by Kushal Poddar
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January 19, 2008

wood ants see

January 15, 2009 09:34 PM EST (Updated: January 16, 2009 05:25 AM EST)
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Wood Ants See

(Thursday writing essential)

A stream of wood ants is climbing

and vanishing into the cracks

on the peeling barks of the tree.

The horde of wet clouds is touching

the wings of few kites, sniff the rain.

Coming this way, a winter shower.

 

There you suddenly see me on

the other side of the Office road.

Stupefied, we extended words.

Both half remember half memoirs,

they have been thinking as long lost.

 

The picnic at the river bank

and the sprained ankle and shoulder crutch…

 

The drops of rain obliterate them.

© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar


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Comments: 53

Jennifer aka Jenn B. Jan 15, 2009, 9:51pm EST
sounds like a story to me..
Georgiana S. Jan 15, 2009, 9:51pm EST
there is an expression 'oh, to be a fly on the wall", well I guess we can add 'an ant on the ground"?!
Nancy Biri Jan 15, 2009, 10:14pm EST
Nice poem
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Jan 15, 2009, 10:19pm EST
Beautiful words used, Poddar.Another big shot.
blaine d. Jan 15, 2009, 10:43pm EST
great one!
Cheryl W. Jan 15, 2009, 10:52pm EST
An awesome write, Poddar!
Jennifer Lee Jan 15, 2009, 11:04pm EST
Interesting and beautiful imagery, my friend.
Jennifer Lee Jan 16, 2009, 12:12am EST

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Thank you posting to our group. Cheers, Julia
Christine Zibas Jan 16, 2009, 12:28am EST
I especially love your last line. The poem seems to build to that critical line. Great job.
Karen E. Jan 16, 2009, 1:59am EST
little wonders of nature, they blend with the incredible journey we are traveling.
Shannon H. Jan 16, 2009, 2:05am EST
Very well done, of course.
L. H. Jan 16, 2009, 2:05am EST
I thought this was very sensual, just thinking of a warm rain, right now, brings on a sunny spot in me -5 degrees tonight O
Alison H. Jan 16, 2009, 2:29am EST
Wow! A lot of life packed in a moment.....microcosm to macrocosm and memories. Marvelous!
KC Klein Jan 16, 2009, 2:46am EST
wood ant would not be hyphenated.
Kathryn E. Jan 16, 2009, 3:46am EST
Featured in the Triple Name Club.
Dorothy H. Jan 16, 2009, 5:50am EST
Nicely written. Thanks!
Svetlana Goryacheva Jan 16, 2009, 6:47am EST
As always, a miniature filled with emotions, capturing all the five - or six? - senses... admirable! ;-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Steven S. Jan 16, 2009, 7:50am EST
Interesting, what you do with images - like a haiku that overruns its boundaries. I've always liked your work. Reading the work of others gives me an incentive.
Johnice R. Jan 16, 2009, 8:21am EST
Thanks for sharing
Sheila J. Jan 16, 2009, 8:51am EST
Beautiful integration of deeper meaning with natural surroundings.
Bill's Spirit Jan 16, 2009, 9:05am EST
Excellent !!

Great visual and emotional imagery.

Loved it !!
Pam S. Jan 16, 2009, 10:09am EST
very nice
Karen G. Jan 16, 2009, 10:13am EST
great Podar
Michelle W. Jan 16, 2009, 10:37am EST
Interesting visuals

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !
Chas Andrews Jan 16, 2009, 10:48am EST
thanks!
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Jan 16, 2009, 11:00am EST
Nice stream of consciousness!
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Jan 16, 2009, 11:00am EST
Thank you for posting this to The Surreal Circus.
Teresa A. Jan 16, 2009, 11:42am EST
Very nice work.
lena k. Jan 16, 2009, 12:34pm EST
nice
Debra B. Jan 16, 2009, 1:36pm EST
A very nice example of how such a small thing can trigger a poignant memory.
Sherrie H. Jan 16, 2009, 2:30pm EST
Full of feeling.
Lewis (taking over Gather) K. Jan 16, 2009, 3:09pm EST
Very nice. A touching moment, interrupted by rainfall. Great storytelling.
*LORA* M. Jan 16, 2009, 4:47pm EST
10
Angela A. Jan 16, 2009, 5:21pm EST
My group is growing bigger and bigger by the day. So from now on, I can only leave a simple comment, sorry for that.
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Deloris Wright Jan 16, 2009, 8:34pm EST
An old friend or maybe more. Those mettings are always a thrill. Great poem Thanks Poddar
Rony J. Jan 16, 2009, 9:23pm EST
A great touched of imagination coming with a force of hurricane, I love this one
my friend, God Bless You
Barbara B. Jan 16, 2009, 9:33pm EST
I love the rain Poddar Kushal !! Loved to walk in the rain too.
This brought back some great memories for me dear man !!

Hugs n Love
Barbie
Linda B. Jan 16, 2009, 10:07pm EST
wonderful
Jennine D. Jan 16, 2009, 10:58pm EST
Interesting Poddar, We got a huge red ant hill on our property. They are interesting to watch in the warmer weather.
Lisa Frost Jan 17, 2009, 9:28am EST
wonderful write.
Elizabeth H. Jan 17, 2009, 11:10am EST
You have a way with words. Beautifully written.
Sharon P. Jan 17, 2009, 1:31pm EST
Story in a poem.
Chana M. Jan 17, 2009, 3:32pm EST
You all know I hate generic comments, but I really do feel miserable. I have to pass things through moderate before it gets to full. I am sorry. Thank you for sharing this @ Art - Any Medium!
Shelbia C. Jan 18, 2009, 3:56am EST
great job
Diane "stormyz" B. Jan 19, 2009, 2:16am EST
Thank you for posting this to the Ratings Rampage Group
William Dotani Jan 19, 2009, 2:50pm EST
Excellent. Bravo. I just love how you start of with a pleasant memory, then transition so smoothly into the speaker's present tense to speak of memories again: Rather sadly.

Of all your poems, this is the best I've read.
William Dotani Jan 19, 2009, 2:52pm EST
Excuse me for not responding sooner. I've had well over a hundred people to respond to.
regina k. Jan 21, 2009, 3:21am EST
absolutely beautiful
Barbary Chaapel Jan 31, 2009, 7:58pm EST
You've made an interesting juxtapostion of nature and remembrance, Poddar.
Roberta Moto Feb 2, 2009, 2:13pm EST
great poem- you create little worlds with each of your poems

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