by Syed The Shah
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May 25, 2007

RESPECTING PARENTS DECISION - 100 WORD STORIES WEEK 39 - CHALLENGE

December 01, 2008 05:57 PM EST
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(Week 39 Challege :: Use the phrase "But I have promises to keep" anywhere in your drabble that must be 100 words non less non more.)










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"Kami, It's our last gathering. We will not meet again, not anymore."
Chini was weeping in despair holding Kami's hand so tightly.

She added "But I have promises to keep"

"I understand my sweetheart, I'll not force you to run away with me."
He added wiping her tears. "This is our fate, God knows better and let it be my dear Chini."
"Our parents always want prosperity and good fortune for us, let us respect their decision and you should happily accept it, my love."

He hugged her and calmed her so well.

Chini whispered "Yes Kami, I'll do so."
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Comments: 29

Jerri H. Dec 1, 2008, 6:49pm EST
Very nice...you can feel the emotion perfectly.
Jennifer G. Dec 1, 2008, 7:13pm EST
well-written.
Jennifer aka Jenn B. Dec 1, 2008, 8:32pm EST
interesting
Elaine K. Dec 1, 2008, 8:45pm EST
Thought provoking.
Bethany C. Dec 1, 2008, 9:13pm EST
It is very difficult to do what seems to be the right thing when your heart says different.
DIANE D. Dec 2, 2008, 2:26am EST
This is wonderful, thanks for sharing~
Syed The Shah Dec 2, 2008, 8:55am EST
I am thankful to you friends... You like my first Drabble work.
It would help me to improve and keep me active...
Thanks Again...
Maureen M. Dec 2, 2008, 11:37am EST
Syed. yes you are right. I've had longer versions show up after being challenged to keep it short yet vivacious
Syed The Shah Dec 2, 2008, 3:47pm EST
Yes Maureen, as we say 'cutting it short lol, summarized or precised". thanks a lot for reading...

Thanking you Lady Judi, I am so glad you like it my pleasure...

Tinch, It depends on the culture, a love marriage is also an arranged marriage, but in above case I focused on parents respect and honor. Things are pretty different here... thanks for reading and nice comments..
Sue T. Dec 3, 2008, 5:13am EST
Well done.
Pristina S. Dec 3, 2008, 7:54am EST
Good job.
Pat M. Dec 3, 2008, 9:45pm EST
Well done, and all the better a read, for revealing a side of another culture.
Loved it.
Member Photog Dec 4, 2008, 12:46am EST
good job!.....always interesting to read something from the perspective of another culture...alas, love is the international language,eh? ;>

cheers,gayle
Sheila Deeth Dec 4, 2008, 12:47pm EST
Such beautiful understanding and advice.
Syed The Shah Dec 4, 2008, 12:51pm EST
Thanks Sue,
Thanks Pristina,
Thanks Reena didi, you know better...
Thanks Pat, A culture of honor and respect...
Thanks Gayle, I know that too, sweet saying...
Thanks Sheila, It's very different for westerners but it's just normal here.
Kay M. Dec 4, 2008, 2:55pm EST
A moving story . You've done a great job with your first drabble. I'll look forward to reading more.
sheila h. Dec 4, 2008, 3:18pm EST
Ah the struggle!
I hope she exerts her independence while still clinging fiercely to her love!
wonderful aspect here,
:)
JOHN BECK Dec 4, 2008, 6:55pm EST
Such skillful use of a few words. We can feel the pain.
Kenna C. Dec 4, 2008, 9:18pm EST
You say a lot with only 100 words, with enough left unsaid that we can use our imagination to fill in the circumstances. Well done.
Syed The Shah Dec 5, 2008, 3:22pm EST
Thanks a lot Kay M.
Sheila dear, so nice of you, but for parents who give birth, it's a just a little sacrifice...

Mr. Beck, Thanks for the complements...
Kenna, Thanks thanks so much, you give me a writer's boost...
Marge H. Dec 5, 2008, 5:02pm EST
A painful but respectful decision. So much expressed in so few words.
lynn a. Dec 5, 2008, 8:00pm EST
This feels real. I can see it happening. But boy is that a big price to pay for being born. Still, I don't disagree with it. Very good story.
mansoor s. Dec 27, 2008, 10:37pm EST
so sad, but what can they possibly do
M & M. Dec 30, 2008, 2:50pm EST
Wow, you have the gift of writing. Thank you for sharing this with us dear friend.
Syed The Shah Mar 31, 2009, 5:21pm EDT
Thanks a lot Marge, Lynn, Mansoor.
So sweet of you Margie...
Digital Diva S. Apr 14, 2009, 8:55pm EDT
Sweet and one can hope for a happy ending.
William Dotani Nov 23, 2009, 10:52am EST
This is bittersweet. This would be more in line with Asian culture than American culture. My parents eloped at age 17. I married my Japanese wife over 27 years ago and her grandmother did not approve of me for maybe 3 years.
Syed The Shah Nov 23, 2009, 11:20am EST
Yes, but, it is a part of most Asian cultures, and sometimes it hurts lol..
Well, this is really good know, and congrats for your success in wedding an Asian..
Thanks man for your interesting comments..
Lady of Lake Merritt =P Dec 4, 2009, 3:37am EST
well done

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