Dehydration was about to take her down, when she spied the orange glowing.
"A Fire!" she thought, as she changed her direction toward the light.
Since the crash, she had walked the desert. It was easier to walk at night, as the heat of her jumpsuit became too hot during the day.
Nearing the site of the fire, she was surprised to see horses and Conestoga wagons.
A realization hit her, and she silently cursed the empty sky above her. "You idiots!" She thought, "It was supposed to be 4118, not 1841! How will I fix the ship now?"
99 words.
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how curious~and in but a space of words you flesh out a human~a situation and anticipation in the reader~
I gave it a shot, Purr. That's all I can say.
you make it breathe GILFFRIEND =)
Wow. That is probably one of the nicest compliments I have ever recieved. Sincere thanks, my GILFriend!
This one was great!! A twisty little ending and quite amusing too! I can just see her face
Thanks, Nancy. Glad you liked it.
I liked it, too. You seem to do much better with very short stuff than I do :) I got an entire story out of it, and that's rather amazing in just 99 words. I was a little confused with the phrase "spied the orange glowing" since when I first read it, I thought you were talking about the fruit, but I figured it out. I liked how you imparted information with single words ... crash ... jumpsuit ... horses and wagons. I loved the twist at the end! I was startled into a laugh. Oops, indeed!
I figured the second sentence would clarify that she didn't see a piece of fruit.
Loved this--humorous surprise ending!
LOL. Someone goofed. Great surprise ending.
Typos have ruined many a key event...
You ain't just whisling "Dixie", there Tracy.
Donna - this was a delicious read. I loved all 99 words of it and now I'm smiling. A little treat first thing this morning and no calories involved! My brain cells were tickled:)
I'm so very happy to have tickled your brain cells this morning. Thank you.
Oops was a great title,lol..
Yep, I thought it was appropriate.
I love it! A lot of story in 100 words :)
Good one, Sweetie !!
Loved those conestoga wagons.
Hey, maybe she'll run into Doc Brown and they can go back to the future together.
I like this one. How will the ship be fixed?
Like Bill said, above, unless ole Doc Brown is around, I think she's stuck.