by Jennifer Lee
Member since:
August 20, 2010

Roller Coaster~

April 21, 2012 02:35 AM UTC (Updated: April 21, 2012 02:50 AM UTC)
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In my rear view mirror

A vision of his shadow

Digs heels into clay ground

Rust traps loneliness

On my way back

Home to freedom

Roller coaster rides,

Free offers to get high

Bliss smears in gritty glasses

Ignore history beside lovers

Counting diamonds in velvet

Awake all night, talking

Lies turn into ashes

Urgent red warnings sigh

Blue desperation bleeds

Into an unhealthy cocktail

Of emerald-gold speckles in his eyes

Speed draws me closer to secret needs

Demons dawdle on his shoulder

I’m leaving without him this time

Goodbye chases me

Through dust in a tailpipe






Comments: 24

Linda T. Apr 21, 2012, 2:53am UTC
Jennifer it is so nice seeing you post something. I hope things are good with you.

Reading this poem I felt like I was on a roller coaster for sure. I believe I have had a few relationships that have felt like this.
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:40pm UTC
Things are getting better each day (my confidence especially). I'm walking 2 miles a day which is great! Now, I just need to quit smoking in order to find a guy to date who is of my caliber. Thanks for reading my poem, dear Linda. I also hope you're doing well.
Bernard C. Apr 21, 2012, 5:53am UTC
An interesting ride no less - remember what you loose on the swings you can make up on the roundabouts :-) this being a bit of a tumultous time me thinks - someone better suited is out there :-)

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:42pm UTC
I thank you, Bernard, and I agree. In the meantime, I'm on a path of self improvement (long overdue).
Kathryn Flynn Apr 21, 2012, 7:56am UTC
Excellent,Jen.
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:42pm UTC
Thank you, Kathryn!
Richard Lynn Livesay Apr 21, 2012, 9:54am UTC
"Goodbye chases me
Through dust in a tailpipe"...a beautiful descriptive poem with such feeling

now featured on Surreal Circus
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:43pm UTC
Oh, Richard, you made my day! I worked on this one for quite a while and it's always wonderful to get a feature. Thank you!
Len Maxwell Apr 21, 2012, 11:30am UTC
It's been a while and it's good to see you return with work such as this. Nicely done.

Thanks for sharing with The Triple Name Club.
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:44pm UTC
Thank you, Len! I'm pleasantly surprised that you noticed my absence.
Alison H. Apr 21, 2012, 3:48pm UTC
Beautifully penned, Jennifer. Goodbyes can be difficult but necessary...potent imagery here.
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:45pm UTC
You are so right, Alison, and I appreciate your thoughtful reading.
Chris Brockman Apr 21, 2012, 6:14pm UTC
This is so good, Jennifer! Eat my dust, cowboy!
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:46pm UTC
So, you noticed a bit of improvement in my writing, eh?! Thank you, Chris! I spent extra time on this one.
Angela A. Apr 21, 2012, 6:42pm UTC
That was very lovely!
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JOHN BECK Apr 21, 2012, 7:01pm UTC
Interesting, original metaphors, Jen.
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:47pm UTC
Thanks much, John! Your opinion means a great deal to me.
Kushal Poddar Apr 21, 2012, 9:46pm UTC
Very visual, Jenny.
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Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:48pm UTC
Thank you, Ku! I'll visit your blog asap.
Ms Lee P. Apr 21, 2012, 9:56pm UTC
Very nice.
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:48pm UTC
Thank you, Lee! Hope you're relaxed in your new home.
David W. Apr 21, 2012, 10:32pm UTC
Sad, but wonderful. Welcome home.
Jennifer Lee Apr 22, 2012, 1:53pm UTC
Oh, but it is a happy day when I'm finally free! Thank you, David! Great to be here and see you.
Brian Benson Feb 2, 2013, 10:38pm UTC
Looking back has lead to a better forward, it looks like. Dark, but well done...B

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