by Kushal Poddar
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January 19, 2008

Virus

March 23, 2009 10:44 PM EDT
views: 289 | rating: 9.7/10 (35 votes) | comments: 51

Virusonthemachine

 

The effluence of virus through the receiver

enters into her computer, spreads, floods, reigns.

The object, - immobile, mute, restrained, spiritless

comes to life; for the first time it sees the master, -

a woman sitting before it; typing commands.

In another time it could have fallen in love

and blame on the fairy tale writers. Not this time.

For the machine has seen how love can be silenced

with a small message, with ten seconds’ typing.

The live computer observes her face;

compares it with some of the pictures she’s sent.

Sent over the mails, through web-cams, in profiles…

Lies and truths are flimsy statistics, shallow.

The machine moves to change her commands. Replacing

with its own.

In a flicker the world suddenly sees the girl, unmasked

before the alive computer.

=© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar



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Comments: 51

stacy k. Mar 23, 2009, 10:51pm EDT
Wow, that is really poetic justice! Thanks Poddar!
Alison H. Mar 23, 2009, 10:53pm EDT
Ominous...an expose of the ways humans can use computers to deceive and wound.....as well, a machine that sees only the negative.
L. H. Mar 23, 2009, 11:00pm EDT
Different from you and good as usual! ::)
David W. Mar 23, 2009, 11:01pm EDT
You reign as master of the metaphor. Another TEN for you Podar.
JOHN BECK Mar 23, 2009, 11:01pm EDT
Fortunately we don't have computers which behave that way, changing our very words not by error but by the will of the computer. Reminds me of some science fiction years ago.
Melanie B. Mar 23, 2009, 11:07pm EDT
cool~ Thank you for sharing~
Cheryl W. Mar 23, 2009, 11:08pm EDT
Wow...a poem about the reality of this computer age...and all of the good and bad that goes with it. Well done...
Kathryn E. Mar 23, 2009, 11:48pm EDT
Featured in the Triple Name Club.
Daniel Irwin Tucker Mar 23, 2009, 11:54pm EDT
Very cool concept, Poddar! I agree with all of the above, but beyond a science fiction thiller, I also see the virus are a metaphor of a jaded person mortally wounded in love; now a sociopath bent on character assassination. A sort of fatal attraction. This is my take, anyway.
Jennifer Lee Mar 23, 2009, 11:59pm EDT
Intense, Kushal! Well done as always and if Daniel's interpretation is accurate, yikes! I used to know someone like that. Thank you for posting to our group.
Nancy Biri Mar 24, 2009, 12:02am EDT
nice
Linda T. Mar 24, 2009, 12:16am EDT
Imagine if a computer had the capability to change the way we represent ourselves. Chat rooms would soon be very quiet places.
Georgiana S. Mar 24, 2009, 12:31am EDT
I just watched the film Eagle Eye and this is close to its' truth! Good write!
Kimber F. Mar 24, 2009, 12:57am EDT
Interesting concept and very well put. You continue to amaze me with your talent. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. Peace
Elsie Duggan Mar 24, 2009, 1:05am EDT
Great poetry Poddar, remember something like this in a movie some years ago, where computers got in control, do you suppose it could happen? love to read your poetry,
Julie R. Mar 24, 2009, 1:53am EDT
A really thought provoking poem--good one.
Svetlana Goryacheva Mar 24, 2009, 2:15am EDT
Quite an unusual subject, but you've made it, my dear friend! Great work! :-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Kelly T. Mar 24, 2009, 3:04am EDT
Erotic!
Peter R. Mar 24, 2009, 4:56am EDT
A brand new look at an old theme and beautifully constructed.
Carol Roach Mar 24, 2009, 5:57am EDT
very nice hon
fancy c. Mar 24, 2009, 5:57am EDT
AWESOME
Djon Reed Mar 24, 2009, 8:42am EDT
This really overrides my circuitry. A nice jolt.
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Mar 24, 2009, 9:01am EDT
A modern version of the computer named HAL in 2001: A Space Odyssey.
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Mar 24, 2009, 9:02am EDT
Thank you for posting this to The Surreal Circus. Congratulations on your feature.
Your metaphors are dizzyingly beautiful and fierce in this one! Awesome!
Carole S. Mar 24, 2009, 10:12am EDT
That is fabulous. What a unique idea and so well said. Good for you.
Nancy L. Mar 24, 2009, 10:17am EDT
Time to buy a Mac. :)
Robert - just a simple man - B. Mar 24, 2009, 10:36am EDT
Fabulous. It was Jen with her long delicate fingers that I envisioned here. Yes, our mutual Jen. But it could be any lady anywhere. It is not enough for these poor ladies to be scrutinized and leered at each time they wander into public but now with modern technology, they are leered at by 'The Machine'.

Maybe Nancy L (above) is correct.

Fabulous Poem!
Chas Andrews Mar 24, 2009, 11:11am EDT
thanks!
Stephanie S. Mar 24, 2009, 12:03pm EDT
very interesting read.. well done
blaine d. Mar 24, 2009, 12:18pm EDT
very nicely done!
Bard Constantine Mar 24, 2009, 12:45pm EDT
Disposable relationships, another by-product of the computer age. Kill someone with a keystroke, then go to bed.
Ladybounty ~. Mar 24, 2009, 1:12pm EDT
OMG Poddar.....this is a perfect description of what some have reduced each other to on here.....a VIRUS! Something to be destroyed and removed. Sad but true and very well written!
Sharon P. Mar 24, 2009, 4:19pm EDT
Ouch, so very true.
Barbara M. Mar 24, 2009, 4:49pm EDT
nicely done
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 24, 2009, 6:10pm EDT
Do you sleep;)

This is fabulous.
Howard b. Mar 24, 2009, 6:14pm EDT
very good .I enjoyed it .thank you for sharing.
Peter Joseph Swanson Mar 24, 2009, 6:19pm EDT
cool
Matthew A. Mar 24, 2009, 8:44pm EDT
Very original!
Beth - Doing God's work Daily J. Mar 24, 2009, 10:34pm EDT
Thanks for posting on Getting to 3000 Together
Angela A. Mar 25, 2009, 12:28am EDT
Viruses can be so nasty. Invading our system and causing damage.
Thanks for posting to my group, Anythingwriting
Indrani Talukdar Mar 25, 2009, 1:07am EDT
You made the virus quite human.
Shelbia C. Mar 25, 2009, 1:49am EDT
Thanks for posting to Writing Reservoir
Shelbia C. Mar 26, 2009, 11:47pm EDT
well done
Sheila P. Mar 27, 2009, 6:23pm EDT
Thanks for sharing.
Adrian Eve Revenaugh Mar 27, 2009, 6:39pm EDT
Standing stripped, revealed to the elements the blue glow, as sentient knows what is and what was being falsely projected: her ambition, fear, masked needs, or desire.

May the blue glow remember what was projected that need be protected. A new "virus of compassion".
Adrian Eve Revenaugh Mar 27, 2009, 6:52pm EDT
...and would she be renewed by such a revealing... perhaps go on to ride Godiva-like, accompanied by a child's naked honesty? Again a "virus of compassion" would include integral shedding of applied trappings, and are we ready to acknowledge the Emperor's denied reality? Conscious beings co- evolving in the wading pool.
Chelle M. Apr 1, 2009, 3:24am EDT
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Michelle W. Apr 3, 2009, 8:12pm EDT
Well done! It is quite spooky!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !

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