by Satya Jell
Member since:
September 22, 2009

Rays to dreams and dreams to rays - By Satya Jell and Priya Patel

August 25, 2012 11:11 AM UTC (Updated: August 27, 2012 11:02 PM UTC)
views: 0 | 11 people recommend this | comments: 38
Rays of the rise
Slow around lay
Eyes in dreams sweet
Lashes sway
Rhythm of desires sweet
Wait for them to complete
A heated gaze
Warm with desire
How I long for you
To put out this fire
To fan the flames
You give rise to each day
To hear once again
The way that you say
You love me
Birds agreement express
Chirps low but clear
On hold routine
A special moment this
Watch an eye dream
A dream shared by two
A world where only you
Take me to a place
Of birds and falling leaves
Of cool winter mornings
And long heated retrieves
A dream of my life with you
A world within a world
A universe away
A promise of heaven believe
A root firm in faith
A glimpse as dream today
Hold my hand once again
A new journey we plan
A family again
A world filled with love
And laughter too
A life built on the passions
Between me and you
On words exchanged
Over a period of time
Laced with hopes and desires
A life sublime
Burrow share seeds tucked away
Precious blooms from time
Preserved the rare feeling
A millionth of a morsel
Fuel for life suffice

© 2012

Comments: 38

Audrey Howitt Aug 25, 2012, 1:10pm UTC
This is beautiful---
Satya Jell Aug 25, 2012, 2:27pm UTC
Thanks Audrey, glad you liked it.
Douglas Raymond ROSE Aug 25, 2012, 2:30pm UTC
I love your way with words--Example: time laced with hopes and desires.
Keep it up my friend
Satya Jell Aug 25, 2012, 3:40pm UTC
Thanks Doug for your kind words. Priya co author of this (green) has a very simple beautiful way of expression.
Priya P. Sep 2, 2012, 8:21pm UTC
so sweet of you to say Satya, thank you.
Priya P. Aug 25, 2012, 4:12pm UTC
This is such a special piece of art, I loved writing this with you and you presented here so beautifully. I really love this, thank you for inspiring us to write this, for inspiring me.

Burroughs share seeds tucked away
Precious blooms from time
Preserved the rare feeling
A millionth of a morsel
Fuel for life suffice

This is my favorite - it touches me
Satya Jell Aug 25, 2012, 4:35pm UTC
Very much enjoyed the experience, thank you for enabling feelings that lay dormant brought to life by your sweet presence...
Priya P. Sep 2, 2012, 8:23pm UTC
it is neither you nor me, but us that makes life sweet
Robert - just a simple man - B. Jan 5, 2013, 2:25pm UTC
Priya, one of your broadcast emails brought me here.

This is good stuff. "a millionth of a morsel / fuel for life suffice" - that is damn good writing.

:+)
JOHN BECK Aug 25, 2012, 7:47pm UTC
Beautiful collaboration. Each style unique, yet interplaying to perfection.
Satya Jell Aug 26, 2012, 8:41am UTC
Thanks John for your comments. We really enjoyed working on this together. Funny how it started but as it went on we were amazed and all this was within a few minutes. Generally sometimes I edit my post before i scribble but this one I thought to go as is.
JOHN BECK Aug 26, 2012, 8:55am UTC
I'm glad that you both avoided the temptation to adopt each other's style.
Priya P. Aug 26, 2012, 8:49pm UTC
I've tried, but I can't. His style is very special and unique to him. I'm just too simple to adopt a style as deep as Satyas. I much prefer to see our styles side by side. I really believe it emphasizes how we each feel using different techniques.
Bernard C. Aug 26, 2012, 3:43am UTC
Very nicely put - the reading between the lines - ample and is very well done


Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
Satya Jell Aug 26, 2012, 8:41am UTC
Thanks Bernard for your patronage and comments. Very much appreciated.
stephen berwaldt Aug 27, 2012, 6:20am UTC
Dicotyledon

like a precious flower
love grows
a lively seed that sprouts
sending root tendrils deep
entwining two souls
uniting
obscured the seam
where one ends and the other begins
so sultry, love seethes
long before glorious show
long nurtured, grows
its sweetness beads
on verdant leaves
love lush bursts forth
a burgeoning blossom
when in full bloom
bewitching all
with fragrant beauty

Congratulations...such a lovely collaboration...so much like Love itself
You two are blessed...so many live their whole lives through and never know that Love is real...
Satya Jell Aug 27, 2012, 10:48pm UTC
Touched and humbled by your sweet gracious commentd. We are blessed to experience the heights each time we near and our feelings/respect for each other lights our world bright! Love is a blessing and greater the ambience of love that one finds...
Priya P. Aug 28, 2012, 2:27am UTC
Your poem, as always, is beautiful Stephen as is your comment.:)
ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Aug 27, 2012, 11:57am UTC
How beautiful.
I feel honored to have you both in our community sharing your unique writing styles.
The both of you are such an inspiration.
Satya Jell Aug 27, 2012, 10:49pm UTC
Thank you Carol, we are blessed by all the lovely people that are there for us adding its own layer of sweetness to our lives. The honor is ours.
Alison H. Aug 27, 2012, 4:45pm UTC
Lovely collaboration and expression of love fulfilled.
Alison H. Aug 27, 2012, 4:45pm UTC
Did you mean "burrows"?
Satya Jell Aug 27, 2012, 10:52pm UTC
Thanks Alison for your kind words and correction. I did mean burrows but the word slipped in here because of a short circuit if thoughts, 'self governing hamlet' to a hole;)

Thanks for pointing this out. I just corrected it .
Kathryn Flynn Aug 28, 2012, 3:34am UTC
wonderful.
Satya Jell Aug 28, 2012, 8:27am UTC
Thanks Kathryn, glad you liked it
Pam Brittain Aug 28, 2012, 1:39pm UTC
Wow.
Satya Jell Sep 2, 2012, 7:17pm UTC
Thanks Pam, glad it was able to wow you :)
Barbary C. Aug 28, 2012, 5:58pm UTC
Priya and Satya,

Collaboration is your forte...Into the beauty of poetry we readers gain the best of both your insight and approach to life itself.

Kudos!
Satya Jell Sep 2, 2012, 7:17pm UTC
Thanks Barbara, together in life we have learned and realized so much from each other. More so the feelings that are a humble attempt to capture what we have been blessed with.
Priya P. Sep 2, 2012, 8:25pm UTC
very well said. and so glad that we can share our blessed feelings with friends here. glad that we share it together.
Jedan Payne Aug 29, 2012, 8:25am UTC
That is a wonderful poem. Thank you for sharing it!
Satya Jell Sep 2, 2012, 7:18pm UTC
Thanks Jedan, glad you liked it
Syed The Shah Aug 29, 2012, 8:51pm UTC
One man two shows
Two men one show
:@
Satya Jell Sep 2, 2012, 7:18pm UTC
Thanks Syed, glad you liked it.
René Allen Sep 1, 2012, 11:40am UTC
Excellent! Well put together Satya and Priya!

I'm impressed ~ and I love the signatures ~

Love,
René
Satya Jell Sep 2, 2012, 7:19pm UTC
Long time Rene, glad you liked it.
Phillip DeNise Sep 18, 2012, 11:32am UTC
I love this collaborative stuff!
Connie C. Sep 19, 2012, 10:36am UTC

I am just stopping by once again to let you know that this post/photo was spotlighted in the

What Is Happening Today on Gather ~ Tuesday September 18, 2012

I hope you have time to check out the other spotlighted posts/photos as well.

Sorry I am a day late in letting you know. Have a wonderful day!

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