by Dena Straughn
Member since:
August 12, 2007

Coming Home

September 02, 2007 02:51 AM EDT (Updated: September 04, 2007 12:28 AM EDT)
views: 115 | comments: 56

Who are you?

Haven't we met?

Loved once?

Laughed?

Actually liked one another?

Where did we go?

Was it the ballgames,

Cubscouts, homework?

Your work?

Was it when I

Went back to school?

Was it the cancer?

Was it how the elder

Became the child?

Was it liquid fire?

Or the dragon balm of pain?

What took you from me

And me from you?

How can I expect you

To love me

When I have not

Yet

Been redefined;

Were you there all along?

Did I leave you behind?

I am sorry Love.

Give me time.

I will figure me out.

Will you still be there?

Yes, you always have been.

My anchor, my heart,

Wait for me

I am coming

Home.

 

 

I would like to ask you a favor. I have entered my first novel in the First Chapters Romance Contest and would appreciate your consideration.   Only votes of ten are counted in the final tally.  If you read it and like it, I would appreciate your 10 rating.   Thank you for taking a peek.   

This is the link for "Dancing With My Dream":

 http://www.gather.com/viewArticle.jsp?articleId=281474977084290

 

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Comments: 56

The personal pain is always the hardest to face.
Deb J. Sep 2, 2007, 3:08am EDT
Very beautiful and touching poem!!
Brenda (square peg in a round hole) H. Sep 2, 2007, 3:09am EDT
Very nice Dena.
Janet "Jax" B. Sep 2, 2007, 3:22am EDT
nice Dena...
Col. George W. Sep 2, 2007, 3:35am EDT
That was nice yet desturbing. I guess maybe because I am closer to the "coming home" part.
Dena Straughn Sep 2, 2007, 3:38am EDT
I hope it draws you closer there Colonel; blessings and thanks to all.
Heather C. Sep 2, 2007, 5:15am EDT
Very nice Dena, you expressed this well!
ashish j. Sep 2, 2007, 6:32am EDT
well done
Susan K. Sep 2, 2007, 8:40am EDT
thank you
Marianne R. Sep 2, 2007, 8:43am EDT
Nice words. I don't fully understand the history behind them but wanted you to know I read this :)
Apryl Just Apryl Sep 2, 2007, 10:37am EDT
Home is those who love us, what a wonderful poem of awakening and discovery
Alainia~ Tha one n only~ a. Sep 2, 2007, 11:28am EDT
Great poem! I wish I could go home!
Kimberly Ripley Sep 2, 2007, 11:47am EDT
Wow! Powerful words filled with emotion. Beautiful writing!
Carol Lloyd Sep 2, 2007, 12:59pm EDT
thank you for sharing this with all of us.
Olivera J. Sep 2, 2007, 1:11pm EDT
Wonderful!
flit . Sep 2, 2007, 1:13pm EDT
this is beautifully done... it tells a powerful story with very few words
Lela M. Sep 2, 2007, 1:50pm EDT
What great insight you have. Everyone is right, it is an awesome poem. Keep up the writing.
Jerri H. Sep 2, 2007, 4:02pm EDT
Very nice Dena...thanks~~~
Susan B. Sep 2, 2007, 4:41pm EDT
I like this!
Ruth MacGill Sep 2, 2007, 5:07pm EDT
A lovely expression of love. As they say, 'Home is where the heart is'.
Victoria H. Sep 2, 2007, 6:04pm EDT
Nicely written, Dena!
Lisa (I love loons) C. Sep 2, 2007, 6:39pm EDT
Very well written... has a powerful story to tell in very short amount of words. Nice job.
umair s. Sep 2, 2007, 9:04pm EDT
Cool poem, nicely written.
Welcome home.
Heather W. Sep 2, 2007, 9:17pm EDT
very nicely done! great job
Heather W. Sep 2, 2007, 9:28pm EDT
I really like this. Nice job.
Dave J. Sep 2, 2007, 10:10pm EDT
Very well writen and thought out poem. Pain makes home look that much sweeter.
Leslie "Missy" T. Sep 2, 2007, 10:51pm EDT
Good one.
Elsie Duggan Sep 2, 2007, 11:13pm EDT
I think I understand this one very well Dena, especially since you mention the illness there, and it is very beautiful and well written, and you will come home, I know.
Alison H. Sep 3, 2007, 12:55am EDT
Just beautiful, thank you, Dena!
Jeff H. Sep 3, 2007, 12:58am EDT
nice
William Dotani Sep 3, 2007, 1:03am EDT
My feeling is this poem is about growing apart in married life. The short verses are like snapshots and the ending is a beautiful ray of hope.
Dena Straughn Sep 3, 2007, 1:09am EDT
William, you are very intuitive. Thank you all for your kind words. This one was very difficult to share and your tenderness overwhelms me.
Eucliffe L. Sep 3, 2007, 1:55am EDT
This resonates with me I will explain later. I enjoyed it. Welcome !!
Nice job Dena. It's kind of deep, and I feel there is/was pain. I hope you've gone beyond that. WTG...!
Danielle P. Sep 3, 2007, 8:01am EDT
Beautiful
Bonnie S. Sep 3, 2007, 11:42am EDT
That is nicely done, I liked it : )
Rod B. Sep 3, 2007, 1:02pm EDT
Alone together...(((10)))
Terry Collett Sep 3, 2007, 3:09pm EDT
Mmmmmmmmmmmmm.Really moving.
Marie J. R. Sep 3, 2007, 4:36pm EDT
moving, very good, Thanks, ( 10 )
Deb J. Sep 3, 2007, 5:35pm EDT
Hope you are having a very nice Labors Day!
Dena Straughn Sep 3, 2007, 5:38pm EDT
Thanks Deb--I am
M & M. Sep 3, 2007, 6:29pm EDT
You are soooooooooooooooooooo good with expressions and words. You get another 10.
Barb M Sep 4, 2007, 2:14am EDT
This was nice. I don't always "get" everyones poems but I "got" this one.
Bundy P Sep 4, 2007, 6:35pm EDT
Breaks my heart, Dena
Sandy (Site Psychic™) Knauer Sep 4, 2007, 8:48pm EDT
Beautiful, Dena. I don't know enough about poetry to say anything more than how it affects me. This one tore at my heart without mush - that's a winner in my book.
Sheila Deeth Sep 4, 2007, 10:43pm EDT
Beautiful, and hopeful.
Heidi M. Sep 5, 2007, 11:15pm EDT
I think it is pretty much expected that when I read your poems i will let go a tear or two. loved it!
Robert D. Sep 6, 2007, 12:43am EDT
"When I have not yet been redefined." I wish I'd thought of that line! Very nice poem!
arlene (no shame in my game) w. Sep 6, 2007, 10:04am EDT
Very nice poem.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Sep 13, 2007, 4:53pm EDT
Bold and beautiful...great
Melissa R-S Oct 11, 2007, 11:23pm EDT
Dearest Dena,
I need to find the tissues. Thank you so much for sharing.

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