by JOHN BECK
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August 27, 2008

Bards of Heaven and Earth~Glossa attempt (with errors) for Mindful Poetry Jan. FOTM

January 06, 2013 10:22 AM UTC (Updated: January 07, 2013 10:22 AM UTC)
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Bards of Passion and of Mirth,
Ye have left your souls on earth!
Ye have souls in heaven too,
Double-lived in regions new!

We who read enchanted verse

To avoid the boredom curse

Now appreciate their worth

Bards of Passion and of Mirth


Lines that penetrate our souls

As we strive to meet our goals

Hail to those who gave them birth

Bards of Passion and of Mirth


Double-lived in regions new

Ye have souls in heaven too

Ye have left your souls on earth

Bards of Passion and of Mirth.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
The stanza in italics is the "texto" by John Keats from "Bards of Passion and of Mirth, written on the Blank Page before Beaumont and Fletcher's Tragi-Comedy 'The Fair Maid of the Inn'"
This is my first attempt at a Glossa and invite criticism and discussion.

 

Comments: 51

Robert - just a simple man - B. Jan 6, 2013, 10:44am UTC
I shall have to check out the FOTM, and see what dictates a Glossa so that I can do one. I really enjoyed your piece Mr. Beck. Enjoyed it indeed, very good!
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 11:14am UTC
Thank you, Robert. Much appreciated.
A. F. Stewart Jan 6, 2013, 10:54am UTC
A wonderful poem, and I love the choice of subject matter.
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 11:15am UTC
Thanks, Anita.
Richard Lynn Livesay Jan 6, 2013, 11:08am UTC
Keat's statement is very revealing as some say that our "higher self hangs out in "heaven" and with the theory of One, we all(spirit) are everywhere. really interesting form. I wanted the second line to have one more syllable to flow better with the 3 others. the rest is beautiful, John
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 11:15am UTC
Thanks, Richard.
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 11:16am UTC
(Each line has 7 syllables.)
Richard Lynn Livesay Jan 6, 2013, 3:07pm UTC
I'm sorry my miscount I think avoid went through my brain too quick, UR right
elizabeth evans Jan 6, 2013, 12:41pm UTC
Interesting idea that these Bards have a soul that can transcend from heaven to earth. Having known the "purity" the flowers and the birds of heaven, they instruct the earthbound.
Nice choice of texto. Well done with your first attempt.
elizabeth evans Jan 6, 2013, 12:52pm UTC

 Featured in Double-lived Existences at the Triple Name Club.
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 1:13pm UTC
Thanks for the comment and feature, Bob.
Ann Marcaida Jan 6, 2013, 1:15pm UTC
Bards, wise men, and shamans are traditionally the mediators between earthen and otherworldly realms. It's a pleasure to see such perfectly-structured expression, John. Tweeted!
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 1:32pm UTC
Thank you, Ann. I was impressed by Keats' poem.
Ann Marcaida Jan 6, 2013, 1:35pm UTC
I wonder if there's any of his work that's not impressive!
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 1:45pm UTC
Good point!
Ann Marcaida Jan 7, 2013, 10:31am UTC
Featured today in the Twitter periodical Poems and Ponderings.
JOHN BECK Jan 7, 2013, 10:35am UTC
Thanks, Ann. I don't Tweet.
Veronica Hosking Jan 6, 2013, 1:50pm UTC
This is new for me as well. I like how you worked with it. I'm going to have to study the form more and see how to play.
Ditto.
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 3:26pm UTC
Thanks, Roni and Magi. I'll watch for your entries.
Sandi S. Jan 6, 2013, 2:35pm UTC
Brings to mind an image of the work outliving the author. Divine, John. Simply marvelous.
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 3:26pm UTC
Thank you, Sandi.
Priscilla P. Jan 6, 2013, 3:41pm UTC
NOT ONE PRONE TO BEING CRITICAL, ESPECIALLY WHEN I KNOW NOTHING OF THE SUBJEC, I FIND ONLY PLEASURE IN THE TALE AS WELL AS IN THE TELLING.
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 3:48pm UTC
Thank you, Priscilla.
Len Maxwell Jan 6, 2013, 4:14pm UTC
I read Susan's description of the form, didn't understand it, but think that you probably did. It certainly sounds nice.

