Inferno_100 Word Stories, Week 8 - Challenge

Wow, how sad

Oh--now I am sobbing! What a painful image you have portrayed here. How is it that some of us feel another's pain so quickly and other remain oblivious? You've captured that human element as well.

Terrible ... this kind of malicious torturing and killing is a sign of psychological distress in the perpetrators. Very powerful story, Tanya.

Tragically sad, and sadly true; (

I too, hope 'tis only drabble and that you didn't really know people like that... :)

This is a very moving story Tanya. Absolutely an image which is hard to forget. Well-written drabble.

Ugly stuff here, Tanya, and an excellent presentation of it. The satanic "deed", the "pain" of the bystander--all searing.

Oh, this broke my heart. I remember when I was about 5, my brother who was 10 at the time, put lighter fluid on a lizard and lit his tail. I still cry when I remember that scene. I don't think I ever forgave him for that.

Tanya, a very well written piece with all of the elements. The story is complete, tragic, and very good. Excellent drabble. Oh, and you also met the challenge quiet well.

Wow, Mom, this is a great piece. Very powerful. Is this a true story?

Great drabble, horrific, but GREAT! Kids can be soooooo cruel...

Wow... this is really well written, I too hope that you didnt actually have to witness something of this nature..Its scary to think this actually probably happens..yikes.......

what a terrible terrible thing to do....I'm in pain....and the credit goes to your pwerful writing.

What a powerful emotional story you have written in 100 words. This one tore my heart out.

Thanks, everyone, for reading my drabble. A lot of you have asked if I actually saw this. No, I did not; it is entirely fictionalized. It was inspired by a conversation that I walked into while in high school, and it fit this week's challenge very well. Two boys, friends of mine, who professed to be highly religious (this was relevant to the depth of my memory to the conversation), were bragging about a similar cruelty they'd done to a cat. They thought the outcome was extremely funny. I did not, and they heard plenty about it, along with earfuls of how this went counter to their religious beliefs, and so on. In fact, a lot of people heard about it, from my viewpoint. These boys never did such a thing again (or they managed to keep it hidden from me, which would have been quite a feat), and they actually did appear to be rueful about it.

My experience with teenagers (even as one) has been an interesting observation and interaction. There are many cruelties among them, as they explore their power while growing into adulthood. Thank heavens most of them find they don't enjoy cruelty and grow into loving, responsible adults (ok....at least at varying levels of such...lol)

I've seen many animals suffer cruelty, but always after the fact and usually long after the occurrence (when emotional and mental traumas have replaced the physical pains). Sometimes the cruelty has been through the hands of humans, sometimes by other animals. I always hold the animals close in my heart and prayers.

Aahhh, Tinch, you know my mind works in weird ways.

The fact that many of us (myself included) thought this must be based on a real memory of yours is a testament to it's quality. A very well-written drabble. I have no suggestions as to ways to improve it. Way to go!

Thank you so much, Jimmie!

Kids can be so cruel! You truly captured the scene and emotions.

This was incredibly vivid. The image of the cat made me nauseous.

Very well done.

Well written drabble

Senseless cruelty is often the hardest to overcome. This was very good.

If I were to make a suggestion, it might be to cut the first, rather long, sentence into two.

As a volunteer for the local humane society this hits home, well done and courageous drabble. It is difficult to put to paper such inhuman acts. Great writing Tanya!

Thanks for the suggestion, Stephanie.

Incomprehensible, how anyone could ever think of doing this let alone carrying it out. Thanks for the explanation. Well done.

Well done Tanya. Very sad.

It's a good drabble. Tanya but I could hardly stand to read it. You made it that real and I'm such an animal lover. We are here as their keepers.

Gut wrenching - very well written.

Made me cry. I wouldn't want to know anyone who could do that.

How horrible. I hope you didn't really experience this. I know it happens, but I hope you didn't experience it.

Wow.

Disturbing but descriptive and clear.

This just makes me mad at how someone can be so cruel to a helpless animal. Makes me want to put some fire on their butt with my hand.

Jonathan, I have to chuckle at your "disturbing" comment; having read (and thoroughly enjoyed) your "Inquisition"!

Errrr...........Jen.........I hope that means I did my job correctly for this drabble!?? LOL

Excellent writing, horrible subject. But certainly got my attention and broke my heart.

Well-written story, Wanda. You really captured that awful heartlessness. Nicely done!

LOL.....I hope it was my story you think is well-written, Becky, because I'm not Wanda, I'm Tanya! (chuckling.............you must have been focused on Wanda's comment just above yours.)

Really, though, thank you for the compliment. I appreciate it.

Could have been worse . . . like a dog I guess. LoL! just kidding . . . you managed to get a sickly feeling from me reading this because this sick stuff happens and makes this too realistic. Nicely done.

Regards,
Doyle I <~~~~~

Very well written. Often, truth makes for great writing...even the very sad things.

Doyle, Doyle, Doyle. Tch, tch, tch. (Sorry..........that's all I got! LOL)

Thank you, Ruthe. I hope you read my comment above, explaining that this drabble is fiction. Unfortunately, too often the cruelty really does occur. My question in the drabble, "How could they not understand the depth of their cruelty?" is for all those who commit cruelty; to any life. While I know it to be true (that they don't understand it or even think of it as cruelty in the same ways 'normal' people do, I'll never 'get it'.

Well written and very sad. I am not a cat person but I agree that's just cruel! I could see it in my mind.

Thanks for reading, Jen.

In all honesty this was difficult to read. I would have liked a warning that there was a scene abusing animals beforehand, though so I could choose if I wanted that visual.

Aside from that the writing was good and the story good.. I just can't stand animal cruelty (even if it is fake in fiction or movies)

I'll keep that in mind in the future, Jennifer. It was written for a specific writing assignment, and I never thought about how someone not participating in the week's theme might respond. Sorry it caught you off guard.

That's okay Tanya. Thanks for adding the warning in. I should pay more attention to those writing assignments. I'm in the group but I seem to miss more themes than not.

A horrific story of inhumane cruelty.