by Kushal Poddar
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January 19, 2008

Sun

April 09, 2009 10:14 PM EDT (Updated: April 09, 2009 10:28 PM EDT)
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Sun

(To Robert)

I look at my palm a piece of sun

has settled on it, like butterfly…

carefully I close my palm, curl it.

 


 

The train carrying me to the weekend

from the city to the place I was born.

In my closed fist is the sun caught in.

Stations move backwards. Nature increases.

The stranger who is on the facing seat

becomes a friend after exchanges

of views and glimpses. The sun caught

in my fist sweats; at last when

my stoppage arrives I open palm

and believe me my sun is melted

and nothing to differ from the sun

roaming over the platform. I look at

the new friend who is taking the place

of sun, my own and personal.

=© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar


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Comments: 56

Beth - Doing God's work Daily J. Apr 9, 2009, 10:15pm EDT
Very beautiful.
Sandra L. Apr 9, 2009, 10:16pm EDT
Very nice poem. I like it a lot.
Dana W. Apr 9, 2009, 10:16pm EDT
very beautiful
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Beth - Doing God's work Daily J. Apr 9, 2009, 10:17pm EDT
Thanks for sharing on Getting to 3000 Together
JOHN BECK Apr 9, 2009, 10:21pm EDT
Touching.
Jo N. Apr 9, 2009, 10:22pm EDT
Very nice!
Georgiana S. Apr 9, 2009, 10:28pm EDT
I jumped to read this one, my horse was called Sun.
lovely little escapade on a train!
Chloe Berryman Apr 9, 2009, 10:35pm EDT
nice!
Nancy Biri Apr 9, 2009, 10:47pm EDT
Nice
charity kimball ツ Apr 9, 2009, 11:02pm EDT
very nice:)
Dana W. Apr 9, 2009, 11:05pm EDT
Thank you for posting to VRC

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Jennifer Lee Apr 9, 2009, 11:16pm EDT
Beautiful tribute to a dear friend in need. Thank you for posting to our group. You are now featured in the poet's circle.
Angela A. Apr 9, 2009, 11:19pm EDT
Lovely Poddar!!
thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Howard b. Apr 9, 2009, 11:19pm EDT
Very nice poem Poddar. Thanks for sharing .
Cheryl W. Apr 9, 2009, 11:35pm EDT
I really like this, Poddar. Well done!
Kimberly Ripley Apr 9, 2009, 11:36pm EDT
This is absolutely lovely!
Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 9, 2009, 11:53pm EDT
Poddar, that was great and for the second time tonight I am humbled. You have given me a goal to try and become the friend you perceive me to be. Please forgive me when I come up short. I love you man. Thanks!

But you and the sweet madame have got me all emotional. You did it here and she did it there ---> September Dreaming – My Thanks to Madame Missu >

God bless you both!
roger s. Apr 10, 2009, 12:08am EDT
thanx for sharing
Angela A. Apr 10, 2009, 12:13am EDT
You made Robert happy.
That's great Poddar.
Svetlana Goryacheva Apr 10, 2009, 12:47am EDT
Admirable, dear Poddar... admirable! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Rory M. Apr 10, 2009, 12:48am EDT
I think all of us sometimes wish we could live, even for a moment, in that world that Poddar describes in his fantastical poetry that weaves magic and mundane and most of all mankind into a tapestry of surreal delight.

Robert, some hidden element of you, recognizable but undefinable, is captured in these words. How lovely.
EDWINA (MISSIE) B. Apr 10, 2009, 1:00am EDT
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Lisa Frost Apr 10, 2009, 1:02am EDT
wonderful touching, and entirely sweet. hmm sound like Robert.
Jan S. Apr 10, 2009, 1:41am EDT
Lovely. Robert is much more than a simple man.
Jennine D. Apr 10, 2009, 1:58am EDT
Very nice and warm with friendship
Robert - just a simple man - B. Apr 10, 2009, 2:25am EDT
No Jan, I'm not.
Ruth J. Apr 10, 2009, 4:59am EDT
Poetry is a beautiful way to express yourself and you have done it very well. Thank you.
Tim T. Apr 10, 2009, 5:02am EDT
10! Tim
Peter R. Apr 10, 2009, 5:18am EDT
Much appreciated, Poddar. 10.
Connie H. Apr 10, 2009, 7:41am EDT
Very nice!
Suzanne White Apr 10, 2009, 7:57am EDT
Very Nice!
Beautifully spun~
Peter Joseph Swanson Apr 10, 2009, 9:58am EDT
neat - and beautiful
Lewis (taking over Gather) K. Apr 10, 2009, 10:49am EDT
Magical descriptions of sun and friendship. Like the statements above, there's something that only you can capture about these moments. Fantastic job.
Jennifer aka Jenn B. Apr 10, 2009, 11:02am EDT
very pleasant read today poddar...full of sunshine warmth
Chas Andrews Apr 10, 2009, 11:49am EDT
thanks!
Gisela S. Apr 10, 2009, 11:51am EDT
I enjoyed this!
Bard Constantine Apr 10, 2009, 12:58pm EDT
Very good. The connection with warmth and friendship is vividly personified.
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Apr 10, 2009, 3:53pm EDT
The sun image holds this poem together really well. Congrats on being featured in Jennifer's group.

Thank you for posting this to The Surreal Circus.
blaine d. Apr 10, 2009, 4:05pm EDT
beautiful!
Kim J. Apr 10, 2009, 6:35pm EDT
very nice poem! thanx for sharing. keep it coming.
Sharon P. Apr 10, 2009, 6:50pm EDT
That's a lovely gift for a friend.
Lynn D. Apr 10, 2009, 6:51pm EDT
Your writing is beautiful as usual. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.
Chuck L. Apr 10, 2009, 7:16pm EDT
New friends are often hard to find... and keep
William Dotani Apr 11, 2009, 3:11am EDT
Very expressive description of a journey where you find the warmth you started out with has changed, but yet contains the same warmth because of friendship. Your story thread and wordplay I feel quite excellent.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 11, 2009, 10:46am EDT
Very nice, Poddar.
Deloris Wright Apr 11, 2009, 5:31pm EDT
Very nice Poddar
Barbara M. Apr 12, 2009, 11:48am EDT
Thank you for posting to READING BOOKS ONLINE!
old lady . Apr 13, 2009, 10:26am EDT
a nice poem.
Missy Cline Apr 15, 2009, 10:33pm EDT
exquisite!
Michelle W. Apr 30, 2009, 11:32pm EDT
What a wonderful tribute and gift to a friend!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !
Chana M. May 1, 2009, 1:44pm EDT
Now I am confused as to whether to call you Kushal or Poddar. A beautiful tribute to a friend. A journey within a journey. To be honest I had some small problems with the last stanza, but think you may have meant it that way. So maybe its just me. Thank you for sharing this @ Art - Any Medium!
Patti M. May 26, 2009, 7:51am EDT

I did so enjoy this poem.  It has been said about me that I have never met a stranger.  I like you would start up a conversation and become friends instead of strangers.

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