A Promise to You ~ Answered by a Haiku

Spot on. Moya

wonderful. and a much needed reminder for me (and others, i'm sure) to be more patient, focused, and caring.

This is "I ~Thou" writing inspired by a week of caregiving for my 86 year old mother-in-law.

awww - xx

Really lovely, Jan. A lover's request. And I think she'll get her wish. Nicely done!

You did it!... I love the last three lines.

True love never hinders, this promise shall never be broken
but someday, one day,
do try your best not to yawn...
when it be my precious words repeated and spoken

Remember... You are caring for Gods most favored creation.

Perfect - the air of calm and earnest talkativeness of the youthful voice in part one... contrasting it with the fervent and more urgent gasping of the haiku, a message hurried along by the passage of years - it is superb! Yet also sobering. Great work!

Oh, man, now I feel guilty for wishing the yammering would stop!

Very nice, Jan. Your work always makes me feel peaceful.

Yes, the guilt is there, Aileen. It reminds me to think not only of myself and my needs. I am practicing patience again...

Very well done and a good reminder.

Jan, this is beautifully done. I like the haiku most of all - very powerful.

Deep and thoughtful.....

Beautiful- loved the haiku

wow. Jan, i am coming to realize and recognize the rhythm and flow you use in this poem, as a very deep and basic pattern in the poetry heart of human beings. i like it a lot. it flows and swirls and leads every onward into the next and the next and the next, image, thought, place until something beyond the pattern of words has taken shape. just as water in a flowing river goes beyond water to become some thing more and eventually even more than a river. your poetry is full of heart and soul and always rich - you are in a special place - one which is a great source to remain in contact with for years - it touches the child source of purity in the heart, imo. a beautiful place. this is a beautiful piece.

altho we all have a very brief time on this planet, i worry (sense?) that the ending haiku has an element in it of greater knowledge than the life of human beings. i hope you are well and that your mother-in-law is doing as well as possible too. i hope that you continue to write - create - long into the future.

Thank you , Wrick. Rose is florishing with care and I see that we are succeeding with our efforts. Still, I am in a battle with my desire to have more personal time and to be a good caregiver.

that is a difficult battle, even with all there is in the world today, Jan. it sounds like you have help, i'm so glad for that if i understand you correctly. i hope you are able to find time for both you and your help to do things for yourself. i know it can be very draining to caregive 24/7. making time for yourself (the caregivers) helps to maintain your well being - which is a benefit to those you give care to. sorry to be so off topic with this Jan. that you write. and are able to write with your caregiving as source is one way to give yourself a little of that time. cool on that. take time to have fun too. aloha. Wrick.

Hear my story now,I've little time to tell it/ beautiful way to show how much time you have.....beautiful/ Each breath is precious........... wooo beautiful good way to end a great poem

fantastic..moving..stirring up emotions within me..thank you :)

Jan, this is so good!

Jan,

You've captured both ages so well. I love that line "(I don't think I will - do you?)."