by Pam Brittain
Member since:
July 16, 2011

Itsy Bitsy Spider

June 18, 2012 04:47 PM UTC
views: 0 | 12 people recommend this | comments: 55

The first stanza of this poem was inspired when I fell in the jacuzzi while trying to read Tracy Fabre's book.  Richard Livesay and a few other Gatherites collaborated on it and here's what came out of it.

 

The itsy bitsy spider
Went down the water spout
Up came the water
And dumped the spider out.

The spider was a swimmer
I let out quite a scream
It swam around like Michael Phelps
I was hoping it was all a dream

It was looking at me like a meal
It's eyes were flashing red
I moved around the jacuzzi
I think it wanted to be fed

i will not scream
i will not shout
i ran to the edge
about to jump out

I splashed a wave, two or three
Into the drain it finally went
Disappeared, went out of sight
But I wondered where it was sent

That night I lay in bed and tossed
Heard a strange scratching sound
Made my way to the bathroom door
You'll never believe what I found

Crawling out of the toilet
Hundreds of eight-legged beasts
Spiders, spiders everywhere
I was caught in a web, for eats

Comments: 55

Debbie W. Jun 18, 2012, 5:36pm UTC
Very good and very scary!
Pam Brittain Jun 18, 2012, 6:10pm UTC
Richard did most of it. The collaboration effort was fun.
Larry H. Jun 18, 2012, 6:34pm UTC
nice poem thanks for sharing
Pam Brittain Jun 18, 2012, 9:33pm UTC
Larry, you're welcome. Still waiting for your post.
Larry H. Jun 18, 2012, 10:57pm UTC
working on one
Tanya P. Jun 19, 2012, 1:52am UTC
Larry, perhaps I should mention this about my sis, Pam. She wants a write from you (for her reasons stated) and she isn't going to let up until you write (or get ticked off at her, which I can't see you doing ;^) ...)

Hey, Pam....♥♥
Larry H. Jun 19, 2012, 11:43am UTC
I posted something did you and your sister comment on it yet??? NO!
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:02pm UTC
Larry, that's not fair. I just turned on my computer.
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:21pm UTC
Found it and it's a wonderful, real to life story. Thank you.
Larry H. Jun 19, 2012, 4:41pm UTC
POSTED IT LAST NIGHT
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 4:48pm UTC
Sorry, Larry, I had computereyetis and watched a movie last night. Antique Road Show and then Young Merlin. I read it this morning and it's wonderful.
Larry H. Jun 19, 2012, 5:00pm UTC
I see
Tanya P. Jul 3, 2012, 2:18pm UTC
***Hanging my head in great shame***

I'm not on here regularly and missed it......after, of course, causing trouble. I'm on my way now and hope you forgive me. ;^)
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Jun 18, 2012, 7:03pm UTC
:)
Pam Brittain Jun 18, 2012, 9:33pm UTC
(:
elizabeth evans Jun 18, 2012, 8:07pm UTC
Well, you wove a rather funny adaptation of a familiar rhyme. Well done.



 Thanks for sharing with Triple Name Club.
Pam Brittain Jun 18, 2012, 9:34pm UTC
Richard and of course Tracy get the credit.
Alice G. Jun 18, 2012, 8:14pm UTC
Sounds like nightmare city to me. I don't have a problem with spiders unless they jump on me then I get freaky. Cute poem!
Pam Brittain Jun 18, 2012, 9:34pm UTC
But, true story. Jacuzzi's sitting around not hooked up and running for 4 years makes stuff happen.
Sam Henderson Jun 18, 2012, 10:03pm UTC
Pam, whether you're the ring leader or not (and if you're not I'm suspecting you are anyway), I'm guaranteed to come out laughing! My collie already knows this. Me, usually quiet at the computer, she asleep and the kitten curled up not far from her, then, seemingly from nowhere, an outlandish burst of boisterous laughter, her ears prick up, her head tilts, "Don't tell me, Pam !" I fall to the floor (almost always) she, forced to get up, tail wagging, licking my nose, yawns and says, "You humans".
Alice G. Jun 18, 2012, 10:23pm UTC
My Emmett is having to endure the same thing!
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:22pm UTC
My bad. I'll try harder. Thanks, Sam and Alice.
Janet "Jax" B. Jun 18, 2012, 10:33pm UTC
LOL...I love it. Spiders don't bother me a bit, but boy does my husband scream like a girl when he gets too close to one.
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:23pm UTC
That's so funny about your husband. Spiders don't usually bother me, but this one cornered me.
Tanya P. Jun 19, 2012, 1:56am UTC
***APPLAUSE*** for all of you. This was so fun.

