by Priya P.
Member since:
December 28, 2010

Hunger in the wild (SunWE - onomatopoeia )

May 21, 2012 01:43 AM UTC
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Crickle and crackle;
the crunching of dry leaves
beneath the angry feet of
wild animals. GRRRRRRROWL!
Ferociously, they trample the ground
anxious to sink teeth into what they have found
Crunching and biting and tearing at flesh
Slurping with tongues wagging in meat killed fresh
And then, the screeching tires from far away
ruining their much awaited buffet
sending the wild beasts scurrying away
And then, tummies' full,
they snore
Until its time to hunt for more;
grrrrrrrowl!!!!

 

© 2012

Comments: 18

elizabeth evans May 21, 2012, 7:30am UTC
Nicely done, Priya. Excellent example of an onomatopoeia poem.


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Priya P. May 22, 2012, 12:26am UTC
Thank you so much :) tell your other half I said hi :)
JOHN BECK May 21, 2012, 8:10am UTC
Well done, Priya.
Priya P. May 22, 2012, 12:26am UTC
I miss doing these prompts. I forget how fun they are
Doug Westberg May 26, 2012, 1:54pm UTC
So don't stop! Well done! Extra points for "crickle"! Thanks for sharing with Sunday Gather Writing Essential!
Cynthia C. May 21, 2012, 8:23am UTC
Thank you for sharing with Sadies Points
Denise L. May 21, 2012, 8:29am UTC
Well, that was certainly graphic. lol
Priya P. May 22, 2012, 12:25am UTC
Uh yeah, I'm do e with horror this week! Lol
Richard Lynn Livesay May 21, 2012, 11:30am UTC
great consise, informative poem with sounds(onomatopoeias)...survival of the fittest..I may have ask you this before but forgot. Is that a picture at Roaring Springs? Texas girl
Priya P. May 22, 2012, 12:24am UTC
It's actually in hawking hills Ohio. Beautiful isn't it. The waterfalls were frozen solid. Feb 27 last year. I went this feb also on the 27th. Some were frozen, others free flowing falls tucked away in beautiful forests. We did a five mile hike
Pam Brittain May 21, 2012, 4:12pm UTC
This is great, Priya. Perhaps too good. Now I have to get that picture out of my head.
Priya P. May 22, 2012, 12:22am UTC
I know right? Pretty nasty stuff!
stephen berwaldt May 21, 2012, 10:54pm UTC
You road-killed the prompt... Great job....

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Priya P. May 22, 2012, 12:22am UTC
:) haaaa cute !
Connie C. May 22, 2012, 12:26am UTC
I wish I had your talent. It is great
Priya P. May 22, 2012, 12:27am UTC
Aww what a sweet thing to say. We all have our own talents Connie. I'm glad writing is mine.
Alice G. May 23, 2012, 5:59pm UTC
Graphic? ye Good? no, excellent You nailed it, Pri.
Laurun M. May 27, 2012, 7:20pm UTC
This is a grrrrreat example.

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