by maria (lurking in the shadows of the night) B.
Member since:
September 6, 2006

Broken

January 15, 2007 06:02 PM EST
views: 103 | comments: 26

Fury burns deep within
And Anger so benign does begin
Boils like a cauldron
Seething til it reaches the highest point
Brimming, Overflowing. Cascading, a
Volcanic eruption, spewing words
That never should have been spoken
Never to arise again, a trust that has been broken

Untainted love, untainted loyalty,
Swallowed amongst words as bitter as the coldest winter’s day
Freezing the heart so it cannot love again
Snapping, cracking, shattering into pieces
An agonising, excruciating pain
That cannot be mended
For what was once true love
Has now ended

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Comments: 26

Miz Lynn aka/BooBoo Jan 15, 2007, 6:15pm EST
Yikes...this poem spoke to me.
Wurdzgurl !!! Jan 17, 2007, 7:19pm EST
I definitely can relate!
Kathryn E. Jan 18, 2007, 5:55am EST
Me, too !
DARCEY D. Jan 28, 2007, 11:03am EST
Sorrowful,heartwrenching,and beautifuly written,could there be no chance to rekindle such true love ? .
Audrey F. Feb 3, 2007, 11:08am EST
It is so painful when trust is broken and we can find no way to restore it. Sometimes taking time and space can help, but unfortunately, sometimes things are irreparable. A really powerful poem, maria.
Alison Pearce Jun 27, 2007, 9:21pm EDT
Very powerful imagery.
Raw and gut wrenching - exactly as it happens. Ten stars from me.
Marge H. Nov 17, 2008, 2:38pm EST
Very well written Maria. Love can be painful especially when trust is broken.
elizabeth e. Nov 17, 2008, 6:30pm EST
This is the reality of many relationships...sad, but true.
William Dotani Nov 20, 2008, 9:38am EST
The emotion in this poem is raw and contained furious. It has a nice flow and has almost a circulating feeling of constant reminders felt. I really like this line: 'Swallowed amongst words as bitter as the coldest winter’s day.'
Marge H. Nov 23, 2008, 5:21pm EST
Came back to reread this. It is so painfully real.
Nyota *Star* Nov 26, 2008, 11:27pm EST
scarrrrry!
Sue T. Nov 27, 2008, 5:38pm EST
Vivid and intense words.
William Dotani Nov 29, 2008, 2:00am EST
I came back to reread this to remind myself the way any person might feel when trust is broken. Trust is very important.
Sheila Deeth Dec 2, 2008, 12:32am EST
Wow. Great poem. Very tight. Great images.
William Dotani Dec 8, 2008, 10:05am EST
Reread and read some of the comments.
Jennifer N. Jan 7, 2009, 11:10pm EST
So sad and powerful.
Barbary Chaapel Feb 24, 2009, 4:22pm EST
Your poem gets more excruciatingly honest as it proceeds.

Good write, Maria.
Ishbel R. Feb 25, 2009, 4:57am EST
I enjoyed this poem, Maria.
Angela A. Feb 25, 2009, 10:24pm EST
Wonderful poem!
Post it to my group, Anythingwriting and I will accept it.
Charles D. Mar 16, 2009, 7:23pm EDT
Another great piece. I enjoyed!!!!
Terry M. Mar 25, 2009, 6:51pm EDT
A great write!
Sheila Deeth Apr 15, 2009, 12:21am EDT
Sad and powerful. Worth rereading - glad you spotlighted it.
Marge H. May 8, 2009, 7:15pm EDT
Came back again to reread this great poem and to say thank you.

Wow. I feel this one and without trust, how can love be sustained? I know, too, that it can't. You wrote this straight from your heart. I felt it.
Marge H. Jul 28, 2009, 7:10pm EDT
Worth another read.

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