Building (poem written ingrade school)

I have written a poem in grade school and Kimberly Blackadar (author)

asked me to share it. So I was a kid when I wrote it, received an

A+ .

BUILDING

I am in that tall building

Watching that steal ball swinging,swinging

swinging.

Waiting till it comes and hit the building I 'm in.

I see it comng so I hid in a can made of tin.

There I am being smashed

I cry but Nobody heard

Someone help stop I don't want to be smashed.

Nobody Cares, Nobody Heard!

By Jeanette Weter (grade school

Comments: 28

anne ( way 2 crazy of a life ) c. Oct 26, 2009, 4:38pm EDT

wow that was great... I cant find any of my old stuff from then

Angel sent from God Secret Sisters Oct 26, 2009, 4:41pm EDT

Thank you I am surprised I had this I threw out a lot of my stuff. Now I wish I didnt

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ashley y. Oct 26, 2009, 4:40pm EDT

thats neat!

Angel sent from God Secret Sisters Oct 26, 2009, 4:41pm EDT

Ashley

Thank you!!:D

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Joanne Vicente Oct 26, 2009, 4:43pm EDT

Incredible, even if not for a child!

Angel sent from God Secret Sisters Oct 26, 2009, 6:05pm EDT

Joanne
Thank you

It was Kim that said I should post them , I was never going to share them..

Kimberly Blackadar Oct 26, 2009, 6:33pm EDT

And I am so glad you did, Janet! You have inspired me to dig through the boxes and pull out the long, lost poems of yore.

Joanne Vicente Oct 26, 2009, 6:35pm EDT

I'm glad she did. It was wonderful!

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Marilyn is looking for whatever there is. N. Oct 26, 2009, 4:46pm EDT

Jan,
Fourth Grade? Wow, you wrote so well even then, as you still do. Could you or would you consider posting it to Gather Writing Essentials, and putting MWE somewhere in the title?

If not, understood :) I have nothing left from back then, but I'm sure I wasn't half as good as you were. Keep looking, you never know and might have more!

Marilyn :)

Angel sent from God Secret Sisters Oct 26, 2009, 6:05pm EDT

It was like 6 or 7 th grade

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Peter Joseph Swanson Oct 26, 2009, 4:46pm EDT

That's really cool. I love it. I see it and feel it. Very clever !!!

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Deloris Wright Oct 26, 2009, 5:01pm EDT

It was like I was in the building. Thank you for sharing

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d d. Oct 26, 2009, 5:27pm EDT

wow, very thought provoking and imaginative for a young child. thank you for sharing it.

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Holly K. Oct 26, 2009, 5:48pm EDT

That's great!

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Richard Thuss Oct 26, 2009, 6:07pm EDT

Sometimes I think that what we were good at in third or fourth grade was really meant to be our calling. Nice job

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Oct 26, 2009, 6:15pm EDT

another very sad one~

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Oct 26, 2009, 6:15pm EDT

Thanks for posting to Guttergirls~

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Kimberly Blackadar Oct 26, 2009, 6:38pm EDT

Wow, it is unbelievably deep for a child, but then again, many writers tend to be introspective at an early age. So glad you shared, Janet, and I'm going to read some of your other posts before I log off!

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Marilyn is looking for whatever there is. N. Oct 26, 2009, 6:43pm EDT

I think what Richard says is true -- this is meant to be your calling, especially since you were so young when you wrote this. It's also a writing that can be felt, straight through.

This is Featured in Gather Writing Essentials, Monday, (MWE),

Thank-you Jan,

Marilyn

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