Pam, do you really have the Jacuzzi connected and working now? Or was that part just wishful thinking. I'm blaming you for the spider nightmares I may have tonight.
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:25pm UTC
Yes, after ?4 years? of owning it, it is now installed and working. Sadly, it's so large, I can swim in it, but it's hard to get out of. After 4 some years, there were quite a few spiders.
Lillith (it's a secret!) Jun 19, 2012, 2:22am UTC
ew! lol
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:25pm UTC
I agree, Lillith.
Toni V. Jun 19, 2012, 2:31am UTC
Ha! That was a lot of fun!
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:26pm UTC
Hi Toni!♥♥♥
William Dotani Jun 19, 2012, 2:37am UTC
LMBO.
I hope your skin is nicely toasted by the Sun for their culinary pleasure.

You need a slight edit.
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:27pm UTC
Is it the small 'i's?
Bernard C. Jun 19, 2012, 3:34am UTC
Jimney Crickets its a spider - arachnaphobia to the rescue..shower cream and soda..squirt now..spiders hate a good clean out :-)) Nice amusing write :-)

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:28pm UTC
That's so funny, Bernard.
A. F. Stewart Jun 19, 2012, 9:13am UTC
A great poem. I loved it.
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:28pm UTC
Thanks, A. F. Something tells me you were happy for the justified ending.
lena k. Jun 19, 2012, 11:45am UTC
very good
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:29pm UTC
Thank you, Lena.
Terranova R. Jun 19, 2012, 12:52pm UTC
How 'itsy bitsy' was that spider?
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:29pm UTC
Not so itsy that they couldn't crawl down the spout.
Patricia J. Jun 19, 2012, 1:09pm UTC
This is a very funny poem, but 800 spiders is kind of an overwhelming thought...i will be itching all day!!
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 1:30pm UTC
That would be - Richard's bad. Thanks, Patricia.
Angela A. Jun 19, 2012, 2:57pm UTC
Eeek, a bad nightmare!
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 3:26pm UTC
Eeek, a mouse. Scream, a spider. Hi Angela.
Angela A. Jun 19, 2012, 4:11pm UTC
Yep, eek and scream, that's what I do when I see a mouse and/or spider
mary v. Jun 19, 2012, 5:09pm UTC
LOL, GOOD ONE.
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 5:11pm UTC
Thank you, Mary.
Jennifer T. Jun 19, 2012, 5:20pm UTC
Haha! That made me laugh!
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 7:09pm UTC
That tickles me. Thanks, Jennifer.
Betty S. Jun 19, 2012, 6:35pm UTC
This is good.. I hope you had a lot of mud dabbers to catch the spiders..or called Orkin one LOL
Pam Brittain Jun 19, 2012, 7:10pm UTC
The mud dabbers in Arizona are aggressive, mean wasps. I think I'll just deal with the spiders and stay out of the jacuzzi.
LaRue B. Aug 17, 2012, 7:29am UTC
Well done!!!
Pam Brittain Aug 17, 2012, 3:50pm UTC
Thank you, LaRue.
Cabriena .. Sep 26, 2012, 11:47pm UTC
A wonderful poem!
Pam Brittain Sep 27, 2012, 2:55pm UTC
Glad you enjoyed it, Cabriena. I'm always surprised to have a comment on a post in the archives. Thanks!

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