10:52am EST
Wow, William. There's a gentle wistfulness in this, and comfort in time's passage even as we long for a little bit of yesterday.
Peter Joseph Swanson Nov 17, 2008, 12:06pm EST
That poem smells real good.

Not only are you intelligent, and very very well read, but you are a marvelous poet.

Not many can claim THAT !!!
Marge H. Nov 17, 2008, 2:41pm EST
Peaceful and beautiful images.
Kay M. Nov 17, 2008, 3:34pm EST
Lovely images. I like thinking of the winds circulating loving care.
Rhetta A. Nov 17, 2008, 6:13pm EST
That's lovely.
Marie J. R. Nov 17, 2008, 6:33pm EST
peace and harmony, waiting, halting, much comes from your words,,, never, just words,,,
Marianne M. Nov 17, 2008, 6:40pm EST
"Autumn and broken expectations," loops to "Petals fall from gentle rains next Spring." Always ... thank goodness for spring and renewal! Well done, Bill! I'm blown away by how abundant and rich your writing is ...
Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Nov 17, 2008, 7:54pm EST
Beautiful poem, William.
Lisa Frost Nov 17, 2008, 9:41pm EST
beautiful!
Elsie Duggan Nov 18, 2008, 12:45am EST
I love this William, sorry to be around so late, but very busy all day long, and just getting on after trying to write something quickly. This is a lovely poem, you are writing so well lately, I just expect it, and I think everyone else does too, where do your ideas come from, I am trying to keep up with the prompts and have little time to write for my own self, although you know me, I manage to put myself in all my writing, lol, something wrong there I think. Hope you are feeling well, you posted this just before I went to bed last night, a whole nother story, goodnight William, love you.
Curt L. Nov 18, 2008, 12:18pm EST
Awesome, William, and edifying!
I especially love the stanza;
"Autumn and broken expectations
Gardens magical incantations
Grayish wisps smoke, burning leaf
Blue sky of hope, fulfill me..."
Deloris Wright Nov 18, 2008, 4:55pm EST
And so life goes on. Thru the cycles Winter always clears a way for Spring, spring for Summer and then to fall and winter again
Sheila Deeth Nov 18, 2008, 7:40pm EST
Loved the mixture of fall and spring, leaves and petals, and the cycle turns.
I like the very male sounding voice as this comes to me. Then it is unique as it breaks down into ones daily sequence of events infused with the emotion evoked by those very events.
Michelle W. Nov 19, 2008, 1:23pm EST
very very nice!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !
Rose H. Nov 20, 2008, 4:56pm EST
It's perfection - it speaks of beauty, I love it!
Kelly M. Nov 20, 2008, 9:40pm EST
Thanks for paying it forward to me! Be sure to join my group one for me one for you!
Barbary Chaapel Nov 22, 2008, 1:17pm EST
"A jingle jangle morning"

Somehow, William, you shape these poems with fresh words and themes we all recoginize.
Anne B. Grote Nov 23, 2008, 6:15pm EST
Are you lamenting the season? In all its beautiful imagery, your spring of hope remains with these crafty words.
Tracy Fabre Nov 24, 2008, 2:01am EST
all good. the layers of your poetry always impress me.
John F Walter Nov 25, 2008, 1:09pm EST
A moving impressionistic poem about faith, beauty and hope, William. I like you piece your experience into an aesthetic whole from petals, a cold drink, a sprig of thymes....small unnoticed things of life and meaning in the world.
Wilma M. Dec 3, 2008, 9:47am EST
Perfect invocation of fall scenes and memories with the glimpse of spring coming around again. This is really lovely, William.
Wilma M. Dec 3, 2008, 9:51am EST
Elsie said SHE was late but I'm much later. I have a list of your poetry that I've missed and will be getting around to all of them eventually.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Dec 6, 2008, 10:45pm EST
How about me...Wilma;)

Pattern ecos from each rug..wow
April H. Jan 23, 2009, 7:35pm EST
So preety

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