by David L.
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January 23, 2006

The Missing Moon

April 20, 2006 03:01 AM EDT (Updated: March 03, 2008 07:52 PM EST)
views: 154 | rating: 9.9/10 (18 votes) | comments: 35
It's clear here
underneath star-lit skies
No moon, no you
Just myself, alone
Funny isn't it
what happens between us
in the space only lovers know
It's where words get lost
amidst the warmth of minds and bodies near
Betwixt passion and underneath skin
You can't see - neither can I
It's not where we thought it would be tonight
floating there a celestial high
No shadows found upon this ground
No moon beams for peaceful slumber
Just darkness
Just me - thinking of just you
beneath the missing moon.
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Comments: 35

Brother sun, sister moon ...

Magi
Jenny L. Apr 20, 2006, 10:50am EDT
Again you have written something that speaks to so many. My hope for all is that soon there will be moonbeams to slumber beneath and stars to shine your path. Lightness out of darkness. That's the great thing about the moon. Even though we don't see it it is always there.
David L. Apr 20, 2006, 4:01pm EDT
Heather -

Thank you, Darlin'.

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Magi -

Yes, indeed!

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Cathy -

Thank you so much for your words. "Beneath the missing moon" can be a lonely place sometimes. I wish you the moon's return.

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Jenny -

Thank you, Doll. Yes - lurking about behind clouded skies.
Serina Matteson Apr 20, 2006, 5:50pm EDT
Excellent. Here's to the clouds breaking and the moons shining return.
David L. Apr 20, 2006, 6:28pm EDT
Serina -

I'll toast to that moon with you, Darlin!
0000-doublel-0000 Apr 20, 2006, 9:41pm EDT
David, a beautiful poem. There's something magical about being out in the dark and looking up at the moon and stars with that special someone.
David L. Apr 20, 2006, 9:50pm EDT
Laurie -

Thank you Darlin'. Yes - of course. What is there about...."Being underneath the moon, with someone special"?
jessie voigts Apr 20, 2006, 11:57pm EDT
oh, david, i love this. perfect! where's bonnie??
David L. Apr 21, 2006, 2:18am EDT
Jessie -

Thanks doll. Bonnie? Underneath an Arizona moon I hope!
Carolyn Madden Apr 21, 2006, 3:19am EDT
The moon and the stars are the same ones you see, it's the same old sun up in the sky.. ahhh, you've given me a John Denver moment David.. thankyou.
Aileen F. Apr 21, 2006, 8:14am EDT
David, this was so poignant, easy to connect to. Well done!
David L. Apr 21, 2006, 1:28pm EDT
Aileen,

Thank you Darlin! :)
0000-ruby2-0000 Apr 21, 2006, 6:13pm EDT
Hi, your poem was very mystical and beautiful. It has deep passion and is emotional. It was excellently written. I love these lines: It gives you the sense of something honorable.
That happens between us,
in the space, only lovers know

Thank you for sharing such a warm poem.
Take care.
David L. Apr 22, 2006, 12:22pm EDT
Ruby -

Again Darlin' - Thanks for such nice thoughts and words.
Nathan Schauer Apr 22, 2006, 1:13pm EDT
The poem has multiple levels - the missing moon (absence of romance?) and the darkness
You can't see - neither can I.
It's not where we thought it would be tonight.
Blindness - physical contact but there is a hint that things are not right
No moon - No you.
Just me, alone.

More proof the cowboy boots are a deceptive - Daveman speak with complex toungue.
David L. Apr 22, 2006, 8:46pm EDT
Nathan - Nathan - Nathan...

Can I hide nothing from your eyes? I mean - really! Thank you for taking the time to comment. Master of my metaphor - I kneel before thee, humbly! ;)
Uhoh, Nathan- back away slowly and don't make any sudden movements. A kneeling kowboy?? I think he's about to go brokeback..
David L. Apr 23, 2006, 5:11am EDT
Hannah -

I think you may be spending too much time with the blueberries, girl!
Leah G. Apr 23, 2006, 9:25am EDT
*chills*

I loved it, David.

*sips blueberry coffee and stares at grey skies*
Why does no one say anything about people like LEAH G??? she's drinking something BLUEBERRY!!!!! why is it always me? is it because i'm canadian, is that it??
David L. Apr 23, 2006, 2:14pm EDT
Leah -

Well at least your drink is coffee! LOL! Thanks for the nice words Darlin'. Watchout for Hannah - she's into the adult blueberry stuff again - she'll go after anyone when this happens. ;)

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Hannah -

I think it may be time to consider a 30 day program. Just how long does it take to dry out from blueberries, anyway? And yes - It's because you're Canadian. We have to give you people up there something to do with your time besides picking berries. *evil thought ensues*
Drying out is just not cool.
We have plenty of other things to do, like make fun of the twangs south of the border- that keeps us really busy. Plus our igloos requre a lot of upkeep.
David L. Apr 23, 2006, 8:07pm EDT
Touche Ms Dreyma, touche! Twangs? Are those anything like cougars? LOL!
Yes, cougars with male parts. See also, bastids.
Donald H. Apr 23, 2006, 8:08pm EDT
Nicley written...! I enjoyed it immensely!
David L. Apr 23, 2006, 8:19pm EDT
ROTFLMAO!
David L. Apr 23, 2006, 8:20pm EDT
Donald -

Thank you, Amigo!
Monica Kennedy Apr 25, 2006, 2:36am EDT
Well done Dave - I bet you had no troubles wooing your lady! LOL! You are very good with words!
Stephen Schneider Apr 25, 2006, 10:11am EDT
Very nice David, the moon is there, missing or not
John F Walter Apr 25, 2006, 12:28pm EDT
Great title. This is a haunting poem about missing somebody. All of your word play adds to the sadness; the use of the prepositions, amid, betwixt, underneath, for example. Your lyric gift is in full gear hear: the language is spare and the use of corporeal vs. incorporeal words--mind/bodies, passion/flesh, for the contrast of how things should be as opposed to how things are, is devastating. Equally brilliant and saddening is the use of the word "Just" as in solo, throughout the poem--"Just me", "Just darkness", "Just me" again, and finally "just you"--finishing the sense of utter separation and loss.
Great work. I see your talent bursting forth now that you've got an audience. I look forward to reading more Kowboy poems.
David L. Apr 25, 2006, 7:37pm EDT
John -

"the use of corporeal vs. incorporeal words--mind/bodies, passion/flesh, for the contrast of how things should be as opposed to how things are, is devastating."

See how your eyes apprehend a poet's work? Your observations are "just" as brilliant as many writer's pieces. Thank you, John!
David L. Apr 25, 2006, 7:42pm EDT
Monica -

Nice to see you again, darlin'. Thank you for the warm comments. It's easy to "woo" your lady - just mean your words!

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Stephen -

Now, look at what you've done....I feel like the kid that just found out Santa Claus isn't real. Damn! ;) Thanks for the nice words, Amigo!
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Mar 8, 2008, 8:46pm EST
With this added to "A Place by the Sea", I feel as if you were going through a very difficult loss. Unfortunately, Gather won't let me access "Purple" for some reason, so I can't see the poem that came in between! This makes it a bit hard to comment.
David L. Mar 12, 2008, 6:34pm EDT
Ann -

Purple is flagged as "adult" so check your settings.
Ann M. (Site Scryer) May 20, 2008, 10:45pm EDT
Purple is wonderful!

On second reading, this reminds me of a poem by John Reed, another Gather poet:

Poem by John Reed

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