Thanks for sharing with Gather’s Luminous Writers & Artists.
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 4:41pm UTC
Thanks, Len.
Chris Brockman Jan 6, 2013, 4:35pm UTC
Bravo, John.
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 4:41pm UTC
Thanks, Chris.
JOHN BECK Jan 6, 2013, 5:06pm UTC
As I look at different references on the form, it seems that there should have been six stanzas including the texto and the final inverted texto, with a different line from the text included in each of my stanzas. Some "rules" include 10 lines/stanza and a specific rhyme pattern.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Jan 7, 2013, 12:46am UTC
My very first glossa was from the guidelines I read on Poetic Asides. I never finished the poem because oh my stars! it was difficult! But I'll either finish and post or just post it as incomplete.

However now I am going to bed! I'll come back later to read and comment on this poem. Glad you've left it up!
JOHN BECK Jan 7, 2013, 8:22am UTC
Thanks, Coach. I should have studied the form further prior to posting my first attempt.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Jan 13, 2013, 9:36pm UTC
Oh, dearie, that was a long sleep. I'm only now returning!
Irina Dimitric Jan 6, 2013, 11:51pm UTC
Love the poem, John, but can't say much about the form as it is new to me.
JOHN BECK Jan 7, 2013, 8:14am UTC
Thanks, Irina. I misunderstood the form; I may revise it or start over.
Ms Lee P. Jan 7, 2013, 2:06am UTC
Don't know what a Glossa is but I love your poem. It can be very dangerous to be a double-minded person. I think when I get to heaven I'll leave everything else behind and plant both my feet at the foot of Gods throne and I'll sing my poems to Him - the poems that have been hiding in my soul just waiting.
JOHN BECK Jan 7, 2013, 8:14am UTC
What a beautiful thought, Lee. Thanks for your comment.
Joann B. Jan 7, 2013, 10:10am UTC
I think I don't realy understand what "texto" is; I'm going to have to get that straight.

I really like this, John.
JOHN BECK Jan 7, 2013, 10:18am UTC
Thank you, Joann. As it turns out, I should have used a different line from the texto in each of my stanzas; I used only the first line. So I can't really call this a Glossa. (But I admit I like it anyway.)
Mike Ellwood Jan 7, 2013, 3:33pm UTC
A well-chosen text upon which to expatiate.
The ten-line option would give more freedom to develop the gloss.
You did very well to produce something so polished and so thoughtful so rapidly.
JOHN BECK Jan 7, 2013, 4:22pm UTC
Thank you, Mike. It's a start.
Barbary C. Jan 9, 2013, 6:09am UTC
Perfectly wonderful imagination spans time, Beck and Keats.
JOHN BECK Jan 9, 2013, 8:46am UTC
Thank you, Barbary.
Sheila Deeth Jan 11, 2013, 1:16pm UTC
Beautifully done. I'm learning about this form as I read, and this reads beautifully.
JOHN BECK Jan 11, 2013, 5:43pm UTC
Thanks, Sheila. I "violated" the rules, but I admit that I like the result anyway. I'll try to do a real one some time this month.
Sheila Deeth Jan 11, 2013, 8:15pm UTC
Ah, but rules are made to be broken sometimes.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Jan 13, 2013, 9:39pm UTC
I've no need to expound on how this deviates from the glossa form. We've determined that it does and you've discovered how and where.

Your attempt is recognized and appreciated, John.

Many might gloss over these glossas, not realizing their reflective value. Still waters run deep. You’ve stirred your words well here. Appearing at Mindful Poetry where it is now featured and rightfully so. Our goal is growth, not perfection.
JOHN BECK Jan 14, 2013, 12:06am UTC
Thanks sincerely, Coach.
Angie O. Jan 14, 2013, 12:07am UTC
Glossa or not John, a fine poem.
JOHN BECK Jan 14, 2013, 8:23am UTC
Thanks, Angie.
Mustafa Demiri Jan 19, 2013, 3:43pm UTC
A beautiful work born of a beautiful work...

I wonder how one might compare,
Your soul in heaven with the one you bear,
I imagine both to be equally bright,
As your choices in verse inspire delight.
JOHN BECK Jan 19, 2013, 4:14pm UTC
Lovely comment, Mustafa. Thank you.

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