~Wide Pen Trippy Sound~

You have that

wide pen trippy sound

clicking over the keys

the vision of her

smooth cream-colored skin

pressed against your thighs

filters in unchecked

Time winds down

reminds you of when

she whispered soft spirals

in your hungry ear

and those words

released the tension

caught in your bones

and your muscles flexed

long and lean

But now

here and now

you are blinded

by those velvet memories

Try as you may

the vision of her

is your Siren

condemning you

to looking back

into that smoky mirror

Lord have mercy

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David W. Jan 25, 2013, 10:09pm UTC

"Try as you may

the vision of her

is your Siren

condemning you

to looking back

into that smoky mirror"

As much in pleasure as in pain. Deftly painted my friend.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 8:20am UTC

Thanks, David.

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A. F. Stewart Jan 25, 2013, 10:21pm UTC

Exquisite, as always.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 8:20am UTC

I appreciate your kind words, Anita.

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JOHN BECK Jan 25, 2013, 10:22pm UTC

Leaving him helpless! Powerful images, Michelle.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 8:21am UTC

They just exploded out of my fingers, John.

JOHN BECK Jan 26, 2013, 8:48am UTC

Thanks for submitting to Gather Writing Essentials. Now featured.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 8:53am UTC

Thank you, John!

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Brian Benson Jan 25, 2013, 10:52pm UTC

Like listening to smooth jazz on the ride home from work. Another beauty Michelle...B

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 8:21am UTC

Thanks, as always, B.

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Kathryn Flynn Jan 26, 2013, 1:40am UTC

Featured in the Triple Name Club.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 8:21am UTC

Thanks, Kathryn!

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Bernard C. Jan 26, 2013, 2:30am UTC

Nice write - quite the acrobatics here

Thank you for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 8:21am UTC

Acrobatics?

Thanks, Bernard.

Bernard C. Jan 27, 2013, 7:19am UTC

Is a private joke LOL no worries :-))

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Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Jan 26, 2013, 7:20am UTC

Wow! Lord have mercy!

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 8:22am UTC

:)

Thanks, friend.

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elizabeth evans Jan 26, 2013, 7:34am UTC

....and when he stares into the mirror, he knows why.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 8:23am UTC

I would hope so. But some people do condemn themselves to the same "Siren" for their entire lives.

Thanks, Bob.

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Chris Brockman Jan 26, 2013, 10:54am UTC

Velvet memories do have their place, and you have found one very good one.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 11:24am UTC

Not sure what you mean, but thank you for reading and commenting, my friend.

Chris Brockman Jan 26, 2013, 11:38am UTC

It's not all bad to indulge in remembering good times. The phrase itself finds a felicitous us in your excellent poem.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 11:40am UTC

Ah, I see how you interpreted the poem now.

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Richard Lynn Livesay Jan 26, 2013, 12:47pm UTC

mmm"looking back into that smoky mirror" like that

Featured on Surreal Circus

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 26, 2013, 12:53pm UTC

Thanks Richard and thank you for the feature!

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Barbara H. Jan 26, 2013, 2:42pm UTC

Feelings such as these always come to the surface unexpectedly to explode upon the page as they have for you....the poet...even the sharp, exquisite emotion is tempered in soft illusion as it is from your everspilling pen...I think it is your manner that allows us mere readers to satisfactorily accept... what we couldn't otherwise there is such a beauty in that manner...Bravo!

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 27, 2013, 9:59am UTC

Thank you so much, Barbara!

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Granny Janny Jan 28, 2013, 6:26pm UTC

The first stanza is not clear to me. pen/keys? Piano keys? Filters in unchecked?
The rest I get and love as well as the image with the poem.

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jan 28, 2013, 6:27pm UTC

I think they should be the type of keys that make sense to you, my friend.

Thank you for stopping by!

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Shelbia C. Jan 28, 2013, 11:39pm UTC

This is wonderful. I especially like the first stanza because i love how the words sound together, but the entire poem is great.

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Marianne K. Feb 7, 2013, 6:45pm UTC

Indeed . . . the curse of memories staining the present. I LOVE how you veiled the beginning and slowly tear the memory apart, confirming the truth in the 'looking glass' which does not lie.

Brilliant, Michelle.

xxxxxx

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