by Scott Newton
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September 11, 2006

"Patient 82 #1" - 100 WORD STORIES WEEK 14 - CHALLENGE

May 14, 2008 05:26 PM EDT
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"Now what I want is facts." rasped the supervisor. Sweat beaded, running coldly down his spine. The guards quieted, leaving their fear to lay heavy in the fluorescent hum of the room.

The straitjacketed patient finally spoke. His eyes were wide but soft, his voice beamed out around the corners of his words. "God came to me, or gods... A gift of knowledge."

"All you see," pointing his nose around the room, " are the symptoms that you call God. Reality is, a little god's behind every particle. I understand the pieces, so I understand everything... I walk through walls."
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Comments: 29

Kristina B. May 14, 2008, 6:52pm EDT
Oh heeyyy! I like it and so do the voices in my head man!!
Alison Pearce May 14, 2008, 11:54pm EDT
Great drabble!
Kay M. May 15, 2008, 12:53am EDT
Great drabble
Stephanie B. May 15, 2008, 1:00am EDT
I'm not sure the straightjacket will be enough, then.

Eerie.
Pat M. May 15, 2008, 1:47am EDT
This one's going in all sorts of interesting directions. Most intruguing Scott.
penni d. May 15, 2008, 9:49am EDT
a truth! A truth in Drabble!! Kudos, scott! :)
lynn a. May 15, 2008, 9:52am EDT
I'm not sure of what the pieces are and that opens up a plethora of possibilities, some worse than others. Excellent drabble.
Suze P. May 15, 2008, 10:30am EDT
Great drabble! very interesting.. and kinda freaky.. lol I think they should take off the straightjacket to see if he really can walk through walls..now, that would be cool! :O)
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' May 15, 2008, 1:42pm EDT
well done Scott...That's a different take.
Donna Hammett-Tooker May 15, 2008, 1:58pm EDT
For some, the outlandish and surreal is preferred to the reality before them. This guy has a cult out there just waiting for his arrival.
Marge H. May 15, 2008, 2:14pm EDT
Hmm, intriguing and imaginative.
Granny Janny H. May 15, 2008, 4:16pm EDT
Jesus, you nailed it.
Parul S. May 15, 2008, 4:40pm EDT
well nailed it you did alright but in an amzing new style to the prompt...
Becky Powell May 15, 2008, 5:47pm EDT
Great story! I love the description of the guards. Really great images there.
Austin Cushing May 15, 2008, 11:31pm EDT
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Doyle ( IS SOOO 7 for 7 soon... ) C. May 16, 2008, 9:31am EDT
Ooooh! I LIKES!

Regards,
Doyle I <~~~~~
Chelsea R. May 16, 2008, 10:18am EDT
cool! thanks for sharing!
Kimber L. May 16, 2008, 10:54am EDT
This is a great one!
Tracey W. May 16, 2008, 7:31pm EDT
Scott, you write so beautifully. This piece was so emotionally charged and full for so few words. I'd love to read more of this story.
Jan S. May 16, 2008, 9:02pm EDT
Wow! Powerful stuff, Scott.
Lyn Owen May 16, 2008, 9:47pm EDT
Interesting. I like the art work too.
Charli Mills May 16, 2008, 10:13pm EDT
Well done--and well written!
Wanda H. May 17, 2008, 4:29am EDT
This was a whole story in one small group of words. he is right too. Each particle is vibration. Vibrate at the right speed and nothing is solid. Nothing is real. Very tight writing. Imagery: wonderous.
Esther IS Flesh and Blood S. May 19, 2008, 7:26pm EDT
Very interesting.
amanda wallin May 21, 2008, 11:12am EDT
You say so much so succinctly conceptualizing reality from opposite ends of the spectrum. Brilliantly done.
Sheila Deeth May 22, 2008, 12:25am EDT
Very neat.
Shelbia C. Sep 13, 2009, 12:26am EDT
well done

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