someone, Old pal

Ol’ pal

A curvy creek with hovering trees.

Heavy and greasy water and small rapids.

The stream belongs to four boys fishing.

The breeze is deciphering silence.

A sandy sandwich is relished in trance.

Do you not miss those days little captains?

Do you not miss the strained ankle

while returning

and the young daughter

of the village doctor

covering you with a bandage, all over?

Someone

The man who is getting down from the bus

seems strangely similar. She knows that she knew him.

The old muffler around his neck, the eyes,

weary and slightly estranged… she knows. She knew.

Some day. Some year. Some age. Ages. Times. Distance.

The windows with the known scenes are dissolving into

something from a different history, geography, time.

The bend of a blurred conception called road

moves steadily towards what is next.

She can see the moving trees and men

till she see these no more. Only a man and

something from past hinges together.

A midnight sky,

a human conversation from the time beyond

are all she can recall

and then the next stop comes where she alights.

She is to take a hike behind, back.

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regina k. Apr 12, 2009, 10:49pm EDT

wonderful
both of them

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Kimberly Ripley Apr 12, 2009, 10:52pm EDT

Both of these have an ethereal quality to them. Wonderful!

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Jo N. Apr 12, 2009, 10:55pm EDT

Very nice!

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Rony J. Apr 12, 2009, 11:00pm EDT

Wonderful writing
Blessings

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Georgiana S. Apr 12, 2009, 11:16pm EDT

Second piece, second line, should be 'him' not heer?
Both very readable!

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Apr 12, 2009, 11:17pm EDT

Both appeals a lot.

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Lisa Frost Apr 12, 2009, 11:19pm EDT

these are treasures thank you!

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Dana W. Apr 12, 2009, 11:22pm EDT

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Jennifer Lee Apr 12, 2009, 11:25pm EDT

It is a different style for you and I like it very much. Thank you for posting to our group. These poems remind me of some lost friends in lost places and it touched me.

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JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 12, 2009, 11:28pm EDT

I am curious as to why you posted them together..........

Do tell, Poddar!

:)

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Shelbia C. Apr 12, 2009, 11:52pm EDT

I love them both

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roger s. Apr 13, 2009, 12:15am EDT

very good

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Julie R. Apr 13, 2009, 12:18am EDT

Both 10's.

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Stephanie S. Apr 13, 2009, 12:24am EDT

very nice poetry

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Jodie B. Apr 13, 2009, 1:01am EDT

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Kathryn E. Apr 13, 2009, 3:25am EDT

I love old pal and I adore Someone. You have a very good soul and it shows in everything you do, Kushal.

Featured in the Triple Name Club.

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Svetlana Goryacheva Apr 13, 2009, 3:28am EDT

Both are excellent, dear Poddar! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.

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JOHN BECK Apr 13, 2009, 5:01am EDT

Waxing nostalgic, Kushal. Very nice.

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William Dotani Apr 13, 2009, 5:08am EDT

Ol' Pal paints a memory, an experience with exquisite verse.

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Lisa Madona U. Apr 13, 2009, 6:59am EDT

nice

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Chris Brockman Apr 13, 2009, 8:07am EDT

I have certainly experienced both of these "places." I like the counterpoint between young and old. between those memories of childhood that come back so vividly and those others--a face, a name--that defy explication. Both are characteristic of an older person--is that whom you'fe writing about?

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Peter Joseph Swanson Apr 13, 2009, 8:42am EDT

cool

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Ann M. (Site Scryer) Apr 13, 2009, 8:43am EDT

ol' pal captures the essence of boyhood beautifully, with the polluted water of the boys' favorite stream serving as an ominous reminder of the adult world and the legacy we are leaving our children.

Someone seems to be about a remembrance of a past life.

Thank you for posting this to The Surreal Circus.

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Nancy Biri Apr 13, 2009, 8:45am EDT

Nice

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Purrrrrrrrrrr~Genki dashite~Nantoka naru-yo! S. Apr 13, 2009, 9:49am EDT

beautifully writte =)

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jewi lim Apr 13, 2009, 10:09am EDT

very nice...

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Holly K. Apr 13, 2009, 10:15am EDT

Wow! These are great!

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Elizabeth H. Apr 13, 2009, 10:27am EDT

Great job.

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blaine d. Apr 13, 2009, 12:09pm EDT

very nicely done!

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Nikki S. Apr 13, 2009, 12:09pm EDT

Thanks for posting ~ Paying it forward
Helping you reach your gather goals!

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Sharon P. Apr 13, 2009, 12:11pm EDT

Both very nice.

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A. F. Stewart Apr 13, 2009, 1:12pm EDT

Very nice poems.

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Chas Andrews Apr 13, 2009, 1:47pm EDT

thanks!

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Tara C. Apr 13, 2009, 4:50pm EDT

I like them both, very nice!

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Lewis (taking over Gather) K. Apr 13, 2009, 5:27pm EDT

Even careless play can conjure up pleasant recollection, and a trip to the past to discover an identity. Nice writing, this could have been two separate post, equally good.

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Djon Reed Apr 13, 2009, 9:11pm EDT

Nice combination of both the fresh and the familiar.

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Indrani Talukdar Apr 14, 2009, 12:05am EDT

I loved 'Someone'. Great!

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Diane "stormyz" B. Apr 14, 2009, 2:40am EDT

They are both wonderful!

Thank you for posting this to the Ratings Rampage Group

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Kimber F. Apr 14, 2009, 3:09am EDT

Both wonderful credits to your talent. I loved the memories of both of them. Two very different yet similar examples. Thank you so much for sharing and peace.